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Reclaim Summer

His lover, sits and waits there by the water, singing her song. Outstretched hands, reaching towards the horizon, wishing him home. If only, she could raise him up, reclaim summer, from the deep. For Debbie Guzzi's, Sijo Strings contest. First attempt at this form.

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Date: 4/17/2018 5:03:00 PM
So very beautiful Rick. I have tried a sijo for the first time today. Though to be honest the more information I triy to delve into regarding this form the more confused I get. There seems to be conflicting information at times. Again this was beautiful Rick!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/18/2018 8:00:00 AM
Thanks Flo. I don’t know if I got it right but I like the feel of this one.
Date: 7/4/2014 6:17:00 AM
Sensational Sijo, Richard.I can see her sitting there and hear her yearning voice. Many congrats on your win. Lainie
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/4/2014 7:45:00 AM
Thanks Elaine.
Date: 7/3/2014 10:05:00 PM
Hmmm, as you see by your win. I was RIGHT. Congrats on your well deserved win.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/4/2014 7:47:00 AM
Thanks Andrea.
Date: 7/3/2014 5:50:00 AM
A romantic write with sad sap, Richard, congrats on the win
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/3/2014 8:21:00 AM
Thanks Dr. Ram.
Date: 7/3/2014 2:15:00 AM
This "little" sijo has such a moving last line.. while reading this pulls one in the deep.. Great -- really! Many many congrats!! With the write itself AND the win.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/3/2014 9:15:00 AM
Thanks Elly.
Date: 7/2/2014 5:45:00 PM
Hey there, I am so happy to see you on the winners list with it, it is a very terrific sijo :)
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Date: 7/2/2014 5:13:00 PM
Ohhhhh I remember the novel of N. Sparks... Lil sad Sijo...:) congrats Sir..:)
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Date: 7/2/2014 3:04:00 PM
Excellent job of making the bits stand alone & together, bang up last line ;) & last 3 words Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/3/2014 9:17:00 AM
Thanks Deb, I enjoyed the challage writing in this form. It's harder than it looks.
Date: 7/2/2014 2:34:00 PM
Richard, I like the quick shift of the last line from hope and anticipation to the reality of despair. Great first attempt. Congratulations.
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Date: 7/2/2014 1:55:00 PM
Great romantic write Richard ,, reflects sadness as we r done wid the read ,, worthy of top win ! Big Congrats !
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Date: 7/2/2014 1:37:00 PM
Congrats on a great win with this heartfelt write, Richard my friend. Hugs.. Arlene
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Date: 7/2/2014 1:18:00 PM
Sad and romantic; very touching. A merited top winner. Congrats Richard.
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Date: 6/22/2014 1:08:00 AM
This is a very soulful and emotional write of longing for what was lost.... It reminds me of my poem "Her Heart Is The Sea", which I think you commented on before.... Good luck in Debbie's contest, Richard. This looks like a tough form to get right.... Thank you so much for the placement in your contest, by the way!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/22/2014 7:05:00 AM
You are most welcome Kelly, I'm glad you participated in my contest.
Date: 6/14/2014 9:41:00 PM
I don't know much about forms, but you have said a lot here, you could read into this many things, great write! ummm and a deep write!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/15/2014 8:49:00 AM
Thanks Arthur, it was hard to have each line stand on it's own. I tend to have trouble with the Asian forms. I did enjoy the challange this presented.
Date: 6/12/2014 11:13:00 PM
Rick, this is beautiful... GL in the contest... Verlena
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/13/2014 8:58:00 AM
Thanks Verlena, a little luck couldn't hurt.
Date: 6/12/2014 8:53:00 AM
wow, this is SO deep!! One of the very best for her contest. I tried to understand her directions but was still unclear if she wanted more than one. So I looked up sijo strings on google and saw many examples of long ones and I figure she wanted a few sijo but I think in her rules she tells us that one is ok. Where this one so clearly has an ending, I think it is awesome as one great sijo. Not so sure that all four of mine can stand alone as each their own sijo.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/13/2014 8:57:00 AM
Thanks Andrea, I hope you are right.
Date: 6/12/2014 8:00:00 AM
So romantic and sad...waiting for a lost love that can never return.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/12/2014 8:28:00 AM
Yes that would be a sad predicament.
Date: 6/11/2014 5:55:00 PM
Romantic... I loved it! :) Ana
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/12/2014 8:29:00 AM
Oops I meant Ana.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/12/2014 8:28:00 AM
Thanks Anna.
Date: 6/10/2014 8:55:00 AM
This is so romantic and sweet, Richard. It makes the heart sing.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/11/2014 8:08:00 AM
I wondered about that from below line.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2014 7:23:00 AM
Thanks Eileen, I'm not sure if people picked up on the surprise third line. In this poem her lover had died and sunk to the bottom of the Sea.
Date: 6/9/2014 8:19:00 PM
Richard, wow.. What a soft touch!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/9/2014 11:06:00 PM
Thanks Dave.
Date: 6/9/2014 4:49:00 PM
such a romantic gentle write Richard. Good luck in the contest. hugs Jan xx
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/9/2014 11:07:00 PM
Thanks Jan
Date: 6/9/2014 4:34:00 PM
Reads like a winner to me..Enjoyed reading this creative work..Thanks for the visit to say congrats.Sara
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/9/2014 11:08:00 PM
Thanks Sara
Date: 6/9/2014 1:07:00 PM
The second line so soft..:) the picture is a hopeful one..:)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/9/2014 11:09:00 PM
Thanks Olive.
Date: 6/9/2014 10:57:00 AM
Oh so profound, with a sensitivity few can reproduce, yet you do it with ease
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/9/2014 10:59:00 AM
You are kind my friend. So nice to have you back on the soup.
Date: 6/9/2014 10:38:00 AM
I don't know anything about Sijo form, but your poem is beautiful. I love the images :) well done and smoothly romantic :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/9/2014 10:41:00 AM
Thanks Casarah, I had thought this was my first one but I checked and this is my second. I hope I got it right. I appreciate your thoughtful comment.