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Shrouded in darkness He walks steadily Down the cobbled street Ephemeral breath D r i f t i n g Into the cold foggy air His footsteps echoing... A mysterious stranger Heading for a rendezvous With death. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - No of words: 30 A Pic Motifs Contest Sponsored by Nette Onclaud Placed 4th © 16th November 2017

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Susan Ashley

Date: 12/3/2017 3:40:00 PM

Such dramatic depths of chilling darkness to the feeling of your imagery Paul. I can picture the scenario happening in my mind, your imagery is so clear and intense.. it reminds of Jack the Ripper for some reason.. feels like London in the late 1800's. Excellent ominous write. Congratulations on your placement.. warmest wishes.. ~Susan p.s. please see my response to your response to 'Lothario' :)

Paul Callus
Date: 12/4/2017 4:20:00 PM

Jack the Ripper would fit this perfectly, Susan! I too had London in mind (but you always read my mind:) with fog/mist and cobbled streets. Thank you for finding the time to read my poems; your support is always appreciated. ~ I will now pop over to Lothario :) Warm regards ~ paul

Caycay Jennings

Date: 11/23/2017 11:16:00 PM

Ew .... so dark, I got chills. Really enjoyed the read, and I congratulate you on your placement in the contest. Hugs ... CayCay

Paul Callus
Date: 11/24/2017 11:59:00 AM

Thank you, CayCay...a pleasure to have you stopping by. Have a lovely weekend. Hugs // paul

Sneha Rv

Date: 11/23/2017 10:49:00 AM

Your descriptions are always so vivid, this poem is so great in just 30 words and the last line is chilling.. Congratulations on your wonderful win!! :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/23/2017 1:36:00 PM

Thank you, Sneha. Apart from being a good writer, you are also a budding critic!! Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 11/21/2017 9:28:00 PM

A chilling ending to your entry Paul! That picture does remind me of the grim reaper. Congratulations on your win with this creative piece! : )

Paul Callus
Date: 11/22/2017 5:55:00 PM

I love your feedback Connie:) Thank you! This is the last comment for the night...it's 12.55am, and time for bed!! Goodnight // paul

Constance La France

Date: 11/21/2017 4:52:00 PM

Paul, amazing write and congratulations on your win in the contest !

Paul Callus
Date: 11/22/2017 5:52:00 PM

Thank you, Constance; I'm so pleased that you like it. Regards // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 11/21/2017 12:00:00 AM

Paul, congratulations on your win Hugs Eve ~`*

Paul Callus
Date: 11/21/2017 4:38:00 PM

Thank you, Eve. Your top spot is very much deserved! Hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/20/2017 11:52:00 PM

BIG congrats, Paul. This was one of my favorites.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/21/2017 4:38:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea. I prefer yours to mine! Regards // paul

Joseph May

Date: 11/20/2017 4:35:00 PM

A chilling write Paul..Congrats on your win

Paul Callus
Date: 11/21/2017 4:37:00 PM

Glad you like it, Joseph; thank you and regards. // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/20/2017 3:21:00 PM

wow, paul...fascinated by your word play---- tremendous build-up of a strory!...thank you and big congrats on your special win!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/20/2017 3:56:00 PM

So glad that you liked it, Nette. You had some really good entries, and judging could not have been easy. Regards & hugs // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/20/2017 12:32:00 PM

- Congratulations on your win, Paul :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/20/2017 3:52:00 PM

Thank you, Anne-Lise; you did very well yourself!:) Hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/20/2017 12:27:00 AM

What I meant below was that I wondered if we were to use between 25 and 30 specific words (not used twice)That seems to be the way that particular word counter is showing things.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/20/2017 3:54:00 PM

Yes, I noticed how the counter was reasoning, but I believe Nette was referring to overall count.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 11/19/2017 7:25:00 AM

Good one, my dear. You always write with such finesse. Hugs

Paul Callus
Date: 11/19/2017 1:52:00 PM

Thank you, Eileen; your support is truly appreciated. Hugs // paul

John Michaels

Date: 11/19/2017 6:52:00 AM

Nicely mysterious write, Paul... especially like the "ephemeral breath" part! Best of luck in the contest. Regards, John.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/19/2017 2:02:00 PM

Thank you, John. I had to cut and paste several times in order to shorten my original poem, but I can always add again to it after the contest. Regards // paul

Akkina Downing

Date: 11/18/2017 9:48:00 PM

A great write Paul. Yeah I'm with Maria, this is a winner. I love it, and good luck all the way... hugs and smiles :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/19/2017 2:04:00 PM

That's very kind of you, Akkina:) Thank you! Hugs & smiles to you too. // paul

Maria Williams

Date: 11/18/2017 5:54:00 AM

Mysterious, dark with a gothic edge to it. Amazing picture you paint here Paul, using only 30 words is a feat in itself. A winner in my eyes, but good luck anyway....Maria

Maria Williams
Date: 11/20/2017 12:10:00 AM

Thank you so much Paul. I think you have commented on all. Guess I will have to write some more poems then.lol. I really appreciate your comments and support Paul. Thank you...Maria

Paul Callus
Date: 11/19/2017 2:13:00 PM

Your comments are truly appreciated, Maria...so is the faith you have in this poem...thank you. I've been going over your poems again, but failed to find one on which I haven't as yet commented. If I've missed any pls let me know:) Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/18/2017 12:14:00 AM

LOVE it, Paul. I feel like I may have misunderstood this contest. I could not get the word counter to count my words!! But I used 30 anyway! I think she is really going to love yours!!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/19/2017 2:20:00 PM

You don't really need a word counter, Andrea. It is more difficult trying not to exceed the 30 word limit. Thank you for reading and enjoying. Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 11/17/2017 6:39:00 PM

Chilling and filled with suspense Paul! Very nicely done. A great entry for the contest! I like having a limited amount of words to work with. It is a great challenge. Best of luck in the contest. : )

Paul Callus
Date: 11/19/2017 2:39:00 PM

Thank you, Connie. Indeed it IS a challenge sticking to a word count; I had to play around trying to decrease, and was sorry to leave out some of what I'd written. Best regards // paul

Silent One

Date: 11/17/2017 6:55:00 AM

You did this really well, sad though that some could wish death on another.. Deep and dark write...

Paul Callus
Date: 11/19/2017 2:53:00 PM

Thank you, S-1. A visual such as this one does emit sinister assumptions. Regards // paul

Arthur Vaso

Date: 11/16/2017 8:42:00 PM

I like your take on the motif, if only those lurking in the dark faced such a fate! Great write!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/19/2017 3:13:00 PM

Thank you, Arthur; the visual pulled me into a dark mood! Regards // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 11/16/2017 1:46:00 PM

very vivid imagery Paul i don't need a picture to see this so vividly in my mind:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 11/17/2017 10:45:00 AM

Thank you, Jan:) I would have liked to post the image as well, but my premium membership has run out. Hugs // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/16/2017 1:35:00 PM

- Very well done, Paul ! - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/16/2017 4:34:00 PM

Glad you like it, Anne-Lise...thank you! Hugs // paul