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Pink Cherry Blossoms

pink cherry blossoms cast shimmering reflections on seas of Japan *This was my first haiku written when I was a childand committed to memory. Now that I know the rules of good haiku writing, I know this does not fit the criteria of haiku, but thought I'd post it anyway. Originally for PD's contest, I've decided to look for a more recent haiku of mine that is terrible, to be used for "worst poem contest."

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Beth Hanning

Date: 6/6/2018 11:43:00 AM

I think it is lovely so lovely I knew my 9th grader did not write it....he claimed he did

Skat A

Date: 5/16/2015 11:39:00 AM

You are good at this cherry blossom haiku

Jack Horne

Date: 5/5/2013 3:49:00 PM

I think it's lovely, if it's haiku or not! You were a clever child, my friend

Len Gasun

Date: 5/2/2013 1:52:00 AM

Hi again my dearest Andrea! I'm having a great day today reading your great and excellent works/writes. And, this one, hmmmnnn.. still, I'm loving it soo much. I can say, you're a great poet since childhood.;) Thank you so much for sharing. By the way, I'm home now enjoying my vacation with my mom. Take care always & best wishes! Big Hugs and love lots, Leonora

Matthew Anish

Date: 5/1/2013 10:15:00 AM

I like the form! My father went to Japan during the Korean war but I haven;t been there yet. There is a cherry blossom every year at the Brooklyn Botanical Gardens - and Isiah is right it is a good haiku! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Isaiah Zerbst

Date: 4/30/2013 8:47:00 AM

Well, this haiku is positively beautiful. No way it would win PD's contest! You will have to find something a lot worse!

Heather Ober

Date: 4/30/2013 7:21:00 AM

You wrote this when you were a child!? Sheesh, even as a kid, you couldn't write something bad! Even if it doesn't follow the true rules of haiku, I love the image you've created here.

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 4/29/2013 11:25:00 AM

Sorry, I really like this one, definitely not a "worst poem" in my books-- I find it so cool how you wrote this as a kid-- the imagery here just stood out for me, definitely not bad, Andrea!!! I love how you incorporated reflections here... hugs to you!

Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/29/2013 12:51:00 AM

A bit more vivid than my first attempt. I used to write haiku like crazy, thinking that it didn't matter what I was saying as long as I conformed to 5-7-5... haha. This really ain't so bad though! I'm a bit conflicted about entering "worst poem contest". I'd like to win... but is it really win if you got the reward "worst of the worst poem"...? LOL! It sounds like fun to enter however!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/28/2013 7:24:00 PM

Hi Andrea, how are you... I love the thoughts of this. very pretty in pink... and Texas, has flies right now...LOL.... thanks for asking... always~ Linda

Richard D Seal

Date: 4/28/2013 7:04:00 PM

This is the best haiku I've EVER read, you got no chance of winning now Petal lol. Night and take care, Richard

Robert Johnson

Date: 4/28/2013 2:42:00 PM

Well you endeared us with your little story here, so now we all just think it's adorable. :):)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/28/2013 1:30:00 PM

Great work..Well it has the 5-7-5, a word that tells the season -spring..I got an ah-ha moment with the reflections on the water..So I see Haiku..Enjoyed reading your contest entry..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Terry O'Leary

Date: 4/28/2013 1:00:00 PM

I think it's super... and for a child-you, it's even super-duper... Terry

Connie Gildersleeve

Date: 4/28/2013 12:59:00 PM

The image is beautiful Andrea. Quite an imagination for a child. Nicely penned. Warm Smiles, Connie

Bl Devnath

Date: 4/28/2013 12:35:00 PM

Excellently done. Enjoyed the seas of Japan with pink cherry blossoms reflection. Loved always, bl

Kash Poet

Date: 4/28/2013 12:21:00 PM

I bet this is not going to be your worst poem!!

Kash Poet

Date: 4/28/2013 12:19:00 PM

Do remember that a haiku can be a continuous sentence without any cut,I mean no two separate parts.Can you believe sometimes the cut comes at the end of line 3!

Kash Poet

Date: 4/28/2013 12:17:00 PM

This is a very good haiku and I can't believe you wrote it when you were a child!

Jeremy Martin

Date: 4/28/2013 11:40:00 AM

Hey Andrea! I love getting glimpses of peoples' younger writing. I can see your spirit in this early work. You commented on my poem Spider songs and asked me if was for a poetry contest involving detailed descriptions, but I just wrote it when I was in a very strange and descriptive mood. I think I might still be in one! Have a great day. -Jeremy

Painted Hunter

Date: 4/28/2013 11:24:00 AM

Andrea...you don't have bad poems, but I'll let you have one of mine. Even as a child, you wrote a pretty cool haiku...even if it doesn't follow the haiku rulebook...:) And yep, I've been to Beverly Hills, but it was a long time ago and I don't remember much of it....what I remember most is getting lost at Disneyland...haha.

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 4/28/2013 10:10:00 AM

I think I have a few of these too before I learned the rules of haiku. Will have to go back and have a look. love phyl

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/28/2013 9:32:00 AM

crap, I am getting such nice comments. Maybe I better look through all my poems and find something worse. Any suggestions, anyone?

Daver Austin

Date: 4/28/2013 9:27:00 AM

"You must have been a beautiful baby, but, baby..." And so the song goes. You know how I feel about child poetry. This is just great! Love, daver

Harry Horsman

Date: 4/28/2013 7:43:00 AM

You are joking Andrea, how could you ridicule this gem,,, you could not write a bad poem if you tried your very best,, because that is what you are the very best.....!!!!!!!!!!!