Piercing My Sadness

Through pale of eve, my eyes can see
beyond the trellis where I stand
a rose awaits, brushing the ground
through pale of eve, my eyes can see
needles of thorns ,calling for me
where tips of sadness purls around
through pale of eve, my eyes can see,
beyond the trellis where I stand.
 
While on the branches, heart’s thorns dry,
as if to pierce my faint lament
this lonesome rose tried to reply,
while on the branches, heart’s thorns dry
to face the night we said goodbye,
the day he kissed my cheeks and  went
while on the branches , heart’s thorns dry,
as if to pierce my faint lament.



Every Rose Has Its Thorn... Kelly Deschler
new poem  nette onclaud
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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A   Avatar
April 2, 2014 at 5:22 PM
Hey Nette, Congratulations on your winning poem... Amazing imagery. xox~ Linda
Arowolo Avatar
April 1, 2014 at 5:19 PM
Fantastic and beautiful write...Congrats on your win...This is lovely ,Nette..
George   Avatar
April 1, 2014 at 6:30 AM
Astonishing!!! A true Masterpiece, dear Nette. Lainie.
Stephens Avatar
April 1, 2014 at 3:40 AM
Hi Nette, Congrats on your well deserved win. A heartfelt lament. Regards Theresa xx
Mehta Avatar
April 1, 2014 at 1:20 AM
Beautiful imagery and nice take, congrats on the fine win, nette
Dom Avatar
March 31, 2014 at 7:22 PM
Hi Nette, this is an intersting form and poem for me to read. I like, very. Congratulations.
Deschler Avatar
March 31, 2014 at 4:54 PM
I loved the repetition of the lines, and the imagery was just beautiful. A wonderful write, Nette! Congratulations on your well deserved win!
Walker  Avatar
March 31, 2014 at 4:27 PM
Congratulations on the win Nette. Your poem is well done... Verlena
Bunch Avatar
March 25, 2014 at 4:20 AM
A wonderful write. The element of beauty with a sad goodbye. Great work.
Anish Avatar
March 24, 2014 at 2:48 PM
Beautiful roses have their downside - as indeed most beautiful things do. Fine job here! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
Kendrick Avatar
March 24, 2014 at 6:35 AM
Every rose has a thorn but aren't those roses sweet..Great work..Reads like a winner for the contest..Sara
Enriquez Avatar
March 22, 2014 at 8:45 PM
Dear Nette: Such a deep melancholy in these profound, sad lines. A wonder-full piece of poetry. And lovely too! Leon
Lamoureux Avatar
March 22, 2014 at 8:44 AM
I am not really that familiar with this form but I love the emotional effect you have created here.
Sirak Avatar
March 22, 2014 at 7:54 AM
Romance, longing and beauty. You are a wonder when your words start flowing.
Marcum Wong Avatar
March 21, 2014 at 11:50 PM
A very moving and beautiful piece Nette.
Sivey Avatar
March 21, 2014 at 9:50 PM
This write has such a heartfelt sadness within it my friend! I just love the symbolism in this gorgeous poem Nette! I really enjoyed reading this illustrious piece this evening! Great Work!!
O.J. Hunt Avatar
March 21, 2014 at 2:59 PM
Great read, enjoyed it!
Holley Avatar
March 21, 2014 at 2:45 PM
this is really heartfelt i can hear the sadness in it.x
Torres Avatar
March 21, 2014 at 2:22 PM
such a deep passion about women's thorns.. ..sad but beautiful piece,so unique!!!...hugs and kisses ^__^ ..Happy weekend!!! :o))
Smith Avatar
March 21, 2014 at 1:54 PM
True sadness you evoke here nette. I can feel you with every word. Wonderful write.....Tim
Manassian Avatar
March 21, 2014 at 1:39 PM
Sad....hauntingly sad, Nette....Symbolism that brings the pain to light.....
Mara Avatar
March 21, 2014 at 11:24 AM
What better way to pass by and read this melancholic poem.The contrast of grace and sadness is riveting,"Mounts in reply"; bravery amidst loss. Brava!
Paras Avatar
March 21, 2014 at 11:07 AM
You pinned it again, dear Nette! Pain may prick but it makes us somehow invincible. With respect and admiration!
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