Pointing Back

Pointing back

From where I sit,
this crowded street of frowning faces and lying eyes
meander past the mom and pop facades with kids in tow…
tethered by their wants
and constant whining

now glaring at me as if,  
I am the problem

I wave them off in my best oceanic gesture,
casting salty aspirations to the ground around my feet…
all the while keeping my fitted 
thoughts to myself

For opposite this asphalt divider 
of pot holes and swept debris
she sits, twisting her chocolate hair around her finger, 
staring at the clock, waiting

Wearing her favorite dress,
glistening crimson nail and lip paint 

The violent sun finds my shoulders
scattering grey clouds 
between the concrete and neon
folded on the structure facing my perch

A single drop of sweat rolls down my cheek,
on this day more will come

Mixed, blended, hidden or defined
by tears held back, losing the battle
I take in the second story window,
shade slightly drawn and I imagine her

Jumping excitedly at the knock, 
a quick mirrored touch up and fanciful bounces,
as smiles lead her to 
his rugged features and fat wallet

The engine idles, I can smell the fumes
dancing across my nostrils, sickened

Floating the steps, (they) she looks happy, then at me
her head drops, sad or thankful, probably
Engine revs, my eyes fill
as thunderstorms erupt on my face, (they) she disappears

My heart near death, beating slow
it reels on this day,
while others, in their mindless pandering
and nose followed directions, stare and point

I spit, reaching our heart encased initials
carved in the stained and tiring sidewalk

My chest throbs, legs weak and nonexistent,
transparent of hurt and glass filtered wishes
Pointing back at those who would judge, I shout…

Yes, I am the problem!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 7/5/2017 10:48:00 AM
Yeah I'm feelin it too, those old memories come back once in a while leaving a bitter taste in ones mouth, heard a Dan Hill song yesterday and it took me back 30 years in an instant, glad you got this one off your chest, amazing writing, your storytelling is off the charts Chris!
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Chris Green
Date: 7/5/2017 11:36:00 AM
Thanks so much my friend for your wonderful comment on my poem. They do come back and they do haunt, but fortunately they offer some poetic inspiration and don't hang around too long.
Date: 7/5/2017 4:07:00 AM
That is incredible, my talented friend. What a great poem you have written. I have read it many times and will add it to my favs. These lines i love best:"I spit, reaching our heart encased initials carved in the stained and tiring sidewalk". Stained and tiring sidewalk... How beautiful.
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Chris Green
Date: 7/5/2017 8:27:00 AM
Thanks so very much my friend. I appreciate your kindness always.
Date: 7/3/2017 4:03:00 PM
This is deep as a heartbreaking poem would be Chris. I know how memories can be too. Good to express them :)
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Chris Green
Date: 7/3/2017 4:11:00 PM
Thanks so much my friend. They are from long, long ago but they always seem to hang around. I appreciate your kindness Heidi.
Date: 7/3/2017 3:25:00 PM
Don't let beauty or poetic ideals do your thinking for you. If you met her you might not even like her. Don't forget what you think matters in this equation, too, perhaps more than anything. Good write, though.
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Dale Gregory Cozart
Date: 7/3/2017 3:46:00 PM
I hoped it was, but I was concerned nonetheless.
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Chris Green
Date: 7/3/2017 3:33:00 PM
Thanks so much Dale. It really just a poem, maybe some memories from long ago but nothing relevant to what I feel today. Thanks again my friend.
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