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A Rictameter is a type of poem where the first and the last lines keep repeating. The first and the final lines also have to start with a two-syllable word. The syllabic count, therefore, has to be 2R.4.6.8.10.8.6.4.2R. This means that you have to start the first line with two syllables, increase the number of syllables in the next line by two until you reach the fifth line, which will have ten syllables. After that, you have to start decreasing the number of syllables in each line by two, until you get the two syllables you initially started with. This format will help to ensure that the final line has the two-syllable words that were there in the first line of the poem.

A rictameter is a nine line poetry form. The 1st and last lines are the same with the syllable count as follows: • line 1 - 2 syllables - same as line 9 • line 2 - 4 syllables • line 3 - 6 syllables • line 4 - 8 syllables • line 5 - 10 syllables • line 6 - 8 syllables • line 7 - 6 syllables • line 8 - 4 syllables • line 9 - 2 syllables - same as line 1

 

music reminds my soul of peony and rose efflorescence petrichor scents. Roaming among fountains of her blossoms, lost in bucolic elegance. Whispering sweet sighs like verses for music ash smoke brought drops of doom. Was it a mere mirage or a brief dance with dalliance, but this ephemeral epiphany, just like nature's seasonal moods, left lyrics on my lips, until storms blew ash smoke

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Date: 1/14/2024 2:48:00 AM
You keep weaving wondrous writes dear Silent One..What a marvelous Rictameter this is, with such beautiful flow and stunning phraseology..I love how you've played with the musical essence in the first one, describing the magic of those moments where you've carved "music reminds my soul of peony and rose efflorescence petrichor scents"And then the second one unfurls a thought where those seconds feel like a mirage and leave a sense of questioning..But, still it gives a heartfelt essence, just wow
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Date: 1/13/2024 5:37:00 PM
Your words match the form well, my friend. I enjoyed your use of alliteration in each verse and the imagery was delightful. Music does move my soul to a deeper emotional place. Thanks for sharing your poetry with us, Silent One. I've missed reading your poems this month. Write On! A poet friend in Texas, Bill
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Date: 1/13/2024 3:49:00 PM
Very interesting form to work with. You worked it well. I like to think the ash and smoke were a foul mood that stains the lips into cursing. But even so, music can phoenix the spirits up again, even through directional winds that criss cross in a play on the emotions.
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Date: 1/13/2024 2:41:00 PM
Silent, a truly beautiful poem, I loved each line, blessings, Constance
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Date: 1/13/2024 12:29:00 PM
I like how you are explaining and executing poems in perfect form. It's inspirational. Your reaction to both the good and what I suppose is bad is also very calm and reasoned. Smart you are!
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Date: 1/13/2024 12:00:00 PM
Beautifully lovely romance! Have a great lovely day ~AA.
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Date: 1/13/2024 8:52:00 AM
Oh interesting and intriguing, why peonies may i ask? Ah i sense a bit of romanticism and how one questions if it was a mere mirage what they experienced or felt. A very deep metaphorical rictameter i think this is. Music has a way of reminding us so much and music to our ears can be someones sweet voice too, the second rictameter with “ ephemeral epiphany stood out for me! And how sometimes some storms like outbursts too can be like seasonal moods rinsing away the lyrics on ones lips leaving
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Date: 1/13/2024 8:52:00 AM
Just ash! How creative and deep is this! Pleasure reading this! A fave again for me!
Date: 1/13/2024 8:40:00 AM
Contrast rendered skillfully, in vivid description, S.O.! Janice
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Date: 1/13/2024 8:35:00 AM
The ephemeral nature of beauty and the fleeting moments of joy and inspiration that can be found in music and nature bring solace and inspiration in music and the natural world. The language of your poem is rich and evocative, with vivid imagery and sensory details. Your use of words like "peony," "rose," "efflorescence," and "petrichor" create a lush and vibrant atmosphere. The use of alliteration in phrases like "bucolic elegance" and "ephemeral epiphany" adds music to your poem.
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Date: 1/13/2024 6:01:00 AM
WOW! another masterpiece, Silent One. Your poetic brilliance is inspiring. I loved so much about this poem--the allteration, the imagery and the soft, soulful message about how soul stirring music can be. I've long believed it's a universal language that the soul understands and perhaps needs? Am faving this one...have a creative day, Sara
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