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A crisp autumn afternoon 


We strolled hand in hand in the park where we’d first met
It was the prefect place for me to propose
We’d had a whirlwind romance 
You were the girl of my dreams
I thought you felt the same
Your ex boyfriend had jilted you at the altar
I thought you were well and truly over him

I went down on bended knee 
Asked you to be my wife

Suddenly your mobile phone rang … it was him

Your tears fell like autumn leaves
You turned your back on me

I thought I could make you happy 
It was not meant to be …

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Charlie Smith

Date: 12/1/2016 12:54:00 PM

Congratulations Jan, well done...

Jan Allison
Date: 12/1/2016 1:21:00 PM

Thanks Charlie:-) hugs Jan xx

Ralph Sergi

Date: 12/1/2016 12:06:00 PM

Great Win, Jan! Lousy reflection!

Jan Allison
Date: 12/1/2016 12:07:00 PM

lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Ralph Sergi

Date: 12/1/2016 12:01:00 PM

The poor chap was a sap! Beautiful poem and picture Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 12/1/2016 12:03:00 PM

Thanks Ralph:-) hugs Jan xx

Probir Gupta

Date: 12/1/2016 12:16:00 AM

Tears can be so delicate in your poem only ... beautifully executed ... Congratulations for your winning in the contest ....

Jan Allison
Date: 12/1/2016 1:44:00 AM

Thanks so much Probir:-) hugs Janxx

Tamal Kundu

Date: 11/30/2016 11:57:00 PM

Great poem, Jan! Congrats!

Jan Allison
Date: 12/1/2016 1:44:00 AM

Thanks Tamal:-) hugs Jan xx

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores

Date: 11/30/2016 4:59:00 PM

Congratulations Jan in the first placement of the contest. A sad, but well poem.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/30/2016 5:21:00 PM

Wow the contest filled so quickly!!! I am delighted to place so well thank you so much:-) hugs jan xx

Darren White

Date: 11/30/2016 2:25:00 AM

The era of mobile phones.... Good luck in the contest, Jan.... HUGS.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/30/2016 12:23:00 PM

I can live without mine lol it is very basic texts and calls and only for emergency use:-) hugs jan xx

White Wolf

Date: 11/29/2016 11:25:00 PM

Timing is everything! Haha, the poor fella! I wish you well in the contest! A great poem.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/30/2016 12:22:00 PM

Thanks Rick:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 11/29/2016 5:46:00 PM

I think this calls for me to write another "murder" poem!! LOL Loved this one.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/29/2016 5:51:00 PM

Need any help lol:-) hugs Jan xx

David Meade

Date: 11/29/2016 5:27:00 PM

The dreaded cell phone!! Well done Ms. Allison!!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/29/2016 5:45:00 PM

Hi David:-):-) :-) long time no see thanks for dropping by:-) hugs jan xx

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 11/29/2016 4:11:00 PM

I hope she did get to marry her first..at least..after She dumped the poor guy: ). Really enjpyed your sad proposal tale sweetie.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/29/2016 4:13:00 PM

Thanks Charma ... maybe there will be a follow up poem one day!:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/29/2016 2:35:00 PM

goodness, i'm still betting on the guy who proposed... that ex had the nerve to just call via cellphone?... bitterswet and so well relayed, jan!..love this!..huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 11/29/2016 2:36:00 PM

Thanks Nette:-) I never know where my muse will take me ... I do love the contests to inspire me!:-) hugs Jan xx

Chris Green

Date: 11/29/2016 1:30:00 PM

Ahh, that is way too sad, damn cell phones. Well at least I learned something today, make sure she leaves the phone in the car if I am planning on proposing. This was sad Jan and I felt a lump in my throat when I got to the end. I'm thinking he should make her walk home though. I'm certain she can call someone and get a ride. :)

Jan Allison
Date: 11/29/2016 1:49:00 PM

ha ha ha love the final line. Yes those darn mobiles do have a problem of ringing just at the wrong time - thankfully a fiction write, but I guess these things do happen:-( hugs Jan xx