Richard Lamoureux Poet Quatrain

Precious Pearl

A soft whisper, across the room
I watched her shake out the old broom
Please come over to me mister
Across the room, a soft whisper

I walked her way, she smiled at me
In her presence I felt so free
Looking in her eyes made my day
She smiled at me, I walked her way

A simple girl, natural beauty
She asked "Are you bound by duty?
Can you please help me find my pearl?"
Natural beauty, a simple girl

I said "gladly, for but one kiss
to taste your lips, would be my bliss."
"Do you wish for me so badly?"
"For but one kiss" I said gladly

Down on one knee, I searched the ground
I prayed for her pearl to be found
For with her, I wanted to be
I searched the ground, down on one knee

A precious pearl, held in my hand
Her lips were then, mine to command
She was a woman not a girl
Held in my hand, a precious pearl

I watched her turn, she walked away
She said "dear sir you've had your pay
Within my chest, my heart did burn
She walked away, I watched her turn



For Andrea Deitrich's
"Swap Quatrain Contest"

I kept all the lines to eight sylables to
further challange myself. This was a tough
but fun one to write Andrea.

Written February 20th, 2014

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Kelly Deschler March 11, 2014 at 5:52 PM I very much enjoyed reading this sweet, romantic story. You did a wonderful job with this challenging form. Nice work, Richard! Congratulations on your win, as well! Richard Lamoureux March 11, 2014 at 6:06 PM Thanks Kelly.

Joseph May March 9, 2014 at 12:52 PM A delightful story...congrats on a fine win Richard Lamoureux March 11, 2014 at 6:08 PM Thanks Joseph.

Barbara Gorelick March 9, 2014 at 12:32 PM Glad to read your winning poem. A very different kind of subject and I loved it. BG Richard Lamoureux March 11, 2014 at 6:09 PM Thanks I try my best to think a creatively as possible. I'm pleased you like it.

Andrea Dietrich March 9, 2014 at 11:32 AM Richard, I really like this one of yours. If you noticed, I had a number of really nice ones at the fifth placement. Seeing yours again, I realize I should have placed it even higher. I think I should have put it fourth now. You did awesome with the challenge. congrats for your win. Richard Lamoureux March 11, 2014 at 6:10 PM Thanks Andrea.

Dr.Ram Mehta March 9, 2014 at 5:01 AM Congratulations on the fine win. Enjoyed the rhyme perfect, richard Richard Lamoureux March 9, 2014 at 8:57 AM Thanks Dr Ram

Nette Onclaud March 9, 2014 at 1:58 AM deeply woven write, rich.. ..sweet 'grads on your award!.. huggs Richard Lamoureux March 9, 2014 at 8:56 AM Thanks Nette

Kayod5 Kayode March 9, 2014 at 1:29 AM A great work you did here , congrats Richard. Richard Lamoureux March 9, 2014 at 8:56 AM Thanks Kayod

Charmaine Chircop February 25, 2014 at 10:47 AM Pearls are the best way to describe beauty.Through my eyes a pearl is something not only beautiful but pure.I love it when you roll romantic,and I have a feeling Andrea loves this as much as me..Going to my favs and tnks for your supporting comments on my simple verse. Richard Lamoureux February 25, 2014 at 12:03 PM What a great comment, I am so honored. As for your poetry you fail to recognize your own gifts which I see as considerable. Hugs Rick.

Demetrios Trifiatis February 22, 2014 at 5:43 AM A marvel of a story beautifully written and incomparably touching! Next time hope she will ask to find her more than one pearl so your reward greater would be! A 7 my friend Richard! Richard Lamoureux February 22, 2014 at 8:44 AM Ha ha, if I had mor courage perhaps I would have asked for time with her.

Kayod5 Kayode February 22, 2014 at 12:41 AM '' I prayed for her pearl to be found'' ''A precious pearl, held in my hand Her lips were then, mine to command'' A prayer answered Richard...nothing venture not gain,a kiss for finding a pearl is not on high side.I'm still laughing...corporate lover Richard Lamoureux February 22, 2014 at 8:47 AM Glad I can amuse Kayod5, thanks for your entertaining comment.

Richard D Seal February 21, 2014 at 7:38 PM When you got down on one knee I thought you were going to propose to her lol. Well done Rick, haven't had time to think on this form but you've done a great job, especially keeping to the syllables. Take care, Richard Richard Lamoureux February 22, 2014 at 8:46 AM Thanks Rich, I thought I would add a twist. Somtimes the guy does not get the gal.

Tim B February 21, 2014 at 12:11 PM I like the comparison of the pearl with natural beauty. Some would call it dull in the world of flashy stones, but it captures a natural beauty that none of the rest can. Like a woman with natural beauty can capture a man's heart like no other can. Well said, and thank you for sharing. Richard Lamoureux February 21, 2014 at 4:50 PM Wow thanks Tim, you totally understood my metophor. Thanks for the great comment.

Shadow Hamilton February 21, 2014 at 11:45 AM super Rick gl in contest hugs Richard Lamoureux February 21, 2014 at 4:50 PM Thanks Shadow, I'll take all the luck I can.

Eileen Manassian February 21, 2014 at 9:46 AM Was hoping for a new one today.....Have a great day..... Richard Lamoureux February 21, 2014 at 4:52 PM Have fun, what part of the US? Have my books arrived yet? I am so excited to have you recieve them. Eileen Manassian February 21, 2014 at 10:13 AM Yes.... I've ready many many of those... Great work... Will check later....Hubby comes home from his US trip in an hour......Getting ready....... ;-) Later.... Richard Lamoureux February 21, 2014 at 9:53 AM Some of my old ones may be new ones.

Poet Tacito February 21, 2014 at 7:41 AM Simple pleasures, simple power. This was a pretty graceful poem. Be sure to apply a comma before "I said gladly" & "a precious pearl". It'll flow even better than it already does. ;-) Richard Lamoureux February 21, 2014 at 8:35 AM Thanks Drake.

Robert Pettit February 20, 2014 at 11:25 PM Andrea should like this one because I like it. Good job. Richard Lamoureux February 21, 2014 at 8:36 AM I hope you are right Robert, thanks for the vote of confidence.

Eileen Manassian February 20, 2014 at 8:30 PM So glad you went for it and wrote your own.....SHE Walked away???? She obviously doesn't know what she is doing. :) Interesting story you've weaved here. Hugs Richard Lamoureux February 20, 2014 at 10:44 PM Ha ha, thanks.

Tim Smith February 20, 2014 at 7:23 PM This is grand Richard. All for the powerful kiss. Richard Lamoureux February 20, 2014 at 7:33 PM Thanks Tim, a kiss is indeed a powerful thing.