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Rain

The swell of cloudburst pours its showers; gently tapping on night’s dewy aisle while raindrops spill like pearly dots, along a lush garden where ringlets flit. O but that smile enthralls dusk’s approach, upon her glow bridal buds enhance as drizzles change hues in sky’s finery, her gushes bearing gushes from corners of eyes. A mellow dance of sleet frolics with the breeze *while the rain kisses her cheeks her essence,* this nearness which consumes wisp of air... And joy of patter falls down through footsteps until all confetti drapes an embroidered gown , In a rush of petrichor melting two gazes swept blessing the stars of her newly -wed face. ............... 6/8/2016 ika-labing-tatlo (13th): Rain, Rain come my way binibining P.iNk’s Contest *habang humahalik ang ulan sa kanyang mga pisngi, sa kanyang kababaihang makabuluhan*

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Date: 7/6/2016 8:50:00 AM
Congrats, Nette, for your placement with this sweet, colorful piece!! ;-)
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Date: 7/6/2016 5:17:00 AM
Back to say my Congratulations on your win, Nette:)
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Date: 7/5/2016 2:48:00 PM
That last line, especially, is so lovely! How can I not smile ? Congratulations Nette on your wonderful poem!
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Date: 7/5/2016 1:12:00 PM
June showers indeed! Big congrats to you nette for your wedding joy write! You put in quite a lot of vivid imagery here and I can imagine this blissful couple on their special day. Plus I enjoyed the idea of rain kissing the bride's cheeks. And I was happy to see the Filipino words at the bottom, yay for that! Thanks for entering my contest :)!
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Date: 7/5/2016 12:24:00 PM
Nette, this is amazingly expressed lady, just beautiful! Congrats on your placement! :)-luloo
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Date: 6/9/2016 5:13:00 PM
Truly beautiful, Nette! Poetically rich! I love it. Now I have to go to google translate to make out what the footnote says:) Hugs // paul
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Date: 6/8/2016 11:48:00 PM
nette, this is a lovely write about rain, beautiful ~
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Date: 6/8/2016 1:40:00 PM
Well done Nette. I need an interpreter. Best wishes in the contest...
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Date: 6/8/2016 11:50:00 AM
"I'm singin in the rain." The old Gene Kelly flic. So who can dislike rain under these circumstances? Enjoyed. Love, daver
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Date: 6/8/2016 11:27:00 AM
Good interpretation, good intent, the metaphores sharp as tacks, visually stunning yet leans towards over stimulation of poetic device, too many great lines fighting for dominance ....good luck ...Ian
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Date: 6/8/2016 7:02:00 AM
What a sweet lovely and beautiful picture you have painted in this picturesque write. I was feeling the sound and intoxicating smell of Rain drops while reading your lovely poem Nette. Great one dear friend and my good wishes for your contest entry with 7++. Thank you once again for your kind words on my new Poem. Love and best wishes always...Ravindra K Kapoor
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Date: 6/8/2016 4:23:00 AM
What a fine picture:) All the best, Nette:)
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Date: 6/8/2016 12:25:00 AM
Excellent. Beautifully done. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.
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Date: 6/7/2016 6:12:00 PM
You are an artist with words and every letter a perfect stroke, very nice Nette
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Date: 6/7/2016 5:49:00 PM
nette your poetry always paints a visual for the reader to see this poem is no different, a nice painting indeed..good luck in the contest
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