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written for raindrops contest sponsored by Jcb Brul

As the sky weeps in periwinkle petals of multicolored roses, rinsed in lemons, and lavender, the poet within me releases a bougainvillea bouquet of unfiltered gratitude, swaying to the celestial duet orchestrated by the angel of raindrops, adorned in braided wildflower crowns and windswept wishes, echoing dulcet melodies rendered in whimsical accents. I ponder, if tears had a tune, would it be the sound of drizzling dewdrops? Would you then feel the pain I carry, veiled in smoky silence? Or would I forever be the silhouette cloaked in fogs of charcoal confusion, too dark to be deciphered by the fragmented eyes that eulogize all that sparkles and glows? But when stained sunflowers swirl beneath starless spheres, scattering seeds of sorrow to cultivate a garland of grief, puddled with poignant poems, I remain throned, as the goddess of black rain, riddled with cosmic rituals, sprinkling kaleidoscopic dust upon forsaken fields, while listening to the drifting leaflets in crisp air, pleading for the demise of my unfaltering faith, oblivious to the truth that I fear not mists of melancholy. I surf through surging seas, unafraid of twirling torrents and blazing tides, piercingly striking shimmering sapphires floating in deafening despair. There in the abyss of obscurities, I’m nestled within restlessness, in rooted resilience, like a perplexed paradox weaving crippled odes to the sun that longs to rise and sail, splashing hues of cinnamon clemency. Tonight, I’m counting crooning comets, amidst quivering hailstones, dancing in cataclysmic rhythm above, to find my home within an island of daphne dreams and singing seashells. For I hear the flaming flowers in their solitary stillness serenade rain rhapsodies, to awaken the petrichor soul of heavy horizons, wrapped in stringed milky-quartz beads, bursting forth blooming tomorrows, illuminated by chamomile water, concocted from charismatic spring falls… Yet I think of us, engrossed in umbrella moments, Cupid too envied this symphony of romance where love conquered all, and grief but a blurred memory, in sunlit souvenirs of yesterday.

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Date: 6/29/2024 10:53:00 AM
Quite a nice winner.I especially like the line, "Yet I think of us, engrossed in umbrella moments".Way to go. Congratulations to you. Sara K
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Date: 6/28/2024 4:15:00 AM
"I ponder, if tears had a tune, would it be the sound of drizzling dewdrops? Would you then feel the pain I carry, veiled in smoky silence?" - Very powerful questions bring out inner feelings. Congratulations!
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Date: 6/26/2024 12:57:00 PM
Back with my congrats and waiting on a new poem from you. I am finally caught up with poetry comments!! I'll check email one more time and then get home early for a change!
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Date: 6/25/2024 9:03:00 AM
WOW!!! Congratulations on your win. What an amazing "Raindrops" write. Your pen was working overtime on this one. "Love It"  What A Great Ending.... Have a wonderful day with your win..............
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Date: 6/23/2024 4:39:00 AM
Such an inviting write, speaking joy through the heart and music over the thoughts. A beautiful read indeed. God bless you always, sweet lady, much love, Gina PS: I truly hope that nothing I have ever said about my personal faith has in any way hurt or offended you. I consider you a kind and tender heart. Much love
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Ink Empress
Date: 6/23/2024 7:56:00 AM
Dear Gina, i did not think anything bad about your faith, it is the same for us muslims, i am not offended but rather worried that i might have offended you and so many other soupers, i do not believe in horoscopes but i was referring to gemini as a constellation. Thank you for your kindness and support always, i appreciate your poetic presence. I think of you as a very tender heart too. And very talented. Sending you always light
Date: 6/22/2024 5:36:00 PM
Great one as always Dear Ink. Your metaphors are so royal. Lovely alliterations you've got there as well. "I’m nestled within restlessness, in rooted resilience, like a perplexed paradox weaving crippled odes." So powerful and relatable. Hugs.
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Date: 6/21/2024 6:15:00 AM
IE, the critics point out that rain marks a transition in a movie or story. Some things get washed away, "Umbrella moments" is a very powerful image. A real gem. Nice to try to hold on to some things at least for a while! You are so different in style and expression from my own methods, that being here to read what you write is a real trip indeed. It takes me some time to navigate because I don't think and perceive quite the way you do, but still there is great pleasure in doing so.
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Date: 6/20/2024 5:17:00 AM
If I were pressed to select just one line as my favorite from your alliterative achievement, I could not! For nearly every line could then be in contention. Yet, I am drawn, oh creator of " Angel of raindrops. to 'Sunlit souvenirs of yesterday" A beautiful read this is!!
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Date: 6/19/2024 9:48:00 PM
Once again hats off dear friend... How you have mixed raindrops with tear drops and unveiled a stygian mind with cumulonimbus clouds about to burst..... but always veiled in foggy mist. Your diction and the emotions you convey through compelling metaphors are stunning and phenomenal. As you say- "I surf through surging seas, unafraid of twirling torrents and blazing tides, piercingly striking shimmering sapphires floating in deafening despair", you also hear "the flaming flowers in their solitary stillness serenade rain rhapsodies, to awaken the petrichor soul of heavy horizons, wrapped in stringed milky-quartz beads, bursting forth blooming tomorrows" This ability to see and experience the ambivalence of life with sorrow and joy, despair and hope and the ability to spring back with resilience have made your life what you are today. This poem I rate as one of your very best and into my FAVE.
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Date: 6/19/2024 7:58:00 PM
Waiting on your bio!
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Date: 6/19/2024 2:28:00 PM
Your poem is an anthology of adjectives, I think, JCB will love this poem.. begins with a vivid and enchanting image: "As the sky weeps in periwinkle petals of multi-coloured roses," setting a tone of both beauty and sorrow. The use of colour—periwinkle, lemons, lavender—creates a painterly scene, suggesting a world where even the sky’s tears are transformed into something beautiful. It is a masterful interplay of vivid imagery, emotional depth, and lyrical beauty. It captures the complexities of sorrow, resilience, and the search for meaning, culminating in a poignant affirmation of love and hope.
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Date: 6/19/2024 12:19:00 PM
Just beautiful, very haunting, your writing exceeds all prose in my mind- enjoyed reading <3
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Date: 6/19/2024 9:44:00 AM
I like how you pondered if raindrops had a tune. In the video I sent you on heaven, it is interesting that those who visit there will see things in unusual ways in which the senses get combined. Flowers sing and colors have tunes, for example. You would fit right into heaven very well!
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Date: 6/19/2024 9:28:00 AM
A lively poem that surpasses all. Great contrasts with plenty of images and soul searching ideas.
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Date: 6/19/2024 8:15:00 AM
Dear Empress, Okay, this one is so full of emotions. I could just tell that each thread was spun from the fabric of your soul. I would definitely say that as the sky weeps in periwinkle petals, your unfiltered gratitude blooms—a bougainvillea bouquet swaying to celestial duets. Also, as I read this I wondered, if tears had a tune, would they echo the drizzling dewdrops? What is there not to like about this poem? I think, Empress that you remain throned as the goddess of black rain with a sprinkling kaleidoscopic dust upon forsaken fields. A FAV for sure. - Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 6/19/2024 5:23:00 AM
Your final stanzas always seem to really rock. So dreamy and romantic. Does your hubby/bf love your poetry? In any case, raindrops were never prettier than when dropping from your pen
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Date: 6/19/2024 5:52:00 AM
Well, aren't you the party girl? Would love to see you in action. Vid please
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Ink Empress
Date: 6/19/2024 5:45:00 AM
Hahah he hates reading. Thank you you are so kind dear tomsz. Im grateful. Wrote this just before i took off jet skiing! I think i might have been a bit too bla bla. Thank you again
Date: 6/19/2024 3:15:00 AM
A lovely way with words!!! Beautifully written!!
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Date: 6/19/2024 2:59:00 AM
Excellent weave of love & sorrow, raindrops & sunlight & of course the many coloured flowers rain & sun brings. My best line is “ I remain throned as the goddess of black rain, riddled with cosmic rituals...” I also like - I’m nestled within restlessness, in rooted resilience..like a perplexed paradox > so full of opposites this poem, it gives a pure poetic slant on raindrops. Lots of hugs your way. Xx
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Date: 6/19/2024 2:49:00 AM
Lovely write Ink enjoyed reading your poem with my coffee today many blessings have a wonderful day
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Date: 6/19/2024 2:27:00 AM
Another masterpiece …. You never fail to amaze me .
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