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Poignant Reflections

I watch you in my deepest despair Falling from all you know and care A life of uncertainty Slowly driven down hill Now my hands are tied In vain, I cry My tears fill Pools to Swim

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Nigel Fawcett

Date: 10/31/2008 12:56:00 AM

Oh yes, this is a great piece of literature. Excellent use of the form, without the form intruding; it just flows sadly and beautifully. Love the straw of hope in the final line. Love, Nigel

Farah Chamma

Date: 10/30/2008 4:37:00 PM

That's a good write...I like the form... an indeed poignant write... Take good care... The young one, Farah

Mohammad Yamin

Date: 10/29/2008 1:25:00 PM

Your poem paints real to life picture of despair. Your words pierce the hearts of the readers. The reader feels it is happening to him/her. A beautiful write. Thanks for your generous comments on my Haiku 'Disguise'. God Bless you! -Mohammad

Brian Strand

Date: 10/29/2008 1:25:00 AM

Best wishes with this one Laura.Excellent write.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments

P Sheart

Date: 10/28/2008 9:32:00 PM

Hi Laura This really tugs at my heartstrings. Which means within the sadness of this poem, it holds much depth and beauty for your inner heart really comes through here. This is something we all can relate to as some time or another in our lives. Hope all is well, sending good thoughts your way. Love Light Truth Patricia

Carrie Richards

Date: 10/28/2008 6:28:00 PM

That must be so painful, standing by as someone you love is sinking into quicksand. I'm so sorry, Laura. Hope for better days. ~ Carrie

Sharon Winter

Date: 10/28/2008 6:18:00 PM

Oh Laura, this is very sad. I feel your heart deeply, and your frustration at feeling helpless. Beautiful use of this form. I am truly hoping things change for the better. Love, Shar