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Pryamus-Thisbe - a Selfless Love - Part I

Pyramus was the handsome young man Thisbe the fair maiden of Babylon Both the parents’ houses did adjoin Neighborhood brought the two in relation. And the acquaintance ripened into love And the fire within them burnt with bright glow Would have married, but their parents forbid Ardor in hearts of both they couldn’t forbid They did converse by signs one can think of The fire within them burnt like glow covered But Venus won’t always befriend true love. They found crack in wall that parted the houses In spared passage for tender messages Caused by fault in the wall of the mansion What will not love find for satisfaction!!. They passed the tender messages of love As the night fell they said farewell with awe Moving backward and forward through the gap She on her side, he on his, kissed the gap. One morn the sun put out the stars above From the watchful eyes, they tried to slipup But Venus won’t always befriend true love. ------------------------------------------------------ This is the first part of the poem as I could not post it in this single post. The poem has five stanzas of 11 lines and an envoi of five lines. Chant royal [shahn rwa-yal], A French verse form normally consisting of five stanzas of eleven 10-syllable lines rhyming ababccddede, followed by an envoi (or half-stanza) rhyming ddede. The last line of the first stanza is repeated as a refrain at the end of the succeeding stanzas and of the envoi. The pattern is similar to that of the ballade, but even more demanding.

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Date: 2/22/2011 7:24:00 PM
Beautiful story written which I already love, Dr. Ram. On to Part II.
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Date: 2/20/2011 10:45:00 PM
Doctor, this looks good so far. I believe Shakespeare was inspired to write Romeo and Juliet based on this ancient tale.
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Date: 2/18/2011 2:53:00 AM
I have been a victim of forbidden love. I say victim because my story has a sad ending. Hopefully your story will have a breathtaking one. I love this write! Nice work=0)
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Date: 2/18/2011 12:36:00 AM
This is another wonderful write from you Dr. Mehta.Waiting for the next part.
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Date: 2/17/2011 3:57:00 PM
U my friend are certainly up to the task of writing about your own name luv.. looking forward to reading your entry .. good luck..
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Date: 2/17/2011 1:50:00 PM
This forbidden love scenario had me thinking of the play "The Fantastiks," Dr. Ram. Since their parents are feuding, the young couple are forbidden to interact, but they do find a way, just as Pyramus and Thisbe do. This is a new verse form for me, Dr. Ram, and I thank you for introducing it. I do love the way you tell stories in verse. Excellent start. Let me know when you post the remaining stanzas. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/17/2011 7:02:00 AM
Forbidden luv is the most treasured and intriguing kind Dr. Ram.. a lovey introduction to the characters and the scenario my friend.. anxiously awaiting continuation luv..
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Date: 2/16/2011 11:02:00 PM
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Date: 2/16/2011 11:01:00 PM
I loved reading about this forbidden love,looking forward to hear the next part. .
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Date: 2/16/2011 6:26:00 PM
Wow, what an undertaking. I cant wait to read the rest...BG
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