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Rumi Verse: The universe is not outside of you. Look inside yourself, everything that you want you already are. ______________________________________ Phenotype-inherited flaw chimera fantasy flurry forth flamboyantly secretive, lambent, and wassail, steely eyes scan a vast gray abyss gnarled thumbs on icy glass black hooks spun by water tides ceaselessly track time, while being clever wishing for an elegant silver tongue I vociferously promote morality, excess hormones will lead to acne soon dewy dreams, and a thorny itch first crush, thrill—a mild kiss a fancy fumbled fresh, fluffy filly love then arose torn love and memory after that, work unfolded, I abandoned the nest to raise my brood humanly inspired, I flirt with betrayal, My family life and unity ruined me spiral declines with time I'm slipping irreversibly into oblivion. Assess my dalliance surely again peaks, where skeptic sight was useless wu wei-style, dolce far niente, demure, reflective virtues In desultory stances to an untrained eye, seems diaphanous I handled tasks with ebullience to re-energize and invigorate a sky full of stars sense of lush grass underfoot air is scented with jasmine, soaking it all in and letting it swirl realizing I am one with nature all my atoms are universe holograms fugacious furtive, never aghast, after hearing planetary music I feel its awe-inspiring forbearance with two powerful legs and gab freedom inspires me to waltz no challenge is too bountiful, I walk joyfully as they unfold no matter where it takes me, I'm there. I often reset my mind, over life's fine imbrication mourning icy loss of passion as a myth warmly honoring my spirit with a glass Imbibing libations in honor of death, I recede into shades of labyrinthine scan synthetic love's eerie apex plastic people whiz from afar I drink excessively to dream I felt jolted in my dizzy daze   Frames, drawings, and pots in disarray eyes pleading, walls licking fire demon-gazing bloody hands smirking faces—were once family, fearful, thwarted, distraught, duped lost innocence—a painful, ugly truth once-made hands—jealous seraphim scars cross—in quilt stitching, no beauty remains—it was stolen a wounded angel—still stands and pondering—why no one realize this? blue-tinged seashore memory, engulfing my sorrow alone wondering where years went dreams soared, days atrophied, prey ripped shaping, bribing, cheating—even for clay, tears of silence dwindled—shadowed my life. Written: January 10, 2023 For Jaymee Thomas Contest  

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Date: 1/11/2024 10:32:00 AM
What a wonderful/creative write/wonderful picture. I did enjoy reading this one. Good Luck... Have Blessed day writing away.......................
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Date: 1/11/2024 8:04:00 AM
Your poem takes no prisoners, inuding yourself. It speaks to all, regret holding the heart in its palm. It's very deep and quite foreboding. Good job.
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Date: 1/11/2024 6:30:00 AM
Wonderfully introspective, my friend. Emotions exude throughout reminiscing in life. Another fine write from you!
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Date: 1/11/2024 5:27:00 AM
such a soulful masterpiece, Sotto. The depth and emotion filled-imagery grabbed my heart. Your introspection revealed some harsh realities. I agree with Ink...negativity roams masked as family. For those who are sensitive, that reality is hard to face. I felt such sadness, grief, and anguish as I read your words. However, I imagine your retrospection has made for a wise man. I especially liked: no beauty remains—it was stolen a wounded angel—still stands and pondering—why no one realize this?
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 1/11/2024 8:36:00 AM
PS continuing...you must be an especially strong man, one who values introspection, and seeking to understand that reflection. Mean that sincerely. Have a pleasant day, your poetess friend in Texas, Sara
Date: 1/11/2024 3:46:00 AM
You’ve expressed so much in such a soul stirring manner! And the depth of your metaphors and imagery and diction is truly soul touching! I especially can resonate with this “ smirking faces—were once family,fearful, thwarted, distraught, duped lost innocence—a painful, ugly truth once-made hands—jealous seraphim scars cross—in quilt stitching,” its sad that such negativity roams masked as family, life is as such! Dr sotto! Your words emanate wisdom and light amidst darkness that floats. FAVE
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Date: 1/10/2024 6:54:00 PM
Sigh.. A deeply poignant and introspective write.. You've let your quill dwell in those onyx oceans of darkness and turmoil, which hued shades of grief in one's life and expressed those emotions in a very heart-touching way here. Dear Sotto, your wordplay is really bewitching and you've dealt with vivid complexities here, when no one notices how we are breathing in ruins of our soul, that's really hard hitting..that Rumi quote is perfect to blend with, we should search for the light within us..
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 1/10/2024 6:55:00 PM
Loved reading this.. Best wishes to you for the contest! Keep writing and shining always ~

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