Valsa George Poet Rhyme

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Quagmire

“An impulsive action done in haste and without forethought can cause trouble and there is no point in feeling repugnance” - By Poet


 When did she have a quarrel with life,
That left her mind with resentment rife?
Her dreams are blurred by a diaphanous mist
And her life has taken an ugly twist

When she felt she was not treated well
She decided to leave the house, seeing it as hell.
Now she wonders if it was an excuse lame.
Knows quite well no one else but she is to blame

She feels her life, now in a slushy quagmire.
Anytime her rashness of action could backfire.
Now at life’s barred gate when she knocks in vain,
The ‘no entry’ sign drowns her in pain.

Far out, her mind wanders into deserts forlorn
She feels the bite of heat even in the morn
Sure, this life for her has become a quagmire.
She desperately needs repair as like a flat tire.

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March. 31. 2023

~ Placed First~

Writing Challenge ‘Q’ Words Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Constance La France

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Matt Caliri April 4, 2023 at 9:15 PM Excellent work! You definitely wrote a better quagmire poem than me!

Paula Goldsmith April 3, 2023 at 3:18 PM Congratulations on your win. A sad yet wonderful write. So True. Enjoy your win/day with blessings................

Constance La France April 3, 2023 at 3:45 AM Valsa, excellent writing and thank you for sharing your poem with us in my Writing Challenge congratulations ! Valsa George April 3, 2023 at 5:27 AM Thank you dear Constance for selecting my poem for a first place win . Also thanks for your Congratulations !

Alfonso II Warally Ngengethe Mussabwa Chris April 3, 2023 at 2:13 AM Congratulations on your win in the Contest, ... No one can resist pains... When the heart puff up with challenges, Tears expose whatever bottled for some years... Even our Lord Christ Jesus screamed and cried for pains...

Linda Alice Fowler April 2, 2023 at 4:50 PM Insightful. Is it confusion, illusion, frustration? Well done! Congratulations on your win! :)

Timothy Ray March 31, 2023 at 3:45 PM ahhh Valsa....we begin your poem in a slow walk and end up in a memory we own alone....who amongst us has not at some point experienced a hasty remark...oh dear Vasla....such an excellent execution of life's hard lessons...and even greater caveat....never do again

Sotto Poet March 31, 2023 at 1:40 PM Valsa, your poetry has been exceptionally composed. You brought awareness to her heartache and sorrow. Haphazard actions have significant consequences. Best wishes to you and good luck.

Vijay Pandit March 31, 2023 at 6:17 AM You gave voice to her regrets, Valsa. Hasty acts have consequences. Best to you.

Joseph May March 31, 2023 at 5:52 AM Finding out in the end who was to blame, Very nicely penned Valsa, best wishes

Speaks Volumes March 31, 2023 at 1:56 AM You packed a lot into that story Valsa. A delight to read. Its sad when things get so mixed up there seems no way out. Its then that help is really needed or one can just keep sinking. So well written

Victor Buhagiar March 31, 2023 at 1:16 AM Brilliant poem.

Unseeking Seeker March 30, 2023 at 11:31 PM Hmmm ~ a quagmire indeed

Fin Chuuk March 30, 2023 at 8:50 PM A deep write, Valsa. My heart aches for this broken soul. I hope she finds peace and light. I’m sure it’s fiction but still a heartfelt. All the best in the contest. :)