Andrea Dietrich Poet Triolet

Pretty Penny

"See a penny pick it up
And all the day you'll have good luck" 
~famous English expression ~

Pretty Penny at the train track,
wishing to meet the perfect guy,
lays down a coin and then stands back!
Pretty Penny at the train track,
hearing the wheels’ clickety clack,
meets her fate once the train rolls by.
Pretty Penny at the train track -
wishing to meet the perfect guy.

Across that track, a boy in view
will soon pick up that pretty girl, 
and he’ll have luck his whole life through!
Across that track, a boy in view
knows just exactly what to do,
so with his head now in a whirl,
across that track, a boy in view
will soon pick up that pretty girl!

By Andrea Dietrich
Inspired by nette onclaud's
THE AFTERGLOW Poetry Contest

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Robin Davis January 14, 2014 at 10:09 PM Andrea This is such a cute and charming write. Full of fun and amusement. Nice job Thanks for the great comment on my Your Demise poem. Hugs

Harry Horsman October 4, 2012 at 4:08 PM another gem from you, so creative, and enjoyable to read... Andrea see my Blog, re comments on this site, you may be able to throw some light on tpo the situation.........

Jslambert Mister Roboto November 7, 2011 at 10:27 PM Nice kiddie poem. I do enjoy them. I have written a few kid books. Oh and your comment about congress is correct, but I just wish that people could look deeper into this problem and see that Congress and the Prez are merely pawns in a Global scheme of filth and greed. The Federal Reserve Owns this country. Too much crap goes on behind the scenes which the media, (who is also owned by criminals) will never tell the public about. Keep in touch. And I hope your surgery/neck get better!

John Smith August 22, 2011 at 12:41 AM A boy, a girl and a penny; I like the rhythm. The line ends go: track-guy-by...and view, girl, through. Too bad, 'cause there is no 'perfect guy.' Someone ought to tell her.

Phyllis Babcock August 15, 2011 at 4:12 PM Wrote a poem and lost it when I tried to post it. Congrats on you win. love phyl

Sara Kendrick August 15, 2011 at 3:07 PM Congrats...Very creative work..Sara

Jack Horne August 15, 2011 at 2:19 PM I love this clever one. Many congratulations on all your wins, Andrea : )

Carol Sunshine Brown August 15, 2011 at 10:32 AM Congratulations on your well deserved placement in Nette's "In The Afterglow" contest Andrea. Love, Carol

Nette Onclaud August 15, 2011 at 6:47 AM congrats, penny andie... come visit my shadorma poem; have an invite for you..:) huggs, nette

Tim B August 15, 2011 at 12:06 AM Congratulations Andrea on your very well deserved win! I had a good feeling about this one when I first commented! :)

Dr.Ram Mehta August 14, 2011 at 8:29 PM Congratulations on the second place win in the contest,andrea

S.Jagathsimhan Nair August 14, 2011 at 7:58 PM A big congrats on your great win, Andrea, I have not seen it earlier,sorry..coin idea was simply great..see how it worked out eventually to produce this pretty delightful piece, jag

Debbie Guzzi August 14, 2011 at 7:30 PM wow great minds in the same track LOL Congrad's Andie Light & love

Carrie Richards August 14, 2011 at 5:59 PM Yours is a much more upbeat theme....not as sad or melancholy as my take on this one. (You have the soul of an optimist I do think!! LOL ) Congratulations, Andrea!!

John Freeman August 14, 2011 at 5:14 PM Great to see your poem doing well in Nette's contest, Andrea. Congratulations on second place. Agape, Moses

Joe Maverick August 14, 2011 at 4:45 PM Congratulations Andrea on the great win..

Linda-Marie Sweetheart August 14, 2011 at 4:10 PM Congrats Andrea on second place in Nette's contest with this exquisite entry my friend..luv..

Sidney Beck August 14, 2011 at 3:46 PM Good interpretation ...big deserved congratulations Andrea....not a very common name nowadays but I always liked the name Penny...obviously Penelope rhymes with "tea" or "pea" but when I was a kid I always pronounced it as rhyming with "antelope" L O L

Judy Ball August 13, 2011 at 5:56 AM This is really cute Andrea. Shouldbe a winner. God Bless, JB

Dinda Minardi August 12, 2011 at 12:10 PM Wow, this is interesting and entertaining, Andrea. Good writings. :)

Carol Sunshine Brown August 11, 2011 at 10:46 PM I am stopping by this evening to thank you for your kind comments while the soup is up and running. I will never get caught up oh well that's life right? Turn off the tension. Have a wonderful evening Andrea. Love, Carol

Kevin Clark August 9, 2011 at 1:48 PM Very nice story. Such a strong longing for that lucky love to come along.

Tim B August 8, 2011 at 12:54 PM Love how you start us out with the quote. Very optimistic and exciting tone, a sure winner in the contest, good luck :)

Carrie Richards August 7, 2011 at 8:30 PM Love the form you have chosen....I haven't come up with any muse to write for this contest....I'd better hurry it is filling up fast! This is delightful, Andrea! By the way...hope you are feeling much better day by day! Taking time to recover from your surgery, and a little pampering doesn't hurt!

Black Eyed Susan August 7, 2011 at 5:12 PM i am not familiar with this form. will check it out.so far i like the play back and forth between the boy and girl. good luck in the contest :)

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