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Pie in Kky------------------------------

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All pie-eyed, I leapt up in the sky to defy And to decry my flightless plight, that I deny. I made my wings of feathers, wax and strings, All strung together with rings, springs and other things. But aghast, I flew too high, too close to sun's hot blast, The wax dripped, alas I slipped and fell, like a pie downcast.

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Date: 11/7/2024 4:42:00 AM
Great piece. Love the sound and imagery. Also, the beginning "All pie-eyed" and end "like a pie downcast"--what a striking contrast. Glad I came across this today.
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John Anderson
Date: 11/7/2024 8:09:00 AM
Thanks very much fo your kind words. Cheers and Best Wishes
Date: 10/4/2024 11:00:00 AM
Icarus always thought, that's where we got the expression "I may not be able to do it, but I'll die trying". Ellegant, eloquent and inner rhymes are a real treat! A fave for me, my best, Robert
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Date: 10/4/2024 11:55:00 AM
Thanks for you feedback. Best Wishes for you
Date: 10/2/2024 9:14:00 AM
Thanks for all the comments. Cheers and Best Wishes
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Date: 10/2/2024 7:12:00 AM
Congratulations on your win with this Icarus take John. I quite enjoyed it! :)
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Date: 10/2/2024 6:42:00 AM
Congratulations, John, on your trophy win with this cautionary tale reminiscent of Icarus. It was a delight to read and your internal rhymes were done to perfection. I like the fact that you included rhyming ‘-eyed’ with ‘decry’, etc, as it is an example of augmented rhyme (something few poets are aware of – see my latest contest where I describe it). Regards, Suzette
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Date: 10/2/2024 6:35:00 AM
Ah! the ghostly words of Icarus, a model not to follow, when will mankind ever learn. Great internal rhyme, John/ congrats on a great piece and placement.
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