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Piano and Me

They were one One continuous thing Hands outstretched Like spider webs Moving joyously Quick and nimble Pressing black and white Tickling my eardrums Tapping my feet Feet on pedals Echoing You taught me how Little legs dangling Music notes Resembled splattered paint Now that I’m solo I still feel you In the music In the tones But mostly in the echo

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M.I.A .

Date: 12/30/2011 8:47:00 PM

The love you feel for the instrument and music is tinkling like stars here but most of all, it is the memory that strikes the hardest notes and moved my heart! beautiful piece Liberty.

Liberty Robbins
Date: 1/1/2012 3:19:00 PM

Thank you my darling one!

Michael Ellis

Date: 12/29/2011 11:12:00 PM

Well done liberty. What makes this poem successful is its non stop flow. The rhythm is never broken. Repetition of the word 'one' in line one and line two was a clever device. Line four opens with a simile. In line 8 and 9 use use alliteration. You extend the 'T' sound as far as 12. Little, legs more alliteration. The greatest gem in this poem is the slant rhyme of echo and solo. Its like a perfect landing at a gymnastic even. You write beautifully, Robin. I look forward to reading more of your work. Continue into the New Year. Michael

Liberty Robbins
Date: 12/29/2011 11:16:00 PM

You've blown me away with your kindness and attention to detail. Your compliment means a lot to me. Thank you so very much!