Lin Lane Poet Rhyme

Pricked By Love's Thorn

My nights have no rhythmic shadows on the wall
Our candle flame silhouettes no longer rise and fall
Our love cooled like dying embers without a spark
Filled with emotive despair,  tears spill in the dark

We shared a tranquil pond in a love forged long ago
but our waters are dammed. Our stream does not flow
What remains of us is a cracked and dried river bed
and a wound in my heart, from which my life has bled

No relief when night is over and the sun starts to rise
'cause it's your face I long to see when I open my eyes
With empty arms, no smile of contentment will I wear
I am left with only memories; a grievous burden to bear

My nights are foreboding, and transcends until morn
Like petals of a rose, I wither, pricked by love's thorn
Desolate, I now languish in the web lost love has spun
Lingering at twilight and dawn, on the edge of the sun

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Arturo Michael January 16, 2020 at 7:40 AM A splendid write...I can read you in your words...Congratulations Lin on POTD Lin Lane January 22, 2020 at 6:22 AM Thanks ever so much, Arturo. It's so nice to hear from you.

Paula Goldsmith January 10, 2020 at 11:26 AM Congratulations on your POTD. Love and pain seem to go together. Guess it is called life................... Lin Lane January 11, 2020 at 9:47 AM Hello, Paula. You are so right about them being stable mates. Unfortunately they do go hand in hand sometimes. The only silver lining is that they serve as fodder for emotional poetry. Thanks so much for sharing your thoughts.

Gershon Wolf January 10, 2020 at 11:01 AM You pricked love and P.S loved it and picked it as POTD. Such vivid imagery. Congrats, Lin! Best wishes, Gershon Lin Lane January 11, 2020 at 9:45 AM I'm not quite sure how a potd is chosen. The why and wherefore escapes me. Thanks a lot for reading and leaving me your thoughts, Gershon.

Kim Rodrigues January 10, 2020 at 5:51 AM So beautiful, Lin! Wonderful images of sadness. Congrats on POTD! Lin Lane January 11, 2020 at 9:44 AM Hi Kim, and thank you so very much for liking this write.

John Watt January 9, 2020 at 6:42 PM Lin, so wistful and melancholy. Lovely imagery - I especially like the pond / dam / stream / dried river bed arc. Beautifully worthy of POTD, congratulations. ~ John Lin Lane January 10, 2020 at 2:11 AM Thank you very much, John. I appreciate your thoughts, especially those you pointed out.

John Gondolf January 8, 2020 at 5:51 AM A wounded heart will always leave one lingering on the edge, I’ve been there more than once. Congrats on POTD for this wonderfully penned poem, Lin, your ink is golden my friend. Hugs, John Lin Lane January 8, 2020 at 5:55 AM G'morning, John. Thank you so much for such warm and wonderful comments.

Besma Riabi Dziri January 8, 2020 at 1:46 AM "A wound in your heart, from which a great work has bled"! Pure and powerful sentiments.. captivating imagery! Impressive and inspiring artistry that moves the heart and pleases the mind.. An immense pleasure to read.. Congratulations, Lin, on your POTD! A well earned honour! Best regards and blessings. Lin Lane January 8, 2020 at 5:41 AM Isn't it ironic that a tragic event in life can often inspire us to write what others consider to be 'great work.' Thank you so very much for your kind thoughts, Besma.

Connie Marcum Wong January 7, 2020 at 4:04 PM Heartache so poignantly expressed Lin. For those of us touched by lost love this beautiful poem speaks to our heartache. A Fave for me! Congratulations on having this so deservingly honored with POTD Lin. Have a great new year my friend. : ) xxoo Lin Lane January 7, 2020 at 4:21 PM Thank you, Connie. Surely you know how much I value your comments and know they will always make me smile.

Heidi Sands January 7, 2020 at 12:03 PM Congratulations for POTD :) Lin Lane January 7, 2020 at 12:05 PM Hi Heidi, and thanks a lot.

Chris Green January 7, 2020 at 11:55 AM Congrats on POTD Lin. Your beautiful poem is so deserving of this recognition because being placed in this spot will allow many who might not have read this the first time out a chance to see the talent that flows from your pen. Lin Lane January 7, 2020 at 12:05 PM Thanks ever so much, Chris. We write to be read, and the recognition is welcome, but it's the responses from friends like you that I value as a sweet reward.

Brandy Nicole January 7, 2020 at 10:56 AM Yes, roses have thorns. Emotions bleed just the same, when the heart is pricked- again and again. This is beautiful and emotional, all at the same time. Congratulations Lin, on Poem of the Day. ~ Brandy Lin Lane January 7, 2020 at 12:03 PM Some pricks go much deeper than others. I appreciate your insight, Brandy. Thank you.

Sunlite Wanter January 7, 2020 at 9:59 AM I hear your despair! Congratulations on your win. Lin Lane January 7, 2020 at 12:02 PM Thank you very much, Sun.

Jan Allison January 7, 2020 at 8:36 AM SO glad to see you get POTD, a very worthy poem for the accolade and one I am delighted to comment on:-) hugs Jan xx Lin Lane January 7, 2020 at 8:52 AM Thank you, chick. Your comments are always like the sun shining on me. Hugs.

John Hamilton January 7, 2020 at 7:43 AM Glad to see this recognized, congrats Lin on your POTD! Lin Lane January 7, 2020 at 8:52 AM Thank you most sincerely, J.D. I'm delighted by another visit.

Joseph May January 7, 2020 at 7:39 AM Great last line in this story of heartbreak Lin, Congrats on your POTD.. Lin Lane January 7, 2020 at 8:51 AM Thank you for the insight of your favorite line, Joseph. I always take pleasure in knowing what another poet sees as a favored line.

Charles Messina January 7, 2020 at 7:36 AM Indeed a bit sad, but absolutely beautiful too! Happy to read that your life has made a turn-around, Lin. Very nicely penned. Congratulations on POTD. Hugs Charlie :) Lin Lane January 7, 2020 at 8:49 AM Hi Charlie, and thank you for your kind remarks and concern over my past heartache. It's very kind of you to care. Hugs back to you.

Beautiful Scars January 7, 2020 at 7:14 AM beautifully expressed lovely Lin, congrats on POTD x:-)-luloo Lin Lane January 7, 2020 at 8:48 AM Thank you so very much, luloo. I'm pleasantly surprised by your visit. It's a step I've wanted to take for quite some time, but was unsure of your reaction, or lack thereof. I'm glad you reached out.

Winged Warrior January 7, 2020 at 5:39 AM Laney!...come (((back~back~back)))...we need (((you~you~you)))...and I am happy back to congratulate! you on your POTD!...B tu as une journée joyeuse... tout mon amour from the Wingster :o) Lin Lane January 7, 2020 at 5:46 AM Merci. il sera heureux maintenant que vous étiez ici...mon cœur chante

Tania Kitchin January 7, 2020 at 4:51 AM Lin, a sad heartfelt poem with beautiful imagery, congratulations on POTD! Lin Lane January 7, 2020 at 5:09 AM Thank you so very much, Tania. It's filled with the kind of heartache I once felt, but all is well in my world now.

Anne-Lise Andresen January 7, 2020 at 4:29 AM - A wonderful poem, Lin ... I especially love the third verse - Congratulations on your p.o.t.d. - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Lin Lane January 7, 2020 at 5:08 AM G'morning, Anne-Lise. Thank you for letting me know what you liked in particular. I always love your comments.

Sandra Adams January 7, 2020 at 4:16 AM Beautiful in its sadness. This one came from the depths of the heart. It pulls the reader in... congratulations on your POTD :) hugs Lin Lane January 7, 2020 at 5:07 AM I'm so pleased that you liked it, in all its sorrow. After reading many of yours, I see why it appeals to you. Thanks, Sandy.

Tom Cunningham January 7, 2020 at 2:20 AM A verse tinged with sadness, what was once love is no more and now only memories remain. Congrats on a well deserved P. O. T. D. Lin. Tom Lin Lane January 7, 2020 at 5:05 AM G'morning and thank you for liking this one, Tom. Your visits are always welcome.

John Hamilton January 6, 2020 at 2:38 PM So glad you're back Lin, this is beautifully sad, loved every sad word, melancholy is my thing, and you moved me, that last line is golden. Lost love is sad...but at least we get great poetry from it! Lin Lane January 6, 2020 at 7:38 PM Your welcoming words are greatly appreciated, J.D. To know that my words had such an affect on you is humbling and encouraging. Thank you so much for pointing out a particular line you liked.

Chris Green January 6, 2020 at 1:31 PM Such a sad piece. the heartache that comes when the love is gone is deeply felt in this Lin. Smooth flowing, the rhymes are perfect and the message echoes long after I finished reading. Beautifully done. Lin Lane January 6, 2020 at 7:36 PM Thank you for your gracious remarks, Chris. Although newly written, these emotions were a burden I had to bear for a few years, but that was then, and my heart has healed.

Jan Allison January 6, 2020 at 12:22 PM Can't agree more with ^WW^'s comment so glad you are back with your wonderful words. I especially like the imagery of the dried up river - a great description of when love has run its course:-( adding this gem to my faves:-) hugs Jan xx Lin Lane January 6, 2020 at 12:46 PM Thank you ever so much, Jan. I'm always pleased to know what lines most appeal to readers. I appreciate the fav, sweet friend.

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