Pale Shelter

i look out my eyes,
windshield wipers —
crying all the time,
inside.

the shy gives me the creepers,
living all the time;
buried treasure,
the shovel of survival, hides.

the teacher writes one word,
at a time,
on the enormous blackboard,
looming in my mind.

pretty...pretty...pretty

the violence in my history
destroying the self
not a believer
in books that “help”

disconnected, illusions looming

salesman tries to gimmee
some direction

it’s a one way road

out

my cheeks are red,
my eyes are blue
darkness finds me with you

the wipers fast, never stop
   skidding shoes
      wheels turning
          spinning, burning


12/2/2019

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 12/7/2019 5:41:00 PM
Congrats on your winning poem Kim
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/7/2019 5:52:00 PM
Thank you, Hreg!
Date: 12/7/2019 2:16:00 PM
What a beautiful free verse! Lonna
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/7/2019 3:16:00 PM
Thank you, Lonna!
Date: 12/7/2019 1:47:00 PM
This is what free verse is supposed to be, a little erratic and frantic, this was a stirring write Kim, congrats on a fine win!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/7/2019 3:16:00 PM
Thanks so much, John!
Date: 12/5/2019 4:44:00 AM
"the violence in my history destroying the self not a believer in books that “help” - I am so with you on this one!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/7/2019 3:15:00 PM
Thanks
Date: 12/3/2019 3:43:00 PM
This poem has a great turn and a great ending.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/3/2019 8:49:00 PM
Thanks for noticing!
Date: 12/3/2019 3:29:00 PM
I can see where the "Pale Shelter" prompt has taken you, Kim. A very out creative 'of the box' rendition. Warm regards // paul
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/3/2019 8:49:00 PM
Thanks so much!
Date: 12/3/2019 8:06:00 AM
I loved this Kim. Such an abstract look at things and so creative. Always I find something amazing when you write. Best wishes in the contest.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/3/2019 8:50:00 PM
Hugs...I appreciate it so much!
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