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Outside Her Door

Outside a door I stand. Above my head on a second story landing lives my soul-mate. Plain, normal, not of royalty. One of sincerity, creativity, above all else, loyalty. Outside I wait with mere fascination, a strong attraction. I only know her name, bits and pieces of her life. I know that she is single yet to be somebodies wife. I know she is a poet, enjoys writing, maybe as much as I. A sports fan "Go Broncos!!!" She's the apple of my eye. Jared Pickett 9/25/09 Asavvy1

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Date: 10/8/2009 2:25:00 PM
Pick her up man, and don't let go! LOL
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Date: 9/29/2009 6:29:00 AM
You are a man who recognizes the things that are really important in life, Jared. "Sincerity, creativity...loyalty" are all wonderful traits to be found in those we admire. And if she loves football, she and I are kindred spirits! Go Giants, Bucs, Colts, Dolphins, Seminoles...my list goes on and on. I love the way you admire from afar, knowing she is betrothed and respecting her. Excellent poem! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 9/27/2009 8:23:00 AM
Beautiful with love. Did you tell her? Keep writing. Always DAS-J
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Date: 9/26/2009 3:14:00 PM
Oh, I can see this brief episode in your life ... A very Descriptive and Romantic Narrative... Heartfelt... Hope You Get The Girl... (smile) Beautiful Thoughts from Your Poet's Heart Good One... MoonBee
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Date: 9/26/2009 8:12:00 AM
A love poem Jared with difference.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments today
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Date: 9/25/2009 11:44:00 PM
nice tribute to the apple of your eye,i loved the way you describe her,single yet to be somebodies wife,so we can say she s between single and committed,you made me smile :),your writes a pleasure--Charma
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Date: 9/25/2009 11:44:00 PM
nice tribute to the apple of your eye,i loved the way you describe her,single yet to be somebodies wife,so we can say she s between single and committed,you made me smile :),your writes a pleasure--Charma
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Date: 9/25/2009 4:15:00 PM
I love the rhyming Jared,Good job, Sincerely Moses
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Date: 9/25/2009 1:15:00 PM
I really like the last line. My father used to say that about my mother they were married 76 years nearly made the 77 one. Keep writing. Sara
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Date: 9/25/2009 12:13:00 PM
Nice and subtle, I like this one, you convey a great yearning...Raul
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