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Pic Motifs: Visual 2

Shrouded in darkness 
He walks steadily
Down the cobbled street
Ephemeral breath 
D r i f t i n g
Into the cold foggy air
His footsteps echoing...
A mysterious stranger 
Heading for a rendezvous 
With death.

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No of words: 30
A Pic Motifs Contest 
Sponsored by Nette Onclaud
Placed 4th
© 16th November 2017

Copyright © Paul Callus | Year Posted 2017

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December 3, 2017 at 3:40 PM

Such dramatic depths of chilling darkness to the feeling of your imagery Paul. I can picture the scenario happening in my mind, your imagery is so clear and intense.. it reminds of Jack the Ripper for some reason.. feels like London in the late 1800's. Excellent ominous write. Congratulations on your placement.. warmest wishes.. ~Susan p.s. please see my response to your response to 'Lothario' :)

December 4, 2017 at 4:20 PM

Jack the Ripper would fit this perfectly, Susan! I too had London in mind (but you always read my mind:) with fog/mist and cobbled streets. Thank you for finding the time to read my poems; your support is always appreciated. ~ I will now pop over to Lothario :) Warm regards ~ paul

November 23, 2017 at 11:16 PM

Ew .... so dark, I got chills. Really enjoyed the read, and I congratulate you on your placement in the contest. Hugs ... CayCay

November 24, 2017 at 11:59 AM

Thank you, CayCay...a pleasure to have you stopping by. Have a lovely weekend. Hugs // paul

November 23, 2017 at 10:49 AM

Your descriptions are always so vivid, this poem is so great in just 30 words and the last line is chilling.. Congratulations on your wonderful win!! :)

November 23, 2017 at 1:36 PM

Thank you, Sneha. Apart from being a good writer, you are also a budding critic!! Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

November 21, 2017 at 9:28 PM

A chilling ending to your entry Paul! That picture does remind me of the grim reaper. Congratulations on your win with this creative piece! : )

November 22, 2017 at 5:55 PM

I love your feedback Connie:) Thank you! This is the last comment for the night...it's 12.55am, and time for bed!! Goodnight // paul

Constance La France

November 21, 2017 at 4:52 PM

Paul, amazing write and congratulations on your win in the contest !

November 22, 2017 at 5:52 PM

Thank you, Constance; I'm so pleased that you like it. Regards // paul

November 21, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Paul, congratulations on your win Hugs Eve ~`*

November 21, 2017 at 4:38 PM

Thank you, Eve. Your top spot is very much deserved! Hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich

November 20, 2017 at 11:52 PM

BIG congrats, Paul. This was one of my favorites.

November 21, 2017 at 4:38 PM

Thank you, Andrea. I prefer yours to mine! Regards // paul

November 20, 2017 at 4:35 PM

A chilling write Paul..Congrats on your win

November 21, 2017 at 4:37 PM

Glad you like it, Joseph; thank you and regards. // paul

November 20, 2017 at 3:21 PM

wow, paul...fascinated by your word play---- tremendous build-up of a strory!...thank you and big congrats on your special win!

November 20, 2017 at 3:56 PM

So glad that you liked it, Nette. You had some really good entries, and judging could not have been easy. Regards & hugs // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

November 20, 2017 at 12:32 PM

- Congratulations on your win, Paul :)

November 20, 2017 at 3:52 PM

Thank you, Anne-Lise; you did very well yourself!:) Hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich

November 20, 2017 at 12:27 AM

What I meant below was that I wondered if we were to use between 25 and 30 specific words (not used twice)That seems to be the way that particular word counter is showing things.

November 20, 2017 at 3:54 PM

Yes, I noticed how the counter was reasoning, but I believe Nette was referring to overall count.

Eileen Manassian

November 19, 2017 at 7:25 AM

Good one, my dear. You always write with such finesse. Hugs

November 19, 2017 at 1:52 PM

Thank you, Eileen; your support is truly appreciated. Hugs // paul

November 19, 2017 at 6:52 AM

Nicely mysterious write, Paul... especially like the "ephemeral breath" part! Best of luck in the contest. Regards, John.

November 19, 2017 at 2:02 PM

Thank you, John. I had to cut and paste several times in order to shorten my original poem, but I can always add again to it after the contest. Regards // paul

November 18, 2017 at 9:48 PM

A great write Paul. Yeah I'm with Maria, this is a winner. I love it, and good luck all the way... hugs and smiles :)

November 19, 2017 at 2:04 PM

That's very kind of you, Akkina:) Thank you! Hugs & smiles to you too. // paul

November 18, 2017 at 5:54 AM

Mysterious, dark with a gothic edge to it. Amazing picture you paint here Paul, using only 30 words is a feat in itself. A winner in my eyes, but good luck anyway....Maria

November 20, 2017 at 12:10 AM

Thank you so much Paul. I think you have commented on all. Guess I will have to write some more poems then.lol. I really appreciate your comments and support Paul. Thank you...Maria

November 19, 2017 at 2:13 PM

Your comments are truly appreciated, Maria...so is the faith you have in this poem...thank you. I've been going over your poems again, but failed to find one on which I haven't as yet commented. If I've missed any pls let me know:) Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

November 18, 2017 at 12:14 AM

LOVE it, Paul. I feel like I may have misunderstood this contest. I could not get the word counter to count my words!! But I used 30 anyway! I think she is really going to love yours!!

November 19, 2017 at 2:20 PM

You don't really need a word counter, Andrea. It is more difficult trying not to exceed the 30 word limit. Thank you for reading and enjoying. Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

November 17, 2017 at 6:39 PM

Chilling and filled with suspense Paul! Very nicely done. A great entry for the contest! I like having a limited amount of words to work with. It is a great challenge. Best of luck in the contest. : )

November 19, 2017 at 2:39 PM

Thank you, Connie. Indeed it IS a challenge sticking to a word count; I had to play around trying to decrease, and was sorry to leave out some of what I'd written. Best regards // paul

November 17, 2017 at 6:55 AM

You did this really well, sad though that some could wish death on another.. Deep and dark write...

November 19, 2017 at 2:53 PM

Thank you, S-1. A visual such as this one does emit sinister assumptions. Regards // paul

November 16, 2017 at 8:42 PM

I like your take on the motif, if only those lurking in the dark faced such a fate! Great write!

November 19, 2017 at 3:13 PM

Thank you, Arthur; the visual pulled me into a dark mood! Regards // paul

November 16, 2017 at 1:46 PM

very vivid imagery Paul i don't need a picture to see this so vividly in my mind:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx

November 17, 2017 at 10:45 AM

Thank you, Jan:) I would have liked to post the image as well, but my premium membership has run out. Hugs // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

November 16, 2017 at 1:35 PM

- Very well done, Paul ! - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

November 16, 2017 at 4:34 PM

Glad you like it, Anne-Lise...thank you! Hugs // paul

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