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Rat Race

O squalling baby fat and red, Laying on your nursery bed, Clamber down onto the floor, Crawl or toddle out the door. Go to school. Graduate. Take another for your mate. Get a job and buy a home, Raise a family of your own. Save your money to retire, Watch your grandkids and admire. Now you're old and life is done, Did you have a little fun? O squalling baby fat and red, You've just been born, and now... You're dead.

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Funom Makama

Date: 4/20/2015 9:01:00 AM

Wow! This is without a doubt a 7. I am so voracious for more of your lines right now and I definitely will come by to enjoy the bliss of your words.

The Grahamburglar
Date: 4/20/2015 11:33:00 AM

Thank you for your kind and encouraging comments. I am glad you enjoyed it.

Judy Konos

Date: 4/16/2015 10:16:00 PM

OMG-You're the funniest guy in the whole world! LOL

The Grahamburglar
Date: 4/16/2015 11:25:00 PM

If only that were true...haha.

Trevor Mcleod

Date: 4/16/2015 4:21:00 PM

Very good Preston. It seems nice and simple, but I'm sure it took some work to make it come off this way. Well done!

The Grahamburglar
Date: 4/16/2015 11:25:00 PM

All poetry takes a little...errr...finessing. But overall, this one was probably not as hard to do as some. It is simple, and that was kind of intentional, I suppose. On this one I was aiming more for the quick tempo than the impressive vocabulary. Easy words tend to be easier to write. In any case, I'm glad you enjoyed and thank you for the encouraging words.

Sulakshana Bhattacharya

Date: 4/16/2015 2:58:00 PM

Rat race. Aha.. All the fat rats we are..born and now dead. Yet you are a rat here who enjoys his cheese and leaves some for fellow rats... some 'food for thought'! Great write Preston. And not boring at all. :)

Tonytocaa Camacho

Date: 4/15/2015 7:39:00 PM

A funny tale that's true,like the way you did it Preston thanks tonytocaa

Barbara Briggs

Date: 4/15/2015 6:39:00 PM

Your writing is unexpected and fun. This is the third one I read and enjoyed them all!

The Grahamburglar
Date: 4/15/2015 7:37:00 PM

Thank you. I tend to be a little random when I write. I keep a journal and a lot my poetry stems from other things I've written there. A lot of my writing is kind of contemplative and probably, boringly serious. I am glad that you think it's fun. =)