Retrieving

Halfway through shampooing the dog, it came....
  
A new idea for a poem.
I tried to scribble it on to the floor with a soapy finger

No one else to tell, except the dog...

He just looked bewildered, and shook his body violently
Splashing water everywhere, erasing my verse....

Quinching that wonderful lightbulb moment.

It was as if it had vanished into thin air
Gone forever.......never to be retrived.....

I asked my dog if he remembered any of what I had said
He just shook himself again, and I let him free...

My retriever ran off, like the words of my poem....
Free at last...free at last....

Retrieving a poem...or a wet retriever....isn't easy....
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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A   Avatar
May 25, 2015 at 5:49 PM
CARRIE, CONGRATS ON YOUR BIG DEAL WIN. ALWAYS ~LINDA~
A  Avatar
May 25, 2015 at 2:36 PM
Sweet win, love Skat
Smith Avatar
May 25, 2015 at 10:18 AM
lol...I have been there many of time...congrats
Allison Avatar
May 25, 2015 at 9:27 AM
Such a clever write Carrie - love the humour - congrats on your win:-) Hugs jan xx
Rv Avatar
May 25, 2015 at 9:05 AM
This is fantastic!! I loved it!! :D :D
Brown Avatar
April 4, 2011 at 5:29 AM
Congratulations on your win Carrie for the contest "The one that got away" sponsored by Thvia. Love, Carol
Guzzi Avatar
April 2, 2011 at 1:58 PM
LOL nice "take" on the one that got away VERY original! Congrad's BIG hugs Light & Love [nothing worse than a wet dog!]
Mehta Avatar
April 2, 2011 at 5:04 AM
Congratulations on the second place win in the contest of Thvia, Carrie
George   Avatar
April 2, 2011 at 2:29 AM
Thanks for making my day, Carrie. That scene is all so very real to me. lol! Love the idea that you used a poem rather than a man. Many congrats on your BIG WIN. Lainie
Horsman Avatar
April 2, 2011 at 12:13 AM
Wow Carrie this is so cool, love the irony of the retriever, also the subject matter here is brilliant. congrats . Harry
Phookan Avatar
April 1, 2011 at 11:35 PM
Marvellous! Exciting stuff that tickled the funny bone, a Good non retrieving dog..Many congratulations on your super win..Gautami
Johnson Avatar
April 1, 2011 at 10:32 PM
What a great take on the contest and you ran away with it. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
Mannan Avatar
April 1, 2011 at 9:49 PM
Haha a good one. the end is super Carrie. many congrats dear friend.
Shetley Avatar
April 1, 2011 at 9:05 PM
I had to choose this poem because I have been here... too many times, different situations. You made me smile.
Sweetheart Avatar
April 1, 2011 at 8:51 PM
Congrats Carrie on your 2nd place win in Thvia's contest with this awesome entry luv.. enjoy .. happy weekend too..
Onclaud Avatar
April 1, 2011 at 8:49 PM
charming! ebst CHEERS of the big win, carrie... :) huggs, nette
Dietrich Avatar
July 14, 2010 at 7:35 PM
LOVE IT, Carrie. This is so clever!! congratulations. LUv, Andrea
Brown Avatar
July 13, 2010 at 12:28 PM
Congratulations Carrie on your win in A Rambling Poet's contest "Did you see my poem, I lost it!". Love, Carol
Sweetheart Avatar
July 12, 2010 at 2:43 PM
Congrats Carrie on your HM in the lost poem contest ..an enjoyable read and wonderful write for a fantastic honor for u to enjoy... with luv..
Derequito Avatar
December 23, 2009 at 9:15 PM
Retrieving a retriever is no sweat. Take it from me, trying to Labrador a Labrador is much, much tougher. Due to its sheer size and power, a Lab could pull you on its leash till you stumble and fall, face down. Our only consolation: we could always write a poem about our fall...face down!!! LOL Fred
Loving Iii Avatar
December 11, 2009 at 4:05 PM
this took me no longer than a minute to read. but thats good. wish i knew what that poem was though. John H Loving III
Plue Avatar
December 6, 2009 at 4:01 AM
We, of the poetic persuasion,share so much,yet we are also different.One things for sure. If we don't write it down. It will be lost forever. I believe we are all poets, some of us just choose to write it down.
Shango Avatar
December 4, 2009 at 6:58 AM
This is a powerful use of analogy, and it took me along a path familiar ... I want to thank for touching the humanity of the artist with mortality of the art. Great write. Peace and love
Lopez Avatar
November 30, 2009 at 7:42 PM
I can identify with the lost thoughts, but i will have to usre my imagination with the dog.... very entertaining..
Ryerson Avatar
November 29, 2009 at 3:18 PM
You got me laughing on this one for sure, Carrie! Who of us can't identify with this? (Carrie's 'Unfinished Symphony' maybe?)...all I can say is I hope you retrieve it...but this will do just fine for now! - Tim
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