Overwhelming

Daylight fell into twilight, 
   twilight fell into the night
to leave me on a painfilled cobbled road
where I stumbled into the murky dark
   confused, disoriented
feeling the gushing waves of upheaval
throbbing in my chest
where my heart was once full 
and is now an empty vessel
   submerged by pain
suffocating in a cavernous sea of sadness

I begin to wander in circles
as the road grows smaller
and the stars drip from the sky
one after another like mournful raindrops
that splatter at my feet
leaving a pool where nothing lives

I'm alone, cold in a desolate space
where all that was drifts by
my lungs fill with the black smoke of yesterday's ashes
I try to hold back the rising tsunami
that is welling in my eyes
where the only sound I hear
   is my heart crying

3/24/23
contest Writing Challenge "O" words
sponsor Constance La France
Overwhelming
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023


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Date: 3/27/2023 10:27:00 AM
- Oh, this was touching Frederick ... especially the last verse - Congratulations on your win in the contest :) - hugs
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Date: 3/26/2023 8:50:00 PM
Congratulations Frederic, Nice job:)
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Date: 3/26/2023 1:04:00 PM
Filled with overwhelming grief and loneness. Terrific! Congratulations on your win Frederic!:)
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Date: 3/26/2023 12:33:00 PM
Frederic, congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge 'O' Words with your amazing poem, I love the music, blessings, Constance
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Date: 3/25/2023 12:06:00 PM
So tragic and yearning, I really like the lines 'the stars drip from the sky' and 'where all that was drifts by' - best wishes for the contest~
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Date: 3/24/2023 6:58:00 PM
Another well written poem, Frederic. Good luck!
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