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Redamancy

A leaf will tremble
As the traveler moves on
Do you see me here, falling?

My love, forever
I will dare to reach for you
And hold you close to my heart.

autumnfirst lovei lovesedoka

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Linda Alice Fowler

March 6, 2024 at 6:19 AM

I love the shift in mood from falling to holding. Very nice Jua! Congratulations! :)

Beata Agustin

March 5, 2024 at 12:55 AM

Wow! Congrats. Your first post is a winner. Thanks for sharing this delightful and delighting sedoka. God bless you.

I Am Anaya

March 4, 2024 at 8:21 AM

Beautiful. Congratulations on your win. Jua Ng! I Am Anaya

Suzette Richards

March 3, 2024 at 11:51 PM

Congratulations Jua Ng (an interesting name, meaning "John 7") on your 2nd place. The image of the trembling leaf and the reference to "falling" in the first tercet, are effectively contrasted with reaching and holding the person close in the second tercet -- the mood change is subtle. The final lines of each verse demonstrate the crux of the matter.

Beata Agustin

February 21, 2024 at 7:42 PM

Thanks for sharing this... exposing your thoughts through your unique poetic style. Welcome to Poetry Soup. I welcome you with the love of the Lord, expressed by John 3:16 of the Bible, "For God so loved the world, that he gave his only begotten Son, that whosoever believeth in him should not perish, but have everlasting life." Be blessed.

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