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Prelude To a Kiss

two hands fingers laced              
lie prone upon crisp linen 
prelude to soft kiss

loving eyes pairing
gaze long wrapped in candle light
unchained melody

~*~


Note:  Daydreaming, again!

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Deirdre Omaidin

February 18, 2011 at 8:26 AM

A beautiful creative synru, tells a lovers tale Deirdre

Andrea Dietrich

February 9, 2011 at 1:46 PM

This is awesome!! A highest rating. Luv,Andrea

Audrey Haick

February 9, 2011 at 9:52 AM

I can understand why you don't get my use of "unchained melody" in this, Samir..you would have to be familiar with the song "Unchained Melody" to fully grasp the feelings potrayed here. Soup Mail incase you don't see this comment. Always, Annalise

Samir Georges

February 9, 2011 at 12:17 AM

I love your use of diction. Just comes to show how well used words can bring to life the softest of images. I learn a little from every poem I read, but this time I think I've learned quiet a bit. prelude indeed. Might I suggest a change to the use of the word unchained? The moment the word chained appears, there is an afterthought of, well, a chain. Which seems to contrast with such a soft and creamy poem.

Elaine George

February 8, 2011 at 1:41 AM

Absolutely breath-takingly beautiful. Annalise. Lainie

Robert Pettit

February 7, 2011 at 7:56 PM

You write and daydream very well. This is a fine pair of senryu poems.

Carolyn Devonshire

February 7, 2011 at 2:56 PM

Nothing wrong with daydreaming, Annalise. It keeps us going sometimes and this is such a beautiful, romantic poem. I had almost forgotten what a "prelude to a kiss" was like. Thanks for the reminder. Trying to keep hope alive, dear. Love you, Carolyn