Pied Pipers

When good seems to fade There's a price that's paid For mistakes we made The pied pipers play and leads us astray We follow them blind caught up in a bind To dead ends we find So who will arise To be bold and wise And choose truth, the prize Then battles begin To see who will win Or left in the bin No time to delay We must win today ------

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Maria Williams

Date: 2/26/2025 3:53:00 AM

Dear Joseph,your poem is a powerful and thought-provoking one! I love the rhythm and flow—there's a real sense of urgency that makes the message hit deep. The way you capture the struggle between truth and deception is brilliant, and that final call to action gives it so much strength. It really resonates...Hugs

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 2/23/2025 10:35:00 PM

The pied piper is a lovely nursery rhyme that we learn or our parents tell us from a child, and it so applies to us ad we grow up and become adults, to stand our ground and follow nothing or no one we think is a little 'fishy'. Good poem good lesson Joseph HUGS Jennifer

Brandy Nicole

Date: 2/22/2025 7:23:00 PM

' The pied pipers lead us astray. ' They most certainly will. If the blind lead the blind, there will be chaos. Great writing Joseph. My best to you. Hugs, Brandy

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 2/22/2025 12:42:00 PM

Truly and as we know the young are more vulnerable to the lies, without wisdom’s guidance.

David Crandall

Date: 2/19/2025 9:14:00 AM

Good one Joseph, gotta keep your eyes open.

Anisha Dutta

Date: 2/15/2025 5:23:00 AM

‘ll try your Contest following your instruction on rhyme scheme and syllables count. Have Good Days.

Jan Allison

Date: 2/14/2025 8:58:00 AM

what an excellent example Joseph, I will see if I can follow your example rise to the challenge! hugs jan xx

CayCay Jennings

Date: 2/10/2025 10:06:00 AM

Ah ha - I see what you are showing in delightful poem. The contest challenge is inviting and I'm glad it led me here to enjoy your lines. CayCay

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 2/10/2025 3:27:00 AM

You make me wonder how great your rhyme schemes are. A wonderful poem.

Valsa George

Date: 2/9/2025 7:40:00 PM

This is an interesting form of poetry... dear friend. Thanks for this great model for the contest. Let me just make an attempt.

Constance La France

Date: 2/9/2025 9:00:00 AM

Joseph, interesting form and a great example for your contest ~

Heidi Sands

Date: 2/9/2025 6:51:00 AM

Great rhyme Joseph :)

Akham Nilabirdhwaja Singh

Date: 2/9/2025 5:05:00 AM

Society facing acute problems due to moral decline.We need to struggle hard to bring back the moral values in our society.The poem written so nicely

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/8/2025 9:07:00 PM

Very nice. And what a creative rhyme scheme. Did you make it up yourself?

Joseph May
Date: 2/9/2025 4:54:00 AM

Yes Andrea, I did

Trina Layne

Date: 2/8/2025 7:20:00 PM

Not what I expected from the title. I thought it would be a retelling of the rats that plagued the village and the pipers who led them out. I appreciate this version. It takes your mind in other directions.

Joseph May
Date: 2/9/2025 5:01:00 AM

Thank you Trina

Michael Tor

Date: 2/8/2025 5:47:00 PM

Love this Rhyme Joseph and a great theme of common sense for all to realize. Thanks for posting...

Joseph May
Date: 2/9/2025 5:01:00 AM

Thank you Michael