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Still haven't got my computer up and going. I will get it done at some point. The senryu is about my baking a peach pop-up pie recently. I was using some Splenda instead of sugar because we are both diabetic. There was this black spot in the mesuring cup of splenda and I was thinking what is that..dead ant. I then was wondering did he/she die of too much sugar, chemical poisoning, or suffocation and how in the world did the ant get in that sealed up plastic bag where there were no holes.

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peach pop-up pie splenda measured out ~what's that.... dead ant?

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Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/13/2025 4:31:00 AM

- Ugh... I live so close to the forest... every spring, ants both inside and outside... ant spray is my weapon :) - The pie looks good, Sara :) - hugs

Len Gasun

Date: 5/11/2025 8:39:00 PM

A sweet and delicious poem my dear poet friend Sara. I always love peach pie especially with coconut. I enjoyed your poem and i like the last line. Too sweet isn't good. A brilliant senryu my dear. Thanks a lot for the share! More blessings always. Hugs

Ink Empress

Date: 5/10/2025 9:32:00 AM

Oh no what a sad ending! Not fun when that happens! Oh so sorry about your computer! Hope it gets fixed really soon! Sending you light

Valsa George

Date: 5/10/2025 4:58:00 AM

Hi Sara, this is funny and realistic. At times such things happen. At times I too wonder, how ants get into a tightly packed box of confectionery!

Zyrool Gifford

Date: 5/9/2025 1:37:00 PM

Hello Sara, this is a lovely write. Loved it. The picture looks scrumptious ant and all. Wishing you a wonderful weekend, my friend.