Portrait of Abandoned Landscape

wind blew with the strength like a monster on that night.
a creepy sounds ,roar in every corner haunting each ears of those alive.
a big blast pushing each shanties that it passed by, wrecked and destroyed.
the strongest surge came to orphaned  a lot of souls,
left  thousands  breathless cadavers scattered when the sun arose.
a trembling sounds of  widow cries for the love that's lost.
on her arms hold the body of her baby ,died in the flood.
an old lady look for a shade to hide, faintedly starving.
another man  screaming for his family buried in mud.
a five-year old girl looks for her siblings,her mom and dad.
wounded civilians, dead people and hungry souls, 
washed away by the most deadliest storm.
one beautiful paradise, a haven to everyone with life,
has become a wide grave of people sleeping in Sheol.
a broad lawn for a broken hearts, wounded souls.
the sun shines only to dry the tears from their eyes.
and the wind blew consoling a child flying his kite.



** 1st Place Winner in SKAT A.'s Contest : Saddest Landscape **

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 4/11/2014 7:56:00 PM
big YAYYY for you. I loved this first time I saw it. Congrats.
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 4/13/2014 3:01:00 AM
awwww...thanks a lot ,Andie!!!! you're the sweetest friend I always wanted.. :")))
Date: 4/11/2014 2:45:00 AM
Awesome...sad...memory of nature's destructive side. Lest we forget! // congrats AiyaH. Take care. // paul
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 4/11/2014 7:52:00 AM
Indeed Paul...and no one can escape from nature's sweet revenge... Thank you for always spending a time to read and comment on my poem :O))
Date: 4/10/2014 4:34:00 AM
Congratulations aiyah.. :) sad terrible and really heartbreaking write............... typhooooooons in PHILIPPINES..... ==olive_eloi :)
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 4/10/2014 7:21:00 AM
hey.. my olive_eloi,,,, thank you so much dear for this wonderful greetings!!!! ..:))) aaaahhh,,,, this is soooo touching!!! ...The world would not forget that tragic event in Philippines history... no one :'O(( ...
Date: 4/9/2014 9:50:00 PM
NICE GOING IN MY CONTEST... YEAH....SKAT
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 4/10/2014 7:33:00 AM
My SKAT... my dearest girlfriend... this is so overwhelming dear,,,, !!!! Thank you for a plcement of my poem in your contest!!! ,,this is terrific... lol... THANKS A LOT, SEEEEXXXYYYY!!!! :"O)))
Date: 3/25/2014 3:28:00 AM
This seems like an eyewitness observation. Very touching!
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 3/25/2014 2:36:00 PM
ThaNk you, Steven!! =)) it's my pleasure to have your comment!!! ... thanks for your time... ^__^
Date: 3/22/2014 6:13:00 AM
Very mature your writings are very mature and thank you for reading my poems
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 3/22/2014 11:22:00 AM
Thank you for a kind comment my friend, KeitH!! .. :0)
Date: 3/21/2014 7:06:00 PM
awful grief in this write Aiyah words of sadness that seem to come from personal experience great pen hugs
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 3/22/2014 11:24:00 AM
Thank you Shadow for a very kind visit and for commenting on my poem... !! this is one real story in my country... until now... I can't still forget the scene... ^__^ oxoxox
Date: 3/21/2014 9:27:00 AM
Aiyah, this poem is so deep and sorrowful, and so beautifully written, well done,
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 3/21/2014 9:31:00 AM
Wew! I'm not expecting this...ThaNk you for a kind visit and comment!!! ... I'm so honoured.. ^__^
Date: 3/21/2014 6:36:00 AM
A beautifully sad poem you excellently penned here my very dear friend Aiyah. I'm so glad I've stopped by here to read another precious gems of yours. Kudos to you on a job well done & TYSM for sharing! If this is for a contest, a winner for me. Well, good luck always! Biggest hugs! love lots, Leonora
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 3/21/2014 7:22:00 AM
oooohh..you're the ever sweetest friend Leo.. :')) thank you for this overwhelming visit and comment on my poem.. you're such a sweetheart !!! ThaNk yoU soooo Much!! :O)) oxoxoxo^__^
Date: 3/20/2014 1:20:00 PM
This epic of destruction is very sobering Aiyah, and the way you close this view of nature, is with a reminder of how youth inspires all in despair. J.A.B.
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 3/20/2014 1:44:00 PM
Hey J.A.B. ...tHaNk you for this brilliant comment... you're a man of big thoughts.. ^__^ and i admire you for tHat!! ... :'))
Date: 3/20/2014 12:00:00 AM
wow, you really came up with a descriptive poem on sad landscape contest. using real life images that haunt us in this modern age, the horrors of storms against which we have no control. This is a very good entry in the contest.
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 3/20/2014 8:29:00 AM
Thank you, Andie!! ... I got inspired to join in Skat's contest and share the story of the recently disaster happened last October in our country... remember the Haiyan's surge?... I thought first of that scene to become my subject.. Thanksthat you liked it!! ..that means a lot..!! :')) oxoxox
Date: 3/19/2014 7:21:00 PM
This is so sad kiddo, but it's an honest write, very discriptive though, loved it for it's realism and dramtic intensity, keep it up lady i will read another. cheri
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Aiyah Torres
Date: 3/20/2014 8:31:00 AM
Hi Cheri.. Oh thank you for this very kind visit my dear friend!! ..:')) i'm happy to see you once again on my poem!!! ...TYSSM!!! ^__^
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