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I wrote this poem last year. I posted this on PS, but took it off. I decided to 'give it another run'. Enjoy.
This poem is written in the Sestina form. Raw Emotion Under the cloak of anger, In a world full of despair, Surrounded by misery and pain, Engulfed in darkness, Loss of hope, No control. To keep oneself under control, Fight through the darkness, confront your anger, Don’t give in to despair, search for hope, The search can be painful and full of despair, Lead me out of this angry darkness, Help me control the pain. I can’t deal with this pain, I am lost in the darkness, out of control, Totally lost, totally dark, Searching, hoping, use that anger!, Break through the darkness, conquer despair, It is within your control, give in to hope. Despair is neutralized within the realm of hope, You cannot control the pain, Anger is the offspring of despair, Which cannot be defeated, only controlled, This desperate child named anger, Sits silently cold, in the darkness. God, relieve me of this anger, take this darkness, End this pain, restore my hope, Give me the control to master this anger, So I can leave the darkness and end the pain, I am asking for less anger and more control, Grant my prayer, O’ Lord, end my despair. Totally lost and completely desperate, Angry and confused within the dark, Hopelessly lost, losing control, Searching for answers, needing hope, To lift this darkness and end the pain, I don’t want to be controlled by this anger. Never get so desperate as to lose control, Even if it’s painful and dark, Rely on hope to deal with that anger. Original poem written by S.Ronthorpe © 2011

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 12/5/2015 9:14:00 AM
What a lovely poem! Spectacular and mind romancing. A 7 and an excellent share
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Date: 5/20/2013 5:42:00 PM
This Sestina is great for the content. It really resonates with the end words and wrestles with the thoughts. Welcome back and Congratulations on your Lifetime membership.
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Date: 2/25/2012 6:42:00 AM
plenty of feeling here Samuel, like this form you chose as well. enjoyed. harry
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Date: 2/21/2012 3:11:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your work this afternoon...Those Sestinas are not easy to write...Thanks for stopping by..Your presence at my work was uplifting..Sara
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Date: 2/21/2012 2:26:00 PM
Wonderfu,l captivating write Samual, thank you kindly for your comments, love Elizabeth
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Date: 2/20/2012 11:37:00 PM
St. Thomas Aquinas named "anger" as one of the seven deadly sins. You have written this piece quite well.
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Date: 2/20/2012 9:27:00 PM
Wow. I really like this! And great advice too. Always, Laura
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Date: 2/20/2012 7:38:00 AM
Very intresting, i love this piece of poetry... Chile
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Date: 2/19/2012 7:27:00 PM
S. ROnthorpe... I think your poem can be a lesson to some of us... especially when it comes to facing fears... and asking God beyond control... this is a poem... I'm glad ,,i stopped by to read tonight... thank you always...pd
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Date: 2/19/2012 6:47:00 PM
Samual....kinda 12-step stuff! I like it! jimbo
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Date: 2/19/2012 5:31:00 PM
Sam, you did very well with the poetry form of sestina. I rarely use this form because of it seems so long, but I like how you used varying sentence lengths to tone that down. Not too emotional at all, my friend!! WAs I one who saw your stalking poem? I bet I liked it!!
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Date: 2/19/2012 3:54:00 PM
Great wiriting Samuel and emotional but not too emotional for me. Love, Joyce
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Date: 2/19/2012 3:28:00 PM
I've only tried this form once and found it very hard, Samual - you've made it look so easy! Many congrats on your wins : )
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Date: 2/19/2012 1:48:00 PM
This is very powerful, Samual. You are wise to acknowledge your anger issues and wiser to try and control them. Thank you for sharing this very emotional and personal write. Love, Kim
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Date: 2/19/2012 1:00:00 PM
Thanks for all your kind comments. This poem was written last year and has a special meaning for me. I have anger issues and this work is my way to 'tell myself', how to deal with it. It works, for me. This is one of those works I would normally not let others read (I have many of these that no one reads but me). If someone else finds solace in these words, I take that as a compliment. I will only have this work listed here for a month or 2. Thanks again.
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Date: 2/18/2012 9:19:00 PM
Sam, description of anger, perfect. It will take control, But put that faith in gear and pray, pray, pray. Tomorrow will be anew day. From experience and God Bless. Avis
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Date: 2/18/2012 9:13:00 PM
Ah. I was unfamiliar with the style so the repeating words threw me off at first. This is a wonderful message that I think needs to be projected a LOT more than the gloomy and hateful poems. Why make yourself feel even more sad, you know? Anyway, excellent job on writing in this interesting style.  -KMD
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