Jan Allison Poet Free verse

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Rejection

A crisp autumn afternoon 


We strolled hand in hand in the park where we’d first met
It was the prefect place for me to propose
We’d had a whirlwind romance 
You were the girl of my dreams
I thought you felt the same
Your ex boyfriend had jilted you at the altar
I thought you were well and truly over him

I went down on bended knee 
Asked you to be my wife

Suddenly your mobile phone rang … it was him

Your tears fell like autumn leaves
You turned your back on me

I thought I could make you happy 
It was not meant to be …

Unrequited Love Contest
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11~29~16

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Charlie Smith December 1, 2016 at 12:54 PM Congratulations Jan, well done... Jan Allison December 1, 2016 at 1:21 PM Thanks Charlie:-) hugs Jan xx

Ralph Sergi December 1, 2016 at 12:06 PM Great Win, Jan! Lousy reflection! Jan Allison December 1, 2016 at 12:07 PM lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Ralph Sergi December 1, 2016 at 12:01 PM The poor chap was a sap! Beautiful poem and picture Jan! Jan Allison December 1, 2016 at 12:03 PM Thanks Ralph:-) hugs Jan xx

Probir Gupta December 1, 2016 at 12:16 AM Tears can be so delicate in your poem only ... beautifully executed ... Congratulations for your winning in the contest .... Jan Allison December 1, 2016 at 1:44 AM Thanks so much Probir:-) hugs Janxx

Tamal Kundu November 30, 2016 at 11:57 PM Great poem, Jan! Congrats! Jan Allison December 1, 2016 at 1:44 AM Thanks Tamal:-) hugs Jan xx

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores November 30, 2016 at 4:59 PM Congratulations Jan in the first placement of the contest. A sad, but well poem. Jan Allison November 30, 2016 at 5:21 PM Wow the contest filled so quickly!!! I am delighted to place so well thank you so much:-) hugs jan xx

Darren White November 30, 2016 at 2:25 AM The era of mobile phones.... Good luck in the contest, Jan.... HUGS. Jan Allison November 30, 2016 at 12:23 PM I can live without mine lol it is very basic texts and calls and only for emergency use:-) hugs jan xx

White Wolf November 29, 2016 at 11:25 PM Timing is everything! Haha, the poor fella! I wish you well in the contest! A great poem. Jan Allison November 30, 2016 at 12:22 PM Thanks Rick:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso November 29, 2016 at 5:46 PM I think this calls for me to write another "murder" poem!! LOL Loved this one. Jan Allison November 29, 2016 at 5:51 PM Need any help lol:-) hugs Jan xx

David Meade November 29, 2016 at 5:27 PM The dreaded cell phone!! Well done Ms. Allison!! Jan Allison November 29, 2016 at 5:45 PM Hi David:-):-) :-) long time no see thanks for dropping by:-) hugs jan xx

Charmaine Chircop November 29, 2016 at 4:11 PM I hope she did get to marry her first..at least..after She dumped the poor guy: ). Really enjpyed your sad proposal tale sweetie. Jan Allison November 29, 2016 at 4:13 PM Thanks Charma ... maybe there will be a follow up poem one day!:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud November 29, 2016 at 2:35 PM goodness, i'm still betting on the guy who proposed... that ex had the nerve to just call via cellphone?... bitterswet and so well relayed, jan!..love this!..huggs Jan Allison November 29, 2016 at 2:36 PM Thanks Nette:-) I never know where my muse will take me ... I do love the contests to inspire me!:-) hugs Jan xx

Chris Green November 29, 2016 at 1:30 PM Ahh, that is way too sad, damn cell phones. Well at least I learned something today, make sure she leaves the phone in the car if I am planning on proposing. This was sad Jan and I felt a lump in my throat when I got to the end. I'm thinking he should make her walk home though. I'm certain she can call someone and get a ride. :) Jan Allison November 29, 2016 at 1:49 PM ha ha ha love the final line. Yes those darn mobiles do have a problem of ringing just at the wrong time - thankfully a fiction write, but I guess these things do happen:-( hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith November 29, 2016 at 1:26 PM So sad Jan. As soon as she took her eyes off him and shifted to the phone he lost. Jan Allison November 29, 2016 at 1:28 PM It is a sad scenario Tim and it must be so difficult to let go and move on especially when your heart is still with another person:-(hugs Jan xx