Peeling the Dark

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strewn on the laboring dark much too quenched
by the very ink of a smothering  wind, her layered cry 
out-thumps a mortal bid of wretched reels defining
some plea of farewell, “ go and leave me to dwindle 
in the dust; save yourself if you must!”… her vanishing
beads of rosary melt on the salt of a  thunder groan
withering among phantoms of shapeless, unknown sands
now so ravaged by the stark black of a night disheveled
by hairs of fear and rotting despair. it is said that a flicker
of moon throbbing inside her reached out , extracting this
sliver of light to glimmer  among her inner veins,

that for some blessed hint of phoenix rising
she clasps that golden orb whirling on a  dot 
of flame, as if to whisper,” claim me in your hands 
and release this golden ray.. let it touch his head,
across the blind drifts of vapors cast by
Laverna's spell. be the one.. be one to bridge the light.”
as blankness looms between curtains of time tipsy,
her knees figure in a sway limping yet running in a daze
beyond a dimensionless pace opening a gateway that zooms
glittering spins unto his cinder-ash head… and his power
flashes a might of bolt piercing the blank gloom of doom,

an exuberant eternal dawn burns where life forms arise.

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*Laverna--- Roman Goddess of the Underworld

(( for Matt Caliri’s “ Finish the Dream “ Contest ))
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Beck Avatar
February 25, 2011 at 11:26 AM
its just not fair ! ! ....the only reason you win is because you are more talented in every way than me.........I've tried money and threats and flattery ..... but they dont work...........( I will try pity now...)...will you PLEASE allow me to win sometimes Nette? ...affectionately........Syd
Brown Avatar
February 25, 2011 at 7:34 AM
Congratulations on your win Nette in Matt's contest. Love, Carol
Sweetheart Avatar
February 24, 2011 at 6:52 AM
Congrats Nette my friend on your big win in Finish the Dream contest.. super cool luv.. just posted my new blog ..hope u will check it out luv.. explains a lot..
Pettit Avatar
February 23, 2011 at 10:13 PM
Great writing. Congratulations on winning in Matt's contest with this entry.
Mannan Avatar
February 23, 2011 at 7:52 PM
Beautiful use of imagery and mythology.many congratulations for this win.
La France Avatar
February 23, 2011 at 6:04 PM
Congratulations on your win~~
Freeman Avatar
February 23, 2011 at 4:55 PM
A great job Nette on your worthy poem's near the top honor. Congratulations on your fifth place .Agape, Moses
George   Avatar
February 23, 2011 at 4:03 PM
Mesmerizing! Nette. Many congrat's on your BIG WIN. Lainie
Guzzi Avatar
February 23, 2011 at 1:09 PM
You go gal...a "charged" write electric, a stand alone verse. Congrad's Light & Love
Mehta Avatar
February 23, 2011 at 12:01 PM
Congratulations onn the fifth place win in the contest of John, nette
Haick Avatar
February 23, 2011 at 10:14 AM
Awesome, Nette. Congratulations on your deserving win the Matt's contest! Love, Annalise
Johnson Avatar
February 23, 2011 at 9:57 AM
Great writing Nette. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
Dietrich Avatar
February 12, 2011 at 11:21 AM
OOps, I just posted something mistaking names, so let me start again! LIke Kash says here, this is amazing imagination, as always, Nette. I know that Matt is going to eat it up!! Luv, Andrea
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February 11, 2011 at 10:32 AM
Amazing your imagination nette.Wonderful write!-kashinath
Sweetheart Avatar
February 11, 2011 at 6:11 AM
Spectacular write Nette my friend and a powerful finish the dream sequence luv.. Matt is particular but this one WILL catch his eye my friend... enjoyed with luv.. that ink of smothering wind... awesome ..
Kendrick Avatar
February 10, 2011 at 3:28 PM
Good luck in the contest with this creative work..Thanks for your kind review of my work..Sara
La France Avatar
February 10, 2011 at 1:47 PM
just wonderful. full of vivid imagination, I love it, best of luck in the contest~~
Devonshire Avatar
February 10, 2011 at 11:21 AM
Always such amazing imagery from your poetry, Nette! This is a superb write for the contest and I hope to see it in the winners' circle. You certainly found inspiration in this contest. Love, Carolyn
Beck Avatar
February 10, 2011 at 10:08 AM
"curtains of time tipsy" "gloom of doom"( a resemblance with Shakespeare ) I like it all but especially these phrases, which will soon appear ( unacknowledged) in my doggerel LOL....you're a fascinating poet, Nette....best wishes for the contest..... Syd
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