Rain

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My first drop will come in a sudden knocking on your window pane
for I  feel you in my heart  crying and calling out his name
with misty eyes 
if you’ll glance at me once in a while
and curl up yourself back to bed with your louder cries
I’ll hurl myself by the wind against your sill
strum strings of sweet songs to sense what has gone amiss
melodiously drops… then     s                                       s

                                       t                  d                   t                     d
          
                                       o                  r                   0                     r

                                       P                  o                   p                    o

                                     ,                     p                                         p                                                            .
                                                    .                                               .  
Just out there 
and at your  somber roof
again, I drop
knock
drop
knock 
drop
pause a while
hoping
waiting…
If you will finally step into our glassy rendezvous
my scented charm wafts around 
redolence of my balmy petrichor embraces you
heals the wounds  
and mends your  broken heart
Let me cry with you, 
wash all your tears away 
till my cool breeze drains them up
May I be one of the stewards 
to continuously nurture you and this earth 
by pouring down  God’s loving  graces and divine love.



June 5, 2016   10.35pm


Words per line:13,11,9,7,5,3,1
Just a try of the contest



First rain of June poured down around 5pm this afternoon and lasted only 30 minutes. So it’s still humid today in my place.

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Debbie Duncan

Date: 8/27/2016 10:25:00 PM

Love it,,, haven't posted any lately. Though I 100 others you might try :)

Len Gasun
Date: 9/24/2016 11:38:00 AM

Hello my dear friend, Debbie and Libra mate! I'm so sorry if my reply comes so late because I was so busy and up to this moment, I'm still busy with some missions in life esp. with my family. But, I want to thank you so much belatedly for your wonderful visit. Like you, I havent' been writing lately but now, Im having a short break and I'm trying to write even a short one. Thank you for reminding me. I'll visit you tom/soon. ok. TYTYSM. Blessings and Many Hugs to you from me!

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 8/2/2016 3:42:00 AM

I like this poem very much. Such a proximity of rain and the rained upon. I like the somber roof and glassy rendesvouz. Well done.

Len Gasun
Date: 9/24/2016 11:21:00 AM

Super belated thanks for sharing generously your time to read one of my humble works sir. So much appreciated. Pls. forgive me for the late expression of gratitude coz I think I've overlooked your comment on my past poems. Again, thank you so much and more blessings! Hugs.