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So ... I'm in this revolving door 'tother day, (for real), Round-and-round-and-round ... people enter, exit, but I keep on ... A little boy starts to enter with his mom, pulls back, lets her hand go - Mom goes through to the other side, then waves him come, But he's transfixed on me ... round-and-round-and-round. Each time I pass his smile grows broader, (forehead more furrowed) ... Finally, hoping to encourage him, I say, zipping by ... "It's fun!" And on the next revolution, "I just REALLY needed some fun!" Sure enough, it does the trick ... he goes through. His mom gives a curt smile and grabs his hand to leave ... As she drags him off I hear him asking, "But why's the man crying, Momma?" You see, revolving doors were his favorite thing ... My dear Uncle Lem's favorite thing ... long, long ago. He would put me on his shoulders, and we'd go round-and-round-and-round. I'd been going through the basement earlier that day - cleaning out, And I happened upon the precious flag from his coffin, The U.S. Navy service flag that I'd been given ... now, my soul ached, And I just REALLY needed some fun. Kids notice everything, you see ... Even a tear on the cheek of a heartsick ol' fool ... spinning memories. ~ 5th Place ~ in the "The Old Jalopy" Poetry Contest, Craig Cornish, Judge & Sponsor.

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Date: 7/30/2019 1:26:00 PM
Your consistency makes your already wonderful craft majestic. Yet another lovely piece. This is really great..
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/30/2019 6:38:00 PM
Blessings to you, Funom, it's great to see you "around" again ... I'm so pleased you like this one, my friend - thank you! :o)
Date: 7/30/2019 1:26:00 PM
Your consistency makes your already wonderful craft majestic. Yet another lovely piece. This is really great..
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/30/2019 6:37:00 PM
Blessings to you, Funom, it's great to see you "around" again ... I'm so pleased you like this one, my friend - thank you! :o)
Date: 7/28/2019 6:59:00 AM
Great take on the contest Greg. Congratulations on your placement in Craig's contest. Blessings dear friend.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/28/2019 5:09:00 PM
Many kind thanks to you, Charlie, I'm really pleased that you found this one worthy ... it is special for many reasons, and I wasn't sure I'd convey the story in the way I wished to. Blessings, My Poet Brother! :o)
Date: 7/28/2019 6:52:00 AM
Thank you Greg for your always inventive and thoughtful take on the theme whether machine or person or memory.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/28/2019 5:07:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Craig, I knew you'd get the connection to "Old Jalopy" and the title ... a very different kind of approach for me, but a fun diversion from the norm. Right from the start with this one I wanted to tell a special story, so dug into my own memories. Thank you for appreciating its unique melancholy charm. Blessings! :o)
Date: 7/28/2019 12:04:00 AM
I enjoyed your memories Greg. Congratulations on your win! xxoo
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/28/2019 3:06:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Connie - blessings!
Date: 7/27/2019 9:46:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Gregory. Well penned.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/27/2019 10:52:00 PM
Thank you so much, Line - blessings! :o) <3
Date: 7/27/2019 6:12:00 PM
Nice one! Congratulations, Greg!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/27/2019 10:51:00 PM
Many thanks to you, Kim! :o) <3
Date: 7/27/2019 3:45:00 PM
A well penned story...of remembrance and love...deserving so much of your win.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/27/2019 10:51:00 PM
You are very kind, Jeanne, and I thank you very much for the wonderful comments! :o) <3
Date: 7/27/2019 3:33:00 PM
Greg, CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win! Janice
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/27/2019 10:50:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Janice - blessings! :o) <3
Date: 7/26/2019 6:21:00 AM
Goosebumps...is it the cool morning or the memories. Very sweet, dear Greg!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/27/2019 10:50:00 PM
Thank you so much, Kim, I so appreciate it! (Though it was probably the cool morning, lol) ;o) <3

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