Home » Poems » Richard Lamoureux » Precious Pearl

Precious Pearl

A soft whisper, across the room I watched her shake out the old broom Please come over to me mister Across the room, a soft whisper I walked her way, she smiled at me In her presence I felt so free Looking in her eyes made my day She smiled at me, I walked her way A simple girl, natural beauty She asked "Are you bound by duty? Can you please help me find my pearl?" Natural beauty, a simple girl I said "gladly, for but one kiss to taste your lips, would be my bliss." "Do you wish for me so badly?" "For but one kiss" I said gladly Down on one knee, I searched the ground I prayed for her pearl to be found For with her, I wanted to be I searched the ground, down on one knee A precious pearl, held in my hand Her lips were then, mine to command She was a woman not a girl Held in my hand, a precious pearl I watched her turn, she walked away She said "dear sir you've had your pay Within my chest, my heart did burn She walked away, I watched her turn For Andrea Deitrich's "Swap Quatrain Contest" I kept all the lines to eight sylables to further challange myself. This was a tough but fun one to write Andrea. Written February 20th, 2014

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Kelly Deschler

Date: 3/11/2014 5:52:00 PM

I very much enjoyed reading this sweet, romantic story. You did a wonderful job with this challenging form. Nice work, Richard! Congratulations on your win, as well!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/11/2014 6:06:00 PM

Thanks Kelly.

Joseph May

Date: 3/9/2014 12:52:00 PM

A delightful story...congrats on a fine win

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/11/2014 6:08:00 PM

Thanks Joseph.

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 3/9/2014 12:32:00 PM

Glad to read your winning poem. A very different kind of subject and I loved it. BG

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/11/2014 6:09:00 PM

Thanks I try my best to think a creatively as possible. I'm pleased you like it.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/9/2014 11:32:00 AM

Richard, I really like this one of yours. If you noticed, I had a number of really nice ones at the fifth placement. Seeing yours again, I realize I should have placed it even higher. I think I should have put it fourth now. You did awesome with the challenge. congrats for your win.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/11/2014 6:10:00 PM

Thanks Andrea.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 3/9/2014 5:01:00 AM

Congratulations on the fine win. Enjoyed the rhyme perfect, richard

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/9/2014 8:57:00 AM

Thanks Dr Ram

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/9/2014 1:58:00 AM

deeply woven write, rich.. ..sweet 'grads on your award!.. huggs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/9/2014 8:56:00 AM

Thanks Nette

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 3/9/2014 1:29:00 AM

A great work you did here , congrats Richard.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/9/2014 8:56:00 AM

Thanks Kayod

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 2/25/2014 10:47:00 AM

Pearls are the best way to describe beauty.Through my eyes a pearl is something not only beautiful but pure.I love it when you roll romantic,and I have a feeling Andrea loves this as much as me..Going to my favs and tnks for your supporting comments on my simple verse.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/25/2014 12:03:00 PM

What a great comment, I am so honored. As for your poetry you fail to recognize your own gifts which I see as considerable. Hugs Rick.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 2/22/2014 5:43:00 AM

A marvel of a story beautifully written and incomparably touching! Next time hope she will ask to find her more than one pearl so your reward greater would be! A 7 my friend Richard!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/22/2014 8:44:00 AM

Ha ha, if I had mor courage perhaps I would have asked for time with her.

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 2/22/2014 12:41:00 AM

'' I prayed for her pearl to be found'' ''A precious pearl, held in my hand Her lips were then, mine to command'' A prayer answered Richard...nothing venture not gain,a kiss for finding a pearl is not on high side.I'm still laughing...corporate lover

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/22/2014 8:47:00 AM

Glad I can amuse Kayod5, thanks for your entertaining comment.

Richard D Seal

Date: 2/21/2014 7:38:00 PM

When you got down on one knee I thought you were going to propose to her lol. Well done Rick, haven't had time to think on this form but you've done a great job, especially keeping to the syllables. Take care, Richard

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/22/2014 8:46:00 AM

Thanks Rich, I thought I would add a twist. Somtimes the guy does not get the gal.

Tim B

Date: 2/21/2014 12:11:00 PM

I like the comparison of the pearl with natural beauty. Some would call it dull in the world of flashy stones, but it captures a natural beauty that none of the rest can. Like a woman with natural beauty can capture a man's heart like no other can. Well said, and thank you for sharing.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/21/2014 4:50:00 PM

Wow thanks Tim, you totally understood my metophor. Thanks for the great comment.

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 2/21/2014 11:45:00 AM

super Rick gl in contest hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/21/2014 4:50:00 PM

Thanks Shadow, I'll take all the luck I can.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 2/21/2014 9:46:00 AM

Was hoping for a new one today.....Have a great day.....

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/21/2014 4:52:00 PM

Have fun, what part of the US? Have my books arrived yet? I am so excited to have you recieve them.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 2/21/2014 10:13:00 AM

Yes.... I've ready many many of those... Great work... Will check later....Hubby comes home from his US trip in an hour......Getting ready....... ;-) Later....

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/21/2014 9:53:00 AM

Some of my old ones may be new ones.

Poet Tacito

Date: 2/21/2014 7:41:00 AM

Simple pleasures, simple power. This was a pretty graceful poem. Be sure to apply a comma before "I said gladly" & "a precious pearl". It'll flow even better than it already does. ;-)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/21/2014 8:35:00 AM

Thanks Drake.

Robert Pettit

Date: 2/20/2014 11:25:00 PM

Andrea should like this one because I like it. Good job.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/21/2014 8:36:00 AM

I hope you are right Robert, thanks for the vote of confidence.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 2/20/2014 8:30:00 PM

So glad you went for it and wrote your own.....SHE Walked away???? She obviously doesn't know what she is doing. :) Interesting story you've weaved here. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/20/2014 10:44:00 PM

Ha ha, thanks.

Tim Smith

Date: 2/20/2014 7:23:00 PM

This is grand Richard. All for the powerful kiss.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/20/2014 7:33:00 PM

Thanks Tim, a kiss is indeed a powerful thing.