Red: Once Upon a Time

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Out for a clandestine walk in the dark wood, I kept my curls covered with a bright red hood. I sensed a baleful presence, creeping very near so I stopped a moment to listen with keen ear. A rustling of fallen leaves grabbed my attention but it was only Canis, so I felt no apprehension. Canis, my love, has taken the wrap for the death of Granny, by eating her til she took her last breath. The naughty wolf of fearful legend is not a wolf at all! He comes to me each time he hears my wanton call. And Granny? That evil witch was not related to me. She cast a spell on Canis, killing her would set him free. I tricked her to call me for herbs needed for a spell. When I knew she'd be home, it was Canis I did tell. He is not a carnivore. He'd never eat that old thing, but he did take her life, and he took her diamond ring. We're meeting in this dark forest to share our victory over the real villain of the tale. That witch is history! And it was her old bloodshot eyes that grew so big, when she saw the shovel Canis would use to grave dig. Beneath barren trees, we wait the stroke of midnight for the spell to be broken and the end of Canis' plight. We'll share bread, gruyere, and a fine Bordeaux wine. I am Red, and this is the truth, because the tale is mine. ccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccc 1/26/2016 Once Upon A Time Contest Sponsored by Laura Loo

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Date: 2/8/2016 8:07:00 AM
Congratulations on the placement of the contest Lin.
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Date: 2/7/2016 10:19:00 PM
Love the story, Lin! Congratulations on your win Hugs Eve
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/8/2016 2:48:00 AM
Thank you, Eve.
Date: 2/7/2016 6:34:00 AM
Congrats on a great win Lin!
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Date: 2/7/2016 6:37:00 AM
Thanks a lot, Joseph ;)
Date: 2/7/2016 1:39:00 AM
Deeply darkly, worthy win. Congratulations, Lin. Viv x
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Date: 2/7/2016 6:36:00 AM
Thanks ever so much, Viv.
Date: 2/6/2016 5:39:00 PM
LQQK...at you Girl..You're In It To Win It...and you do......Congratulations....
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Date: 2/6/2016 5:51:00 PM
Merci beaucoup, Judy!
Date: 2/6/2016 11:45:00 AM
How interesting! Spell, herbs wine! Congrats on your first place Lin!
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Date: 2/6/2016 12:05:00 PM
Thanks, Balveen. The story was written but when I found this picture I had to make use of that wine!
Date: 2/6/2016 11:22:00 AM
Congratulations on your First Place win, Lin. You used amazing imagination in retelling this tale! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 2/6/2016 12:01:00 PM
Thanks, Sandra. Your comments are so nice to read.
Date: 2/6/2016 11:08:00 AM
simply red!..congrats on your award, lin!..huggs
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Date: 2/6/2016 12:00:00 PM
Thanks so much, Nette.
Date: 2/6/2016 10:56:00 AM
Dropping back with my congrats Lin:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 2/6/2016 11:59:00 AM
Thanks a bunch, Jan, and those same congrats go right back to you.
Date: 2/6/2016 10:44:00 AM
Lin, thank you for being apart of my contest! Your poem was amazing, as always :)-luloo *smiles*
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Date: 2/6/2016 11:58:00 AM
Thank you very much, Laura...what a nice compliment.
Date: 1/28/2016 8:00:00 AM
A compelling write...nicely penned
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/28/2016 3:02:00 PM
Thank you very much, Joseph.
Date: 1/28/2016 2:30:00 AM
Love your unique take on the theme Lin fabulous rhyme and it flows so well - I'm really enjoying reading these creative interpretations of the fairytales. I chose this one too:-) hugs Jan xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 1/28/2016 3:03:00 PM
Oh Lin I hope she gets well soon:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 1/28/2016 3:01:00 PM
Thanks, Jan. I've been with my sister in the hospital for almost 2 days, so I have catch-up reading to do...I'll look for yours.
Date: 1/26/2016 8:27:00 PM
A very clever twist on the fairy tale, indeed!good job, Lin :)
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Date: 1/28/2016 2:59:00 PM
Thanks for the great comment, Laura.
Date: 1/26/2016 6:21:00 PM
so you and canis killed that witch?! you need to show proof now, you've not followed the rightful code of law....am gonna sue you!...lol, well written Lin, i was scared at first, thought you may be walking into a rapture...best of luck in the contest
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Date: 1/26/2016 6:29:00 PM
Not guilty, Sage. Not even close.... all I did was bring some herbs to the cronie. ;) and if I were you I wouldn't threaten Canis...catch my meaning? Thanks for your humor and great comments.
Date: 1/26/2016 4:15:00 PM
Very very funny. A lot of thought? Oh well, still A7
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Date: 1/26/2016 4:23:00 PM
Not a lot. I wrote a rough draft then looked it over and made a few changes. Walking away and then editing works best for me. Thanks for finding it funny. Laura said she wanted modern versions, so there it is ;)
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