Poignant Reflections

I watch you in my deepest despair 
Falling from all you know and care 
A life of uncertainty
Slowly driven down hill
Now my hands are tied 
In vain, I cry 
My tears fill
Pools to
Swim
Copyright © | Year Posted 2008

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Fawcett Avatar
October 31, 2008 at 12:56 AM
Oh yes, this is a great piece of literature. Excellent use of the form, without the form intruding; it just flows sadly and beautifully. Love the straw of hope in the final line. Love, Nigel
Chamma Avatar
October 30, 2008 at 4:37 PM
That's a good write...I like the form... an indeed poignant write... Take good care... The young one, Farah
Yamin Avatar
October 29, 2008 at 1:25 PM
Your poem paints real to life picture of despair. Your words pierce the hearts of the readers. The reader feels it is happening to him/her. A beautiful write. Thanks for your generous comments on my Haiku 'Disguise'. God Bless you! -Mohammad
Strand Avatar
October 29, 2008 at 1:25 AM
Best wishes with this one Laura.Excellent write.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
Sheart Avatar
October 28, 2008 at 9:32 PM
Hi Laura This really tugs at my heartstrings. Which means within the sadness of this poem, it holds much depth and beauty for your inner heart really comes through here. This is something we all can relate to as some time or another in our lives. Hope all is well, sending good thoughts your way. Love Light Truth Patricia
Richards Avatar
October 28, 2008 at 6:28 PM
That must be so painful, standing by as someone you love is sinking into quicksand. I'm so sorry, Laura. Hope for better days. ~ Carrie
Winter Avatar
October 28, 2008 at 6:18 PM
Oh Laura, this is very sad. I feel your heart deeply, and your frustration at feeling helpless. Beautiful use of this form. I am truly hoping things change for the better. Love, Shar
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