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Pricked By Love's Thorn

My nights have no rhythmic shadows on the wall Our candle flame silhouettes no longer rise and fall Our love cooled like dying embers without a spark Filled with emotive despair, tears spill in the dark We shared a tranquil pond in a love forged long ago but our waters are dammed. Our stream does not flow What remains of us is a cracked and dried river bed and a wound in my heart, from which my life has bled No relief when night is over and the sun starts to rise 'cause it's your face I long to see when I open my eyes With empty arms, no smile of contentment will I wear I am left with only memories; a grievous burden to bear My nights are foreboding, and transcends until morn Like petals of a rose, I wither, pricked by love's thorn Desolate, I now languish in the web lost love has spun Lingering at twilight and dawn, on the edge of the sun

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Arturo Michael

Date: 1/16/2020 7:40:00 AM

A splendid write...I can read you in your words...Congratulations Lin on POTD

Lin Lane
Date: 1/22/2020 6:22:00 AM

Thanks ever so much, Arturo. It's so nice to hear from you.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 1/10/2020 11:26:00 AM

Congratulations on your POTD. Love and pain seem to go together. Guess it is called life...................

Lin Lane
Date: 1/11/2020 9:47:00 AM

Hello, Paula. You are so right about them being stable mates. Unfortunately they do go hand in hand sometimes. The only silver lining is that they serve as fodder for emotional poetry. Thanks so much for sharing your thoughts.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 1/10/2020 11:01:00 AM

You pricked love and P.S loved it and picked it as POTD. Such vivid imagery. Congrats, Lin! Best wishes, Gershon

Lin Lane
Date: 1/11/2020 9:45:00 AM

I'm not quite sure how a potd is chosen. The why and wherefore escapes me. Thanks a lot for reading and leaving me your thoughts, Gershon.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/10/2020 5:51:00 AM

So beautiful, Lin! Wonderful images of sadness. Congrats on POTD!

Lin Lane
Date: 1/11/2020 9:44:00 AM

Hi Kim, and thank you so very much for liking this write.

John Watt

Date: 1/9/2020 6:42:00 PM

Lin, so wistful and melancholy. Lovely imagery - I especially like the pond / dam / stream / dried river bed arc. Beautifully worthy of POTD, congratulations. ~ John

Lin Lane
Date: 1/10/2020 2:11:00 AM

Thank you very much, John. I appreciate your thoughts, especially those you pointed out.

John Gondolf

Date: 1/8/2020 5:51:00 AM

A wounded heart will always leave one lingering on the edge, I’ve been there more than once. Congrats on POTD for this wonderfully penned poem, Lin, your ink is golden my friend. Hugs, John

Lin Lane
Date: 1/8/2020 5:55:00 AM

G'morning, John. Thank you so much for such warm and wonderful comments.

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 1/8/2020 1:46:00 AM

"A wound in your heart, from which a great work has bled"! Pure and powerful sentiments.. captivating imagery! Impressive and inspiring artistry that moves the heart and pleases the mind.. An immense pleasure to read.. Congratulations, Lin, on your POTD! A well earned honour! Best regards and blessings.

Lin Lane
Date: 1/8/2020 5:41:00 AM

Isn't it ironic that a tragic event in life can often inspire us to write what others consider to be 'great work.' Thank you so very much for your kind thoughts, Besma.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/7/2020 4:04:00 PM

Heartache so poignantly expressed Lin. For those of us touched by lost love this beautiful poem speaks to our heartache. A Fave for me! Congratulations on having this so deservingly honored with POTD Lin. Have a great new year my friend. : ) xxoo

Lin Lane
Date: 1/7/2020 4:21:00 PM

Thank you, Connie. Surely you know how much I value your comments and know they will always make me smile.

Heidi Sands

Date: 1/7/2020 12:03:00 PM

Congratulations for POTD :)

Lin Lane
Date: 1/7/2020 12:05:00 PM

Hi Heidi, and thanks a lot.

Chris Green

Date: 1/7/2020 11:55:00 AM

Congrats on POTD Lin. Your beautiful poem is so deserving of this recognition because being placed in this spot will allow many who might not have read this the first time out a chance to see the talent that flows from your pen.

Lin Lane
Date: 1/7/2020 12:05:00 PM

Thanks ever so much, Chris. We write to be read, and the recognition is welcome, but it's the responses from friends like you that I value as a sweet reward.

Sunlite Wanter

Date: 1/7/2020 9:59:00 AM

I hear your despair! Congratulations on your win.

Lin Lane
Date: 1/7/2020 12:02:00 PM

Thank you very much, Sun.

Jan Allison

Date: 1/7/2020 8:36:00 AM

SO glad to see you get POTD, a very worthy poem for the accolade and one I am delighted to comment on:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 1/7/2020 8:52:00 AM

Thank you, chick. Your comments are always like the sun shining on me. Hugs.

John Hamilton

Date: 1/7/2020 7:43:00 AM

Glad to see this recognized, congrats Lin on your POTD!

Lin Lane
Date: 1/7/2020 8:52:00 AM

Thank you most sincerely, J.D. I'm delighted by another visit.

Joseph May

Date: 1/7/2020 7:39:00 AM

Great last line in this story of heartbreak Lin, Congrats on your POTD..

Lin Lane
Date: 1/7/2020 8:51:00 AM

Thank you for the insight of your favorite line, Joseph. I always take pleasure in knowing what another poet sees as a favored line.

Charles Messina

Date: 1/7/2020 7:36:00 AM

Indeed a bit sad, but absolutely beautiful too! Happy to read that your life has made a turn-around, Lin. Very nicely penned. Congratulations on POTD. Hugs Charlie :)

Lin Lane
Date: 1/7/2020 8:49:00 AM

Hi Charlie, and thank you for your kind remarks and concern over my past heartache. It's very kind of you to care. Hugs back to you.

Lu Loo

Date: 1/7/2020 7:14:00 AM

beautifully expressed lovely Lin, congrats on POTD x:-)-luloo

Lin Lane
Date: 1/7/2020 8:48:00 AM

Thank you so very much, luloo. I'm pleasantly surprised by your visit. It's a step I've wanted to take for quite some time, but was unsure of your reaction, or lack thereof. I'm glad you reached out.

Winged Warrior

Date: 1/7/2020 5:39:00 AM

Laney!...come (((back~back~back)))...we need (((you~you~you)))...and I am happy back to congratulate! you on your POTD!...B tu as une journée joyeuse... tout mon amour from the Wingster :o)

Lin Lane
Date: 1/7/2020 5:46:00 AM

Merci. il sera heureux maintenant que vous étiez ici...mon cœur chante

Tania Kitchin

Date: 1/7/2020 4:51:00 AM

Lin, a sad heartfelt poem with beautiful imagery, congratulations on POTD!

Lin Lane
Date: 1/7/2020 5:09:00 AM

Thank you so very much, Tania. It's filled with the kind of heartache I once felt, but all is well in my world now.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/7/2020 4:29:00 AM

- A wonderful poem, Lin ... I especially love the third verse - Congratulations on your p.o.t.d. - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Lin Lane
Date: 1/7/2020 5:08:00 AM

G'morning, Anne-Lise. Thank you for letting me know what you liked in particular. I always love your comments.

Sandra Adams

Date: 1/7/2020 4:16:00 AM

Beautiful in its sadness. This one came from the depths of the heart. It pulls the reader in... congratulations on your POTD :) hugs

Lin Lane
Date: 1/7/2020 5:07:00 AM

I'm so pleased that you liked it, in all its sorrow. After reading many of yours, I see why it appeals to you. Thanks, Sandy.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 1/7/2020 2:20:00 AM

A verse tinged with sadness, what was once love is no more and now only memories remain. Congrats on a well deserved P. O. T. D. Lin. Tom

Lin Lane
Date: 1/7/2020 5:05:00 AM

G'morning and thank you for liking this one, Tom. Your visits are always welcome.

John Hamilton

Date: 1/6/2020 2:38:00 PM

So glad you're back Lin, this is beautifully sad, loved every sad word, melancholy is my thing, and you moved me, that last line is golden. Lost love is sad...but at least we get great poetry from it!

Lin Lane
Date: 1/6/2020 7:38:00 PM

Your welcoming words are greatly appreciated, J.D. To know that my words had such an affect on you is humbling and encouraging. Thank you so much for pointing out a particular line you liked.

Chris Green

Date: 1/6/2020 1:31:00 PM

Such a sad piece. the heartache that comes when the love is gone is deeply felt in this Lin. Smooth flowing, the rhymes are perfect and the message echoes long after I finished reading. Beautifully done.

Lin Lane
Date: 1/6/2020 7:36:00 PM

Thank you for your gracious remarks, Chris. Although newly written, these emotions were a burden I had to bear for a few years, but that was then, and my heart has healed.

Jan Allison

Date: 1/6/2020 12:22:00 PM

Can't agree more with ^WW^'s comment so glad you are back with your wonderful words. I especially like the imagery of the dried up river - a great description of when love has run its course:-( adding this gem to my faves:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 1/6/2020 12:46:00 PM

Thank you ever so much, Jan. I'm always pleased to know what lines most appeal to readers. I appreciate the fav, sweet friend.

Winged Warrior

Date: 1/6/2020 9:37:00 AM

WoW!...Fav! Fav! Fav!...the world is at your feet...you gotta come back and show some poets how to write great poetry, including me Laney lol...love from the Wingster ^WW^ ;o)

Lin Lane
Date: 1/6/2020 12:45:00 PM

Merci, mon guerrier ailé. I seem to have returned, at least for now because my mind is overflowing with poetic thoughts. You don't need writing lessons to create beauty with your words...and merci pour en faire un favori.