Red Rising Sun

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Opened the door to the porch facing east and the sun was red..Then next thing into the kitchen seeing a tiny rose bud with a hummer drinking nectar...

. The sun rose red. Hummer fed fast Rose, instead slow. Tiny though it was. Hummer's buzz sound Was applause, though Inspired by Dr. Ram's contest Not an entry My first Than-Bauk. Thanks for the challenge!

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Windyann Plunkett

Date: 8/22/2011 10:39:00 PM

Beautiful imagery with so few words. Read a lot of your poems tonight, awesome stuff.

Don Johnson

Date: 8/10/2011 1:03:00 AM

love it babe, humming bird? and rose... here it would be rosella parrot with reds and greens and yellows n blues....great little poem . xo, Don

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/8/2011 3:18:00 PM

a first try that is so perfectly woven together in perfect form, sara.. i like the gentle buzz of your words..:) huggs, nette

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 8/8/2011 2:51:00 PM

very nice use of new form Sara and a vivid picture of that little hummer so delicately feasting on the red rose.. good luck in the contest luv..

James Foulk

Date: 8/8/2011 2:32:00 PM

this form i have never heard of before, but I like it. a very good piece you wrote. thank you for commenting on Under the Stars, and yes i remember you telling me about your sur. it takes time, i have had back trouble since i was a kid, would not know what it would be like if i went one year with no pain, i keep hurting it from time to time but am starting to feel a little better.

Zzzzz Zzzzz

Date: 8/8/2011 12:20:00 PM

Nicely done, Sara. Good, strong imagery here! xoxo Robert.

Russell Sivey

Date: 8/8/2011 11:40:00 AM

I enjoyed your write! Thank you for sharing this with us!!

Jack Horne

Date: 8/8/2011 11:37:00 AM

Lovely imagery, my friend

Robert Johnson

Date: 8/8/2011 9:41:00 AM

We woke early this morning and hit the road. The sky was painted the most vibrant red horizon I can remember ever seeing. I always seem, lately to find a poem on here that connects with a situation I have experienced in recent times.