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Puddles Reflecting Death

Passages trail the utter existence along brick faced wanderings with puddles reflecting death in the vast wasteland that calls from bled out dreams I listen to the footsteps, eager to please, left by the curb beneath graffiti warnings in spray painted quotes dripping with ease and intent Their cadence sends splashing ripples onto nicely pressed slacks, collecting glares from bus stop loafers with exact change and nowhere to go As I find my existence fading in the far back seat, staring out of a smeared rear window, exhaust fumes wave good bye to the nothing I have become

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 11/9/2016 11:13:00 AM
That rear-view is always painfully destructive, don't leave it in park too long, very sad within an original concept.
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Chris Green
Date: 11/9/2016 12:56:00 PM
I'll try to remember that. :) Thanks so very much my friend.
Date: 11/9/2016 3:27:00 AM
Thank you for commenting on my poem. This one of yours really grabbed me. There are many times when I have felt the same in the anonymity of commuting. The final stanza is eloquent, and the metaphor is powerful and dragged me into its lair.
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Chris Green
Date: 11/9/2016 8:05:00 AM
Thank you Tanya for reading and commenting on mine. It was my pleasure to visit your poetry.
Date: 11/8/2016 5:44:00 PM
Stop looking backward Chris, as you are aware we can't change the past only learn from it. But I'm on medication so it's easy for me to say this. A very touching poem.
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Chris Green
Date: 11/8/2016 5:47:00 PM
Sorry man but that made me laugh, but then again your sense of humor is priceless, you always seem to make me laugh somehow. Thanks so much Rick.
Date: 11/8/2016 5:40:00 PM
Hi Chris: Poignant but powerful. I envy your style. Great stirring write!
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Chris Green
Date: 11/8/2016 5:42:00 PM
Thanks so much Ralph for your visit and kind words this afternoon. I'm glad you enjoyed this one
Date: 11/8/2016 5:32:00 PM
Such a sad poem ! Prayers you are not feeling like nothing especially with the gift you have for writing as Dee says. ... *wonderful poet.
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Chris Green
Date: 11/8/2016 5:41:00 PM
Thanks so much Heidi, honestly it is just a poem, I thought I'd give everyone a little break from the love poetry. You know, when you've had too much sugar sometimes you need a little salt to change the flavor up a bit. :) I truly do appreciate your kindness my sweet friend.

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