Our Love Is Cursed

Such wondrous beauty held in eyes divine, 
I wish this lovely night would stay, be kind, 
So blissful are her eyes...I need no wine, 
Nothing to match her beauty can I find. 

The morning sun shall take away the night, 
And I shall wait till moon and stars arrive, 
In darkness our love hides...so harsh the light; 
Our love is cursed while unsought rivals thrive. 

But, when we die, forever we shall sleep, 
With unseen wings we leave, fly like a dove, 
Our bodies, left in ground, cruel could keep; 
We'll leave all things behind except our love. 

Now wait for death to mix in dust and sand, 
And hope we two unite in God's own land. 


May 19, 2016.
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The Shakespearean Sonnet is written predominantly in a meter called iambic pentameter, a rhyme scheme in which each sonnet line consists of ten syllables. The syllables are divided into five pairs called iambs or iambic feet. 
Include a volta- a turn or contrast in the subject of the sonnet usually using such words as yet, but, nevertheless The Shakespearean sonnet has the rhyme scheme ABAB CDCD EFEF GG.

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Date: 1/27/2021 2:18:00 PM
A beautifully penned Sonnet!
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Date: 1/27/2021 12:59:00 AM
Very good
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Date: 1/26/2021 10:56:00 AM
Thanks for sharing the information about your poem. I have always written poems, but has never paid attention to the type/form of poem it is. I am now in the process of learning about all of these needed elements and ingredients that are involved in the writing of poetry. I also enjoyed your poem and the story it tells.
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Date: 1/25/2021 1:16:00 PM
Dont know much about poetry forms metric ext as most l wrote self tort though slot of older writes lve wrote lime this one of a kind sumblime ect l like this flow you have davidscott
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Date: 1/25/2021 1:09:00 PM
I think it is nicely done. My only suggestion would be to make parts stronger by slightly different wording. For example, the first line is strong, but the second somewhat weaker.
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Date: 9/30/2020 11:35:00 AM
This poem has 1843 views but not a single comment...I wonder why?
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