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1965 Portsmouth, Virginia. On liberty in uniform

Portsmouth

Shipmates headed to town on a Saturday night
Ready to party, ready to fight
Passing a bar, I said Let’s stop by
There’s a barmaid inside who had caught my eye
Local boy said I saw what you did
You hit on my girl. You’re a dead man, squid
I don’t let no one hit on her no more
When someone does, then that means war
So I said Please to meet you. I’m really charmed
But if it’s a war on words, then you’re unarmed
Hey, I want you to know, you’re number one with me too
What a coincidence, the same number as your I Q.
Can’t help it if this ole boy set her heart on fire
So back off if you don’t want to sing soprano in the choir
Now I may not be the brightest lad
But it was easy to see he was getting mad
Then I said sorry man, I should have kept my mouth shut
Because I don’t have time to kick your butt
Then as I backed toward the door, I don’t know why
I stopped in front of the bar maid and I kissed her goodbye
The local saw fire and his face turned red
He threw a bottle at me that just missed my head
Then he charged at me and I took out his feet
And he slipped through the door and into the street
I looked at my shipmate and said some other day
We jumped over the bar and went out the back way
I said to my shipmate Let’s go somewhere else and unwind
He said you’re okay for a Yankee but you’re out of your mind.


Portsmouth, Virginia 1965 on liberty.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2008

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Fraser Avatar
May 16, 2009 at 10:38 PM
oops Policeman, detention again for bad spelling, James
Fraser Avatar
May 16, 2009 at 10:37 PM
My brother in law is a ploiceman in Portsmouth, and i was there for 2 weeks at HMS Dryad in 1976 on an introductory course before joining up in Jan 77 to do my boys service, lots of memories flooding back here, James
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May 8, 2009 at 2:49 PM
this is so funny and wonderfully penned and by the way,portsmouth is a nice place and his neighbour island isle of wight,im glad mty fingertips led me here---charam lol;-)
Bickerstaffe Avatar
December 4, 2008 at 5:00 PM
A boisterous tale well rhymed... you have a real knack for storytelling. BRAVO Vince! Best wishes, Keith
Strand Avatar
November 12, 2008 at 11:38 PM
They say alls fair in love and war Vince.Rgds Brian
Spence Sr Avatar
November 9, 2008 at 12:53 PM
This sounds great to me. It appears like the fun we used to have in Korea. I am still laughing over this one. The images are just lovely and I can see all of them clearly. It’s great that you slipped out the back door; he probably was waiting in the middle of the street like high noon for you to step out. I bet he was highly disappointed. LOL!!! This is just awesome. Great job! ~Joseph
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November 9, 2008 at 4:27 AM
HA!!!!! LOVE this! Especially the last 2 lines- priceless. I'd have loved to see that. lol Cheers, and yo ho ho and all that rot, excellence my friend, that's for the laugh, love Kristin
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November 8, 2008 at 6:12 PM
Hey there's a wild side of Vince Suzadail!! I can just see you now, roughing up those hooligans who went after your girl! Sure sounds like another side to this poet! I love the trips you take us on! I'm glad to be on the sidelines watching all the rucus! ~:) Carrie Ps. Hope you paid for any damage you caused!
Winter Avatar
November 8, 2008 at 5:34 PM
Why Vince you sound like a completely irresistible adorable trouble maker! If this is indeed about you. Either way , an awesome write which felt like a scene from a great movie! So witty, fun and well written! Love, Shar
Torres Avatar
November 8, 2008 at 5:17 PM
Vince brought back memories. Ill leave it at that. This is very funny. It must have been more then adventurous to be a sailor . More on land then out at sea. Lol. Blessings Michael
White Avatar
November 8, 2008 at 5:01 PM
a nice display of flexing your man hood, you showed him who was boss, this write made me smile, take care D-ncye
Jordan Avatar
November 8, 2008 at 4:40 PM
Vince my man pardon the language but that was one hell of a tale there - Funny how we survived all that kind of stuff - The excitement is one thing I guess I'll always miss - Life seems rather melancholy to me these days - Great poem Vince it reminded me of some memories of my own - God Bless you and yours always, Michael
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