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oh that wretched hand keeps pulling me to one side I cannot see, but feel comfortable going where there is no direction blinking eyes mean nothing here things are the same opened or closed one step after another, the stubbing of toes for all I know the same dog has bitten me thrice everything looks the same smells the same, taste the same dammit I’m not even sure what I’m after but I cannot stop moving oh there goes another stubbed toe and this one appears to be bleeding or is that maple syrup this way, this way, this way, always this way where on earth is the exit door

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Date: 3/18/2018 11:13:00 AM
Hello Richard Evans, i get that. Sometimes I do not know where I am going either. have a nice day my friend.
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Ricky Muse
Date: 3/18/2018 5:29:00 PM
Darlene thank you for your support. Have a great day.
Date: 12/4/2017 3:14:00 PM
Speaking of figurative language. I like this poem.The flow of non literal events in time-not time ...going where there is no direction blinking eyes mean nothing here things are the same opened or closed one step after another the stubbing of toes... Excellent. Great tittle also and that you omitted capital letters and punctuation. I totally get it.
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Ricky Muse
Date: 12/4/2017 8:31:00 PM
Thank you lady for the kind words. That darn E.E. Cummings has definitely had an effect on me.
Date: 12/2/2017 7:15:00 PM
stubbing of toes what a great metaphor for life's stumbling blocks. great job on this Richard.
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Ricky Muse
Date: 12/4/2017 8:15:00 PM
I was trying to write a screenplay and became frustrated. This poem is my feelings towards that very challenging art form.
Date: 11/17/2017 12:46:00 PM
This is deep, I hope someone hears your cry and understands your fears.. Well expressed Richard..
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Thresha Reese
Date: 12/4/2017 3:15:00 PM
it's the angst
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Ricky Muse
Date: 11/18/2017 12:11:00 AM
S.O. this poem was different for me in that it seemed like a stream of consciousness. It damned near scared me.
Date: 11/16/2017 12:37:00 PM
Many questions formed as I read your poem, I like that.
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 11/17/2017 9:42:00 PM
Yes I do, very much.
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Ricky Muse
Date: 11/17/2017 12:46:00 PM
Pat you're not going to believe this but I was trying to write a sonnet but the darn poem wouldn't cooperate. Don't you just love when that happens?
Date: 11/12/2017 3:34:00 PM
The exit door....surely not to life itself, but to a hopeless situation. This poem is expressive of angst...Stubbed toes and all, one must keep moving head. Thank you for your visit to my poem. Blessings
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Ricky Muse
Date: 11/17/2017 12:43:00 PM
Eileen the pursuit of poetry can sometimes lead to a stubbed toe. Thanks for stopping bye....................peace!

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