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Shaped Haiku Poetry Contest
Sponsored by JCB Brul HMS
06/19/25

“” \ \ \ \ \ \ \ “”””””””””””””””””””””””” as \z\e\b\r\a\s\ stampede ”””””””””””””” “” \ \ \ \ \ \ \ ’’’’””””””””””””””””””””””” “”””””””””””””””””””””””””””””””””””””””””””””””””” ”””””””””””””” ‘“”””””””” “””” “”””””””””””””””” undergrowth t~o~r~n and s-h-r-e-d-d-e-d “””””””””””””” ‘“”””””””” “””” “”””””””””””””””” ~~queen~~ant~~in~~ribbons {~~~~~~~~

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thriveni c mysore

Date: 7/2/2025 6:42:00 PM

'in ribbons'! amazing thought, congratulations on your win dear poet. Cheers!!!

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/3/2025 3:17:00 PM

Thank you Thriveni, yes figuratively and literally in ribbons, cheers David

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 7/2/2025 7:07:00 AM

oooh...nicely done David! Congratulations! :)

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/2/2025 1:49:00 PM

Thanks Alice, stampedes are always highly unpredictable, lol! Cheers David

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/1/2025 9:45:00 PM

Very creative. Fun last line!

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/2/2025 12:29:00 AM

Stampede’s are quite chaotic, hopefully I captured some of the madness in my haiku, cheers David

Ink Empress

Date: 6/21/2025 8:47:00 AM

Dear David, This is creative and very artistic how youv done the shape haiku, often it isnt the shape that is hard but also theme and subject that is difficult to come up with , but this makes me think that you dont really run out of ideas, and also your words do show the readers that you write from a very observant and empathetic place, a soul and pen that is a feeler. Pleasure visiting, sending you light always! Best wishes for the contest.

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/21/2025 2:01:00 PM

Hey there Ink, hope you’re keeping well, I definitely write from a deep place, and do possess some empathy, possibly not enough, such it is to be human ;) yeah I wrote the haiku for the contest, and the shape kinda developed later on, I’m happy with how it turned out, thanks so much for visit, encouraging words, and light, cheers David

Jaymee Thomas

Date: 6/19/2025 9:57:00 AM

Wow, I don't usually love shape poetry but dangit this is so clever I can't help myself. You had me at z\e\b\r\a\s. I'm so jealous that now I have to try one xD

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/19/2025 11:03:00 AM

Heya Jaymee, possibly one of my better haiku’s, was a shame I had to put it through the character shredder, but needs must be met lol! Cheers David