Pyramus-Thisbe - a Selfless Love Story Part Ii

Then Thisbe stole forth as agreed upon
Unobserved her head covered with a veil
Out of city’s bounds edifice well known
Waited for Pyramus near a fountain trail.
In the dim light she descried a lioness
Nearing the fountain with blood reeking jaws
With a recent slaughter to slake her thirst.
She fled dropping her veil out of fright.
After quenching thirst turned back for her cove
Renting the veil in bloody mouth on her retreat
But Venus won’t always befriend true love.

Having delayed Pyramus arrived there
Saw footsteps of the lioness in the sand
And found the veil all bloody over there
Crying picked up the rent veil in his hand.
Thought himself to be the cause of her death
Covering the veil with kiss and with tear
And said, come ye lioness tear with your teeth
Let my blood also shall stain your texture.
He plunged sword into his heart with a shove
Blood spurted tinging the tree with red color
But Venus won’t always befriend true love.

Thisbe stepped out not to disappoint him
She noticed the change in the tree’s color
In the agonies of death she saw him.
A shudder ran as ripple in still water.
She saw her veil and his scabbard empty.
He has slain himself for her sake only.
She said, “I could be brave and follow thee
Death alone couldn’t prevent my joining thee
Love and death join us, one tomb be our grove”
She plunged the sword in her breast near the tree
But Venus won’t always befriend true love.

Envoi 
Such tale of the self-less love presented
The two bodies in one tomb were buried 
Pyramus-Thisbe tale our hearts do move
Berries serve memorials of their blood
But Venus won’t always befriend true love.

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Rhyme scheme : ababccddede    Envoi- ddede
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011


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Date: 2/23/2011 11:13:00 PM
enjoyed the write here Dr Ram, most discriptive.
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Date: 2/23/2011 2:06:00 PM
Now I remember, Doctor. A beautiful myth. I wonder if Shakespeare was influenced? Love, daver
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Date: 2/23/2011 1:54:00 PM
I wrote one on Pyramus and Thisbe - about the crack in the wall where they went to hear each other's voice. I don't remember this part, but it has been so long since I studied Greek mythology. Beutiful poem, Doctor Ram. Love, daver
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Date: 2/23/2011 10:04:00 AM
Interesting write on Blood and Befriending a true love.
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Date: 2/23/2011 9:33:00 AM
you spoil me with beautiful wordplay and an interesting chant royal, dr. ram.. enjoyed the mythological undercurrents of this piece! :) huggs, nette
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Date: 2/23/2011 5:22:00 AM
Such an elegant tale from your creative pen Dr. Ram.. awesomely enjoyed this part of the series luv.. dynamic words enhance this piece very much.. thankxx for sharing luv..
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Date: 2/23/2011 2:14:00 AM
Enjoyed this! Sad but very beautiful! Not attempted a Chant royal yet, but this may just inspire me to have a go! Thank you for your comments on my work, i much appreciate you taking the time for a newbie!! Best wishes Em :)
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Date: 2/22/2011 7:29:00 PM
Much too sad, Dr. Ram, nevertheless, excellent write. I'm not at all familiar with this form but it is very interesting and a challenge too.
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Date: 2/22/2011 6:55:00 PM
A good conclusion to the first part, Doctor. As usual, very descriptive and a pleasure to read.
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