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Prelude To a Kiss

two hands fingers laced              
lie prone upon crisp linen 
prelude to soft kiss

loving eyes pairing
gaze long wrapped in candle light
unchained melody

~*~


Note:  Daydreaming, again!

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Deirdre Omaidin

Date: 2/18/2011 8:26:00 AM

A beautiful creative synru, tells a lovers tale Deirdre

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/9/2011 1:46:00 PM

This is awesome!! A highest rating. Luv,Andrea

Audrey Haick

Date: 2/9/2011 9:52:00 AM

I can understand why you don't get my use of "unchained melody" in this, Samir..you would have to be familiar with the song "Unchained Melody" to fully grasp the feelings potrayed here. Soup Mail incase you don't see this comment. Always, Annalise

Samir Georges

Date: 2/9/2011 12:17:00 AM

I love your use of diction. Just comes to show how well used words can bring to life the softest of images. I learn a little from every poem I read, but this time I think I've learned quiet a bit. prelude indeed. Might I suggest a change to the use of the word unchained? The moment the word chained appears, there is an afterthought of, well, a chain. Which seems to contrast with such a soft and creamy poem.

Elaine George

Date: 2/8/2011 1:41:00 AM

Absolutely breath-takingly beautiful. Annalise. Lainie

Robert Pettit

Date: 2/7/2011 7:56:00 PM

You write and daydream very well. This is a fine pair of senryu poems.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/7/2011 2:56:00 PM

Nothing wrong with daydreaming, Annalise. It keeps us going sometimes and this is such a beautiful, romantic poem. I had almost forgotten what a "prelude to a kiss" was like. Thanks for the reminder. Trying to keep hope alive, dear. Love you, Carolyn