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Pretty Shoes and Cracked Feet

Once I'm gone I'll only be remembered a small while I'm a tiny tick on a large dial The words I breathe will stretch about a mile Even those who are in history books the Kings writers and famous cooks The gorgeous people with talent and looks They too in the end fade away Don't get me wrong it's all okay We might try to hold on but none of us can stay All have a bit part on this watery ball of granite and clay Some are calm others make waves One smooth skinned another shaves She loves him while he's attracted to Dave They both pretend because they have to behave Each in their own prison living like a slave The preacher too plays his part trying to find people to save Some couples love from the start till death She breathes in he exhales her breath Their children thrive Bobby and Beth While some mothers go it alone Daddies leave and are never known Children left to learn life from a smart phone Some chase riches when other just want to eat Walking on pretty shoes while poor men have cracked feet The music plays so clearly yet we fail to hear the beat So I wonder what's it all for This wanting more and more Is that really God knocking at our door Yes it is I believe it at my core So why do we leave it closed Maybe because we fear our sins will be exposed a life manicured and posed could be unfroze Freedom from each prison chose Instead why not drink from the garden hose Wear our humanity discard these labeled clothes Count down the future with fingers and toes Within a momentary breath each spirit goes As minds open each heart then grows What happens next only God knows!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 9/24/2019 9:45:00 AM
Wow! “Maybe because we fear our sins will be exposed” I felt that!
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Date: 10/11/2016 7:04:00 AM
Congratulations Rich, on a wonderful poem well deserving of this top placement. I am adding it to my favs of course. You hit on so many truths and remind us of the brief span our lives really are. Your kindness shines through this one. Always, SuZ
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Date: 10/10/2016 10:13:00 PM
Back for another read, congrats on number 1 on the top 100, enjoy at least until tomorrow!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/10/2016 11:00:00 PM
It was a pleasant surprise. Thanks for the visit John.
Date: 10/5/2016 7:07:00 PM
Amazing read, 'I've looked at life from both sides now' an entire life packed in your poetry. Wait, what, we're not going to be forever young? :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2016 8:09:00 PM
We might be able to fake our youth for a bit longer but in the end the wrinkles win out. No worries though, wrinkles have their advantages. The old occupy a child like state and don't really worry that much about the unimportant important stuff. Thanks for your visit. Do come back.
Date: 10/4/2016 10:37:00 PM
Very nice Richard. I like this one a lot. 7 Verlena
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2016 8:10:00 PM
Thanks Verlena.;0)
Date: 10/3/2016 8:44:00 AM
Oh boy...so sorry Richard. I slipped up, forgot to fav this marvellous piece. Error fixed. I have added this to my favs.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2016 8:10:00 PM
You are kind my friend.
Date: 10/3/2016 8:40:00 AM
Congratulations Richard first place on the top 100...exactly where this gem belongs. Happy for you my dear friend. Lots of Love, armand.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/3/2016 8:43:00 AM
Wow, what a great surprise. Thanks for letting me know Armand.
Date: 10/1/2016 8:09:00 AM
This is G O O D. clean
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/1/2016 8:40:00 AM
Thanks Charlene.
Date: 9/28/2016 10:58:00 PM
A wonderful, thoughtful and reflective write, Richard. I am getting back on the Soup more. I miss reading other people's contributions. Thanks so much for this one!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/29/2016 6:23:00 AM
Thanks Brian, welcome back.
Date: 9/28/2016 7:40:00 PM
sorry to bother you again but I've been thinking about the line "one is smooth skinned, another shaves" this has something to do with conformity but i'm not sure what exactly you meant by it. Incredible poem my friend, really have to hand it to you on this one.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/28/2016 11:22:00 PM
It is a description to express there are different kind of men. It could also be a reference to youth. Thanks for taking so much time to ponder this one.
Date: 9/28/2016 7:56:00 AM
Richard. I loved this poem the first time I read it and reading it again simply reinforced my opinion. Congratulations on all of the honors earned because they are well deserved.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/28/2016 9:20:00 AM
You are most kind my friend.
Date: 9/27/2016 7:28:00 PM
Very very nice poem.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/27/2016 7:54:00 PM
Thank Richard.
Date: 9/26/2016 12:53:00 PM
Great piece. I really enjoyed this. Congratulations on the placement. W
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/26/2016 1:57:00 PM
Thanks Wesley.
Date: 9/25/2016 7:11:00 PM
I remember reading this before-loved it :) congratulations on your placement :)-luloo
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/26/2016 1:58:00 PM
Thanks Luloo.
Date: 9/25/2016 5:30:00 AM
Congrats on a fine win in Linda's contest read it for the third time, better each time!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/26/2016 1:58:00 PM
Thanks John.;0)
Date: 9/24/2016 9:45:00 PM
Richard, Congratulations on your well-deserved win. :):):) Stop by my latest blog "Last Laugh." if you'd like. Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/26/2016 9:31:00 AM
Hi Linda, thanks for picking my poem for your contest. Hugs Rick.
Date: 9/24/2016 1:36:00 PM
Hi Richard, wonderful poem, very well written. I'm left wondering about the meaning of the lines "within a momentary breath each spirit goes" and "Instead why not drink from the garden hose" is there a deeper meaning to these verses? I would love to hear your thought process
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/26/2016 9:08:00 AM
Hi Andrew, the first answer is that we are each a breath away from the next life, none of us knows when that breath will be. The garden hose reference refers to the freedom we took for granted as a child. I hope this provides some insight. Thanks for being interested. You might like my poem "Boy oh boy and a girl".
Date: 9/22/2016 11:58:00 PM
Wow! This was an exceptionally well thought out write! You have touched on every aspect of life. Well done. Adding to my fav.. Thanks for sharing.. Jenni
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/26/2016 9:09:00 AM
Thanks for such a great comment and visit. Hugs Rick.
Date: 9/19/2016 12:18:00 PM
Hey Richard! Great poem, I love conflict. Just wondering, what would you say the central topic and theme of this poem would be?
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/19/2016 2:24:00 PM
Contemplating my place within a varied humanity.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/19/2016 2:24:00 PM
What was your personal take on it??
Date: 9/17/2016 4:38:00 AM
...and finally yet again you amaze us with your wisdom,I wish I could meet you in person someday and say how talented you are...waiting for your next..Sir Richard
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/17/2016 8:25:00 AM
You never know how life might lead. Thanks for your kind words.
Date: 9/16/2016 12:33:00 AM
Congrats, dear Richard. This is awesome. We are all the same....we all want love. We all have dreams and goals. God knows what is best. You really brought it home so well. :) Hugs.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/16/2016 8:23:00 AM
Thanks Eileen, it was a pleasant surprise when this one was chosen. Hugs Rick.
Date: 9/15/2016 2:27:00 PM
Congratulations Richard on being awarded POTD! I am a little behind. Cheers, Connie ; )
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/16/2016 8:23:00 AM
No worries, thanks for the visit.
Date: 9/14/2016 12:31:00 PM
Back for a second read and it gets better each time, I see congrats are in order POTD very worthy choice. Always a pleasure to read you Richard!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/14/2016 2:09:00 PM
Thanks John.:0)
Date: 9/14/2016 3:13:00 AM
If this were mine I'd be tempted to change the order of the last three words to give it a double meaning.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/14/2016 7:52:00 AM
Interesting thought Keith. Thanks for commenting.
Date: 9/13/2016 11:20:00 PM
Wow, blew me away, oustanding...
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/14/2016 7:53:00 AM
Thanks Dale. ;0)
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