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Only Longing

I think of you sometimes - your strong arms around me - and a white cloud envelops me gleaming. At times the cloud is grey, for life rains down on me. You are not here; I have only. . . longing. Traditional style cinquain: syllable count: 2/4/6/8/2 an oldie for the Cinquain Contest of Dr.Ram Mehta; not a win (theme: Longing)

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Date: 8/17/2015 8:36:00 PM
Andrea.. a belated congrats on this wonderful winning write!
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Date: 8/7/2015 2:49:00 PM
Congrats my lovely beautiful friend on your win. Loved always,bl
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Date: 8/7/2015 7:36:00 AM
I feel something pull at my heartstrings here Andie...Congratulations! hugs!
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Date: 8/7/2015 12:55:00 AM
Well that's such a wonderful expression of longing Andrea! Top place in my eyes, congrats on big win!
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Date: 8/6/2015 7:56:00 PM
Andrea. Congratulations on your awesome win ----------SKAT
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Date: 3/5/2015 4:18:00 AM
The Cinquain form is ideal for the emotion expressed. Well done, Andrea. :) Julia
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Date: 1/2/2015 6:25:00 PM
I love this one too. It does seem he was looking for modern style. It was implied by his contest description, but was not explicit. Perhaps some other contest in the future for ours.
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Date: 12/24/2014 8:49:00 AM
Hopefully, your longing will be fulfilled this Christmas time. Love, daver
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Date: 12/21/2014 1:23:00 PM
I dig this...simple yet so complex...very good!
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Date: 12/20/2014 3:03:00 PM
Simple but effective and I like the use of the contrasting opposites in the gleaming and longing
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Date: 12/19/2014 9:53:00 AM
Love your poem, Andrea. So full of contrasting emotion between "gleaming" and "longing." Best wishes in the contest! Sandra
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Date: 12/18/2014 1:31:00 PM
Your words are as lovely as the sun breaking through the grey clouds you speak of.
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Date: 12/17/2014 7:48:00 AM
Good luck in the contest. Maybe I should write a cinquain today!
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Date: 12/16/2014 12:50:00 AM
wow beautiful write Andrea, it is full of emotions :)
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Date: 12/15/2014 1:11:00 PM
Great write... Merry Christmas from the Eastman's, Dragon, Grandpa Troll, the kids and yes... even Hubby.
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Date: 12/15/2014 7:24:00 AM
Wonderful piece of poetry, a joy to behold. Your last line echoes after the reading is finished. Great words.
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Date: 12/14/2014 10:07:00 PM
Love's contrasts in succinct syllables. Superb!
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Date: 12/14/2014 8:47:00 PM
Andrea.. Such strong emotion in so few of words.. Each one a perfect treasure and ideal fit to the whole.. Awesome!
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Date: 12/14/2014 5:33:00 PM
Stunning! A Fav!
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Date: 12/14/2014 4:34:00 PM
Reads like a winner to me..Way to go..Very emotive packed work..Thanks for the visit to my p age.Sara
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Date: 12/14/2014 11:42:00 AM
Great one Andrea darling . Love -rajat
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Date: 12/14/2014 9:47:00 AM
Perfectly done Andrea! True to theme, Gl in contest my dear!
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Date: 12/14/2014 7:51:00 AM
the whimsical thoughts in this enchant Andrea gl in contest hugs 7
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Date: 12/14/2014 7:39:00 AM
What is the real impact of longing, it's clear from your nice poem. Longing is captured here with in your excellent poem surely. Good luck in the contest. Loved always, my lovely friend,bl
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Date: 12/14/2014 6:42:00 AM
Beautiful words with a soft touching feeling which make the longing more deep and effective Andrea. I really liked the Poem and line starting 'and a white cloud envelops me gleaming'. Quite a touching writes dear friend. Hope you are keeping fine. Love and best wishes for a Merry Christmas….Ravindra K Kapoor
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