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Phoenix Sixain from Woman Clothed with the Sun

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Using Suzette Richards' new form - Phoenix Sixain. Resurrect 5 consecutive lines from an older write. Use a word from each line for the 6th line (with allowance for slight grammatical adjustment for final line so it reads well)

may I rest my head on your shoulder my friend pass light person to person compelled to run and run until I looked back I'm mid flight as you catch me stock still and mesmerised at existence may light compel me still

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Ink Empress

Date: 1/10/2025 4:32:00 AM

Ah I love how your last line, it flows so well! Brilliant! You are really good at this form and how your lines flow is excellent. Are we supppsed to choose lines from just one poem ? This one truly is so heartfelt! I love the line “ pass light person to person” evocative and soulful take! Best wishes!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/10/2025 4:56:00 AM

Thank you. Yes, it's consecutive lines from an older poem. You can reorder the words for the 6th line but that also is preferred as the order they appear. I actually entered not one of these three haha I think I'll change my entry at some point. My titles need to be 5 words only if I do though. Glad you like these so much, I enjoyed doing them for sure :)

Paul Willason

Date: 1/10/2025 4:02:00 AM

Engaging poetry DD...quite magical in its unfolding. Quite an interesting form..very much like.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/10/2025 4:15:00 AM

It's certainly better than playing wordle for a few minutes of puzzling :) really enjoyed the form's concept. It's really got a lot going for it :)

Chetta Achara

Date: 1/9/2025 12:19:00 PM

Beautiful poem, beautifully written.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/9/2025 1:51:00 PM

Thank you, I could get quite carried away with this form. It's a bit like a puzzle - fun! I appreciate your comment