Elaine George Poet Choka

Notes About The Poem

   

                    
                             For:   Brian Strand’s Imagine Contest
                     Inspired by: Edward Hopper’s Painting: ‘AUTOMAT’.
                     Awarded:  1st Place

 

 

One Sided Love Affair - Choka In 5-7-7

.                                           What a fool I am
                                    Clinging to a broken dream
                                     That can never be the same

                                           Coming all this way
                                Thinking I could change your mind
                                   Oh! so true that love is blind

                                            Sitting here alone
                                      Starring at an empty chair
                                  That throws the truth in my face

                                         It hurts! To love you
                                 So I’ll board the morning train
                                     And forget you once again.


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                                      Written:  October 9th, 2009
                          
                             For:   Brian Strand’s Imagine Contest
                     Inspired by: Edward Hopper’s Painting: ‘AUTOMAT’.
                      1st Place

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Harry Horsman September 30, 2020 at 9:07 PM Wow, still so fresh today, this wonderful Choka, being an Elvis fan the title drew me. He would have loved this too! Elaine George October 4, 2020 at 4:28 AM hanks for stopping by and for your comments, dear Harry...Much appreciate. ~ Elaine Reply

Audrey Haick November 5, 2009 at 9:41 PM Congratulations on winning first place in Brian's contest!! Peace and love, Audrey

October 23, 2009 at 1:51 PM Congratulations on your first place finish in Brian's contest my friend. I am so happy for you. I knew this was a winner the first time I read it. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Have a wonderful weekend. Karen

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen October 23, 2009 at 5:34 AM Congratulations, Laine, on placing in Brian’s Imagine contest with this wonderful choka. The painting was inspiring. Your creativity excels. Smiles, Dane Ann

Iolanda Scripca October 22, 2009 at 1:23 PM Congratulations, Elaine. Well done. Thank you for your comments. Love, Iolanda

Brandee Augustus October 19, 2009 at 12:19 PM I totally get how this relates to the painting and your title brings all this together! Well done! Congratulations on your first place win!

Brian Strand October 19, 2009 at 8:03 AM Just to say Elaine I airmailed your prize this morning.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments and kind words today.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart October 18, 2009 at 7:04 PM Congrats on your poetry winning contest entry. Your poem is quite touching and very moving..

Barbara Gorelick October 18, 2009 at 2:39 PM I picked this painting too..you did a supurb job and deserved the win. Love, BG

Robin L. Gass October 18, 2009 at 11:11 AM Congratulations on your 1st place WIN with this wonderful piece, Lainie! Love, Robin

Doris Culverhouse October 18, 2009 at 10:46 AM Well done, great poem!! congrats on the big win!!

Carrie Richards October 18, 2009 at 8:47 AM You were able to tell a whole story, sad tale in this wonderful imginative poem! Congratulations on this winning entry, Elaine. Well deserved! ~ Love, Carrie

Carol Sunshine Brown October 18, 2009 at 6:04 AM Congratulations on your first place win in Brian's Imagine Contest Lainie. Love, Carol

Donna Golden October 18, 2009 at 1:15 AM Congratulations on your FIRST place win, Lainie! Hugs, Donna

Brian Strand October 18, 2009 at 1:09 AM Congrats on your success in my contest Elaine.Rgds Brian.My latest contest'Poet Laureate' is now open.I will forward you prize in the coming week.

Kim Hilliker October 17, 2009 at 1:41 PM Wonderful Choka, Elaine! Best of luck in the contest.

Jay Loveless October 16, 2009 at 10:02 AM i feel ya. careing abotu someone who has someone else never works, even if they care about you too, if they arent willing to have you and not the other person....well okay technically im the other person and not the gf....anyways if the person you care about cant leave their gf/bf for you then its gonna lead to nothing but people getting hurt....this sucks...well semi talking about my situation lol your poem is awesome anyways keep it up -raiin

Brian Strand October 15, 2009 at 7:47 AM Thank you for your encouragement today Elaine.Also to say,thank you for your mail, I airmailed my chapbook to you this morning.Rgds Brian

Daver Austin October 13, 2009 at 7:40 AM I love this form. It hits the area between haiku and tanka. By the way, as usual, I love your writing. Love, daver

John Freeman October 12, 2009 at 6:13 PM Beautiful Choka Elaine. Good luck in the contest. Sincerely, Love, moses

Sara Kendrick October 12, 2009 at 6:53 AM Good luck in Brian's contest. I love the presentation of the idea. It is amazing how many different thoughts came from the same pictures. Thanks for the comments on my work. Keep writing. Sara

Doris Culverhouse October 11, 2009 at 7:03 PM nicely penned, Ilike thiside you choose...it could go alot of ways.

Robin L. Gass October 11, 2009 at 3:57 PM This is such a beautifully written Choka, Lainie. I love your view on this lovely and intriquing painting! Good luck in Brians' contest! Love, Robin

October 11, 2009 at 3:14 PM Interesting view on the painting. You're words make the scene come to life. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for your kind words on my poem. Have a good week. Karen

Nicole Sharon Brown October 11, 2009 at 2:24 PM I sure does hurt! I can relate to this! Preach on, sister. Write on, sister.

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