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For Di11y Da11y Poetry Contest: I may or may not be opposed 

1 original, poem using up to 6 lines from another of your poems from any time, write a reverse/opposite poem. The idea is to be inspired by the opposite word choices and see how that shapes your poem. Feel free to tidy it up to make the language work. Include the original poem (max 6 lines - can be from a longer poem) in bold then the new opposing poem below (max 6 lines). Ensure both are your own work, with the original being a previously published one on Poetry Soup. (See title requirement below)
Any form is acceptable.

 

 

So many words lost in my soul. Yearning to bleed, but the ink is shy. It does not want to make you cry. No more words, as soul is found. No temptations when ink is brave. All it wants is to make you smile.

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Date: 12/23/2023 1:55:00 PM
Very creative and well done in the required form, my friend. Good luck! Bill
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Date: 12/22/2023 11:14:00 PM
I feel like there is so many thoughts I want to say and express my feelings, but really don't know how to put them on paper. Great write. Merry Christmas my friend.
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Date: 12/22/2023 6:09:00 PM
so touching poem SO, enjoyed, merry christmas yann
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Date: 12/22/2023 3:00:00 PM
So lovely! A fave!
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Date: 12/22/2023 1:08:00 PM
WOW!!! A very creative write with few words, yet much was said. Love It. Fav for me... Good Luck.... You made me Smile... Merry Christmas................
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Date: 12/22/2023 9:16:00 AM
They both have strong communication and assuring lines. Whichever side you're on, it's soothing. Great piece Silent.
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Date: 12/22/2023 8:56:00 AM
For now I can't write. Because its to dark. And though I know some work out their pain that way, I am afraid it ferments it in me. I have tried a time or two, but I had to stop. So I am paused by pain. Its nice to see your words though.
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Date: 12/22/2023 7:47:00 AM
This is excellent. Both the versions are equally powerful. From your first mood, I see a diametrically opposite mental disposition in what you have stated earlier ! You stand a great chance to be the winner. All the best dear friend.
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Date: 12/22/2023 4:04:00 AM
Imagine taking bits of poems, reconnecting them, and finding it makes more sense than the originals. Gonna write a classic comes to mind. In saying that, the priest has married the vicar it seems. Blame Dilly.
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Date: 12/22/2023 2:25:00 AM
It is delightful to read your work here on soup each visit. The time spent here adds a special dimension to my day. Reads like a good contender. Way to go Sara K
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Date: 12/21/2023 8:17:00 PM
I like the two depths and the depth. Honesty has a preciousness and to touch a soul without spelling it out, as precious in deed. Very creative and also wise.
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Date: 12/21/2023 6:47:00 PM
Your poem is a lovely contender for the contest, Silent One. I enjoyed both versions, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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Date: 12/21/2023 3:49:00 PM
Very pithy and lovely!
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Date: 12/21/2023 3:41:00 PM
Very clever choice of words . Love what you done here with your reverse opposite lines. Hugs
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Date: 12/21/2023 3:22:00 PM
Wow you nailed it! This is brilliant. I love both. You are so clever in your creativity. I am sure you will do well in the contest. Best wishes Silent One.
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Date: 12/21/2023 1:30:00 PM
wow, that's really well done. I really did not get the gist of how to do this, but yours is a good model for me if I choose to try this contest
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Date: 12/21/2023 1:21:00 PM
I think these lines describe the/a poet's dilemma perfectly. Good one, S O. BOL in the contest.
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Date: 12/21/2023 12:39:00 PM
You did the opposites splendidly, SO--soul is lost, souls is found--ink is shy, ink is brave...Win BIG!
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Silent One
Date: 12/21/2023 1:02:00 PM
Not sure about that, but thank you
Date: 12/21/2023 9:25:00 AM
Ah this is an interesting and very challenging form i think, or contest, it would be a bit tough to change it to a poem that means the complete opposite but you’ve done it effortlessly dear silent one! I like the ending the most here “ here is a tissue” cute and the way youv also written about how it is when silence is broken the opposite of when ink is silent and shy. Brilliant and clever. So very well delivered and you picked a brilliant one too to do this contest. Sometimes i wonder without
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Silent One
Date: 12/21/2023 1:03:00 PM
I'm not sure it's it was a good choice.. but thanks
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Date: 12/21/2023 9:27:00 AM
Metaphors or pretty words, how painful it would be for readers to read some of the trauma poets express though poetry if without metaphors and pretty words. You’ve nailed it I suppose. I loved reading this! Good to see you post. Best wishes for the contest

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