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Our Breath Is Paled By The October Moon

Our breath is paled by the October moon— I'm miming prints with her glance on glass; But by window magic, don't we all swoon To this season's world so barred and so blast. I'm cloudy like the clouds, behind her pain— Her light— end of trees' blush— leaves cast Down, fall into my dangling veins. Will she chip out there sometime soon, Than fain be subtle— for playing eye games— From repeat romance, she's no hypocrite. She is all but their working boon, But sometimes— their understood innocence. Her silent voice out from my screams, croons— Our breath is paled by the October moon.

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Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 3/16/2025 4:39:00 AM

So much beauty in the moon and in your exquisite lines too Paige may your muse never run out of idea, nor lines, poetry defined when the heart is always ready to capture the next poem. Have a beautiful strong day P, xo

Silent One

Date: 10/25/2023 10:57:00 AM

You did this form very well.. the poem rhymes and flows so well.

Mat Ignacio

Date: 10/21/2023 8:47:00 PM

Delicate, subtle, rich - a pleasure

Christina Bowring

Date: 10/21/2023 1:02:00 PM

This is such a magnificent, poetic poem Paige and the title is gorgeous too! Such wonderful lines throughout. I’ve never tried this form but this is so inspiring from you. Great rhyming and you convey such emotion really well.So enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing. Hugs to you xx

Hiya Sharma

Date: 10/21/2023 6:44:00 AM

What a most intriguing and outstanding poem this is, dear Paige! I felt as if my soul got elevated to a different dimension of whimsical thoughts and depth, where my heart swirled in the beauty of your profound words.. Such astounding imageries you've presented here with heartfelt emotions.. I absolutely love this, as always, your poems truly touch my heart! "Our breath is paled by the October moon" Very palpable indeed! Keep writing and shining, hugs :)

Anonomus Scorpio

Date: 10/20/2023 4:43:00 PM

Now who's the one getting better! You are such a good soul, friend, shhhh.... don't tell anyone but a muse as well. Keep sharring the you; that you are; always! The world needs more Paiges, I am just glad I get to read this one. Hugs A.S.

Deb M

Date: 10/19/2023 3:09:00 PM

Oh my Paige what a truly beautiful poem! Love the title it drew me in….and the fact the title ends the poem is perfect!! Debx

The Situation

Date: 10/18/2023 7:03:00 PM

Dancing with the season is all I can say.

Di11y Da11y

Date: 10/17/2023 11:30:00 PM

Many beautiful lines Paige - I swooped in for 'end of trees blush' as I was trying to name that colour only yesterday :) I adore the imagery of mirror image dancing between a pane of glass (the picture that appears for me) - utterly beautiful. I love "window magic, don't we all swoon" and pictured a kind of Singing in the Rain dance routine, so happy then changes come about... great writing

Ink Empress

Date: 10/17/2023 10:55:00 PM

Very well written terza rima! I am in awe of the way you express thoughts and emotions in such a poetic and deep manner with metaphors and imagery that can get any reader to stop and grasp lil details you’ve articulated in sheer eloquence! What a profound poem my talented soul! You are truly a poetic gem! Keep shining always

Valsa George

Date: 10/17/2023 9:17:00 PM

Great diction ! October brings joy and painful memories alike. October moon shines brighter than your smile.

Sotto Poet

Date: 10/17/2023 8:03:00 PM

Nicely crafted with potent metaphors and diction.