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from the forest, deep, she came like a jaguar, quietly prowling drawn there by my late-day flame typhoon in the distance howling black hair with a coal-blue sheen eyes like ink and faultless gold linen sun dress, white and clean tawdry tan, with charms, untold white-cap sea foam licked the sun then softly tasted sweet, its bright slo-melting on that briny tongue and sav'ring still, the fading light there beside the aqua ocean palm fronds laid in proper form with sublime and torrid motion we let loose our perfect storm high above, the Perseids streaming wept the sky, with tears of fire wishes granted - we, so dreaming meant for fools to thus inspire flightless angel birthed in darkness wrapped me in her pinions, warm sacred embers, cold and sparkless burning for that summer storm ... lost in her - my perfect storm. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Standard Contest Number 340" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Sponsor. ~ 6th Place ~ in the "A Perfect Storm" Poetry Contest, Craig Cornish, Sponsor.

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Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 10/16/2017 6:32:00 PM

Oh..You did well in both contests,I am proud of you.I like this poem you wrote. have a nice evening my friend.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/16/2017 7:42:00 PM

Thank you so much for the sweet comment, Darlene - I really appreciate it, my friend! :-) <3

John Hamilton

Date: 10/6/2017 9:57:00 PM

You had some stiff competition in the last contest, and Craig is a tough judge, but you still pulled it off...congrats one more time!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/6/2017 10:47:00 PM

Yeah, I didn't expect I'd get two wins in-a-row with him, and to be on ANY list with these amazing fellow writers is such a blessing, so I am completely honored and humbled by this placement! Glad you liked this one, John - thank you so much, Brother!

Constance La France

Date: 10/6/2017 6:50:00 PM

Greg, congratulation your win again, in Craig's contest with this awesome write !

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/6/2017 7:34:00 PM

Very kind of you, BW - thank you so very much!

John Hamilton

Date: 10/2/2017 5:05:00 PM

YUP what I said!!!Congrats Greg you are definitely in the zone!!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/2/2017 9:50:00 PM

Thank you, Brother, I greatly appreciate that!

Constance La France

Date: 10/2/2017 9:45:00 AM

Greg, a beautiful write and congratulations!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/2/2017 9:49:00 PM

That's very kind of you, BW, thank you very much, my friend! :-)

Frances Schiavina

Date: 10/2/2017 8:49:00 AM

It leaves me breathless! Congratulations!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/2/2017 9:49:00 PM

Thank you so much, Frances - I greatly appreciate that!

Gary Smith

Date: 10/2/2017 1:14:00 AM

A beautiful poem Greg, congrats :)

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/2/2017 5:11:00 AM

Thank you so much, Gary!

Janice Canerdy

Date: 10/1/2017 11:09:00 PM

Back to congratulate you, Greg! Janice

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/2/2017 4:49:00 AM

Thank you very much, Janice, I greatly appreciated - and the same to you, my friend!!

Janice Canerdy

Date: 10/1/2017 3:10:00 PM

Appealing, moving description of the power of passion, Greg! Janice

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/1/2017 8:40:00 PM

Blessings to you for your kindness, Janice - thank you so much! :-)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/1/2017 12:32:00 PM

Greg, your personification of the sea in your third stanza left me in awe! I loved every line from the beginning to end this was exciting, uniquely creative, and a poet's poem! If this doesn't top the list then the judge knows nothing about poetry. A Fave! : )

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/1/2017 8:40:00 PM

Oh, Connie, you made my day with this comment - I so adore your work, and this means a great deal. Another tough day today, and this brought a smile and saved the day! I'm so pleased you enjoyed this one, my friend! :-) <3

Darren White

Date: 9/30/2017 3:31:00 AM

Wowsers indeed, what John said. Oh man, you know how I love your poems, all of them. Especially when you go sensual and dark and ballet. Good luck in the contest my friend :)

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/30/2017 10:31:00 PM

Thank you so much, Darren, you know your opinion is one that I value as highly as ANY, and I appreciate SO much every time to take a moment for me. I have not given up on FB chats, however, as the pen-pal thing just isn't meaty enough, so PLEASE message me if the green light is on ... I sometimes am pulled away or fall asleep while signed on, but I'm usually soon-to-return if I don't reply. Glad you liked this one - I kinda thought you might! ;-) <3

John Hamilton

Date: 9/29/2017 10:18:00 PM

Wowsers Greg, who would have thought of a romantic perfect storm? Oh yeah you! Great as always looks like another winner, maybe you'll climb to top ten contest poet with this one!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/29/2017 11:29:00 PM

I have a rather strange imagination sometimes, John, and it doesn't always work to my favor, lol. Thanks for your kind and encouraging words, my friend, you are a treasure in my life, and I so appreciate the friendship you have shown me from day one! Blessings, Bro! :-)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/29/2017 9:37:00 PM

OMG, this is SO good. I too was imagining those words in a romantic context but I will not be able to pull it off nearly as well as you did here because all that is coming to me is something corny right now. LOVE it!!!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/29/2017 11:26:00 PM

Oh, I imagine you'll come up with something quite wonderful, my friend, I have no doubt! Every time I click on one of your incredible writes, I am rewarded with an exquisite treat, and usually a smile - it's SO cool to know such amazing writers such as you, Andrea, that never fail to enrich my day and my spirit ... I am so blessed to be among you all! Thank you for your kind words! <3

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/29/2017 3:28:00 PM

marvelous portrayal of a fiery storm and the use of personification adds more impact to this descriptive write... i like the line with' pinion' on it, greg... huggs

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/29/2017 6:46:00 PM

Thank you so very much, Nette - that's very kind of you! So pleased you enjoyed this one, my friend - blessings and hugs! :-)

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 9/29/2017 8:09:00 AM

Wonderful steamy perfect storm my friend, not hard to please me penning Perseids in :) my best to you for the contest! Must say "weeping sky with tears of fire", you slay me gently with your pen.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/29/2017 6:44:00 PM

You are too sweet to me, Maureen - I'm going to have to send you flowers and chocolates one of these days, lol! Thank you SO much - I am proud of this one as it's a bit unusual, (I love things and people that are "unique"), and I had fun with the meteors and the sun dissolving like a lozenge on the "tongue" of the sea. We MUST hang on tightly to our child's imaginations, don't you think? I believe that is key to writing good poetry ... and being VERY immature, I come by it naturally!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/29/2017 6:44:00 PM

Thanks again, Dear friend - we must chat on FB sometime! (Though, as Darren will attest, I'm hard to catch there, lol). :-) <3