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Phoenix Sixain from I Lock My Door Upon Myself

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Using Suzette Richards' new form - Phoenix Sixain. Resurrect 5 consecutive lines from an older write. Use a word from each line for the 6th line (with allowance for slight grammatical adjustment for final line so it reads well)

fine chains catch my gaze add it to their lustre I bathed in echoes until nothing cried out stories seem finished when pages are full but let tumble empty words to unseen floors catch their echoes, stories unseen

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Ink Empress

Date: 1/10/2025 4:34:00 AM

Youv nailed this form for sure. The last line you did it so well in this too! Brilliant! I love also “ stories seem finished when pages are full” thats so deep and should really print that and frame that as a quote! A very philosophical line that is! Pleasure reading this too! Which one did you post for the contest? This too is perfect! Pleasure reading another one

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/10/2025 4:58:00 AM

Haha you are spoiling me today :) I quite liked that line too - it sort of makes sense of things :) imagine if I had framed images of my own poems around the house though haha, maybe I should do mugs with my best lines on :) if I do and make my millions then I'll send you a cut lol

Paul Willason

Date: 1/10/2025 4:07:00 AM

Quite surreal and found I was drawn into the poem. My mind absorbed with possible explanations to this sequence...a good thing.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/10/2025 4:13:00 AM

It's taken from a longer poem I wrote and I thoroughly enjoyed leafing through (virtually) my poems and selecting sections which could be lifted for this form. It invigorated the word choices in such a different way than the original and the formed last line becomes like a hidden message or cry from the poem. I really enjoyed it, also a bit like playing with a puzzle. Thanks for stopping by :)