Notes About The Poem

Sadly, my poem is no fairy tale. It reflects a horrible situation of society in which women are isolated from friends and family. Some are even locked inside their houses with no phone, money or means of escape. I watch a lot of true crime dramas, and this happens more than people know, usually at the hands of narcissistic men who may even be psychopaths. Some women who managed to escape have gotten killed or had their children killed out of spite for their getting away. (A small percentage of women are doing these kinds of things to their very own children)

For Miranda Hawley's The Rest Of The Story Poetry Contest

A POTD 2/27/24   I need to start remembering my POTD's. In all these years I have not even kept track of them!

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Peter Peter Pumpkin Eater - the rest of the story

(Alternative Ending for Peter Peter Pumpkin Eater)

Peter Peter Pumpkin Eater.
Do you think he kept his wife so well
by putting her inside a pumpkin shell?
Inside that shell she had no room
to move around. A rotten groom
was Peter Peter Pumpkin Eater.

In the end, his wife could not be found
by friends or family. He’d thrown away the key,
and his wife was not allowed
to leave that stinking pumpkin shell.
Rumor is from loneliness she died.
Peter cruelly put all empathy aside.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Fowler Avatar
March 25, 2024 at 12:15 PM
Back with congrats on your win here Andrea. Congratulations! :)
Jones Avatar
March 21, 2024 at 3:32 PM
Back a third time to congratulate you on your win!
Miller Avatar
March 21, 2024 at 2:45 AM
Excellent poem great contest entry, congratulations.
Goldsmith Avatar
March 20, 2024 at 8:54 AM
Back with Congratulations on yet another wonderful win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful yet sad write again. Have a blessed day...............
Kerr Avatar
March 19, 2024 at 11:47 PM
Andrea Excellent work on inhumanity. Congratulations on your podium placement Howard
Hawley Avatar
March 19, 2024 at 7:21 PM
Your sad story is right and a tale of domestic abuse or narcissistic abuse or both. So the rest of the story is Peter got arrested, but that is not exactly always realistic. Sigh! Great job on this sad story and congrats on POTD, even though looks like it was a short time ago. Congrats on your win in my contest.
Dietrich Avatar
March 19, 2024 at 9:21 PM
In my story, he got off. Sadly most of them do. Thanks for a win, Miranda.
George Avatar
February 29, 2024 at 11:37 PM
There are some such wives in eternal confinement because of the cruelty of their husbands. Enjoyed your version of the Peter Peter Pumpkin Eater and it brought a smile to me, though sad. Congratulations Andrea on your POTD
Mcintosh Avatar
February 28, 2024 at 12:18 PM
So sad and truth... God bless you always and Congrats on POTD. love, Gina
Rodrigues Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 7:42 PM
He was rotten to the pumpkin core! You went dark here. Congratulations on POTD, sweet poet!
Nicole Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 7:03 PM
' Peter put her inside a pumpkin shell, ' and there he kept her very well. That's strange on many levels. Two interpretations of this nursery rhyme, and I find both disturbing. So sad this is happening for real. Wrong, indeed ! Congratulations Andrea, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. Hugs, Brandy
Poet Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 4:50 PM
Andrea, your expression of creativity and brilliance through poetry is truly commendable. Your words serve as a remarkable means to shed light on important issues and advocate for change. Your work has the potential to enlighten numerous families, urging them to deeply contemplate the underlying reasons behind their loved ones' emotional detachment or unavailability. Congratulations on your well-deserved POTD.
Flood Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 2:08 PM
I must have had a deprived childhood. I’ve never heard of this particular Peter. Enjoyed your new ending though. I’ll have to track down the original now… hope it lives up to expectations ;-) Congrats on POTD, Andrea.
Flood Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 3:43 PM
I shall consider myself better educated ;-). Thanks, Andrea
Dietrich Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 3:24 PM
It''s very short and is the only thing I can play on the piano: Peter Peter Pumpkin eater, had a wife and couldn't keep her/ Put her in a pumpkin shell and there he kept her very well. (I think a chauvenist pig must have come up with it)
Slaughter Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 10:51 AM
Or maybe...since he was a "pumpkin eater", he forgot that she was inside that one, and...? Hey...it could happen! Love your take on this old chestnut, Andrea, and congrats on POTD,
Sidwell Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 10:40 AM
Such a fitting alternative ending for what I had always found a disturbing nursery rhyme. Congratulations on POTD for an excellent and fun read!
Baker Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 9:08 AM
Back to congratulate you on your POTD honor, Andrea! WTG! Enjoy your special day of recognition, my friend. Bill
Roper Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 8:25 AM
Congratulations on POTD. Cute story
Buhagiar Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 7:50 AM
Congrats on POTD, Andrea. Hugs.
Elliott Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 7:49 AM
Congratulations on POTD, Andrea. You have such a superb writer's imagination. Bravissimo! My very best wishes for the contest! xoxx
Cunningham Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 7:33 AM
He sounds a nasty piece of work, love your alternative ending Andrea. Congratulations to you on the honour of POTD. Tom
Romios Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 7:26 AM
Yaaaa! Congratylations, you talebted piet, you. I am so happy for you, Andrea …you, great poetess, Fun, and a delughtful reas..love it, a Fav Pangie
Pandit Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 6:47 AM
BIG congrats on POTD, Andrea. A fun read--though you have tackled a serious theme.
Goldsmith Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 6:28 AM
Congratulations on your POTD win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful yet sad write again. Have a blessed day with your wonderful win...................
May Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 6:15 AM
She wasn't well in a pumpkin shell, Congrats on POTD Andrea
Fowler Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 5:45 AM
What fun Andrea! A more realistic ending for Peter's poor wife. Congratulations on POTD! :).
Rodgers Avatar
February 27, 2024 at 4:49 AM
Dearest Andrea, Look at you! Congratulations on your poem being selected as Poem of the Day! Your alternative ending offers a haunting perspective on a classic tale, delving into themes of confinement and cruelty. Your words are very provoking and reflect long after reading. Keep shining your unique voice through your poetry. - Blessings, Daniel
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